Female Opinion Needed....

Can any female (or male,but I prefer a females perspective) please read my poem "My Sweet Taboo" and let me know how you view it.

It was written by me for a girl I have been secretly in love with for 4 years, and she asked me to write a poem about her...so I wrote this,but never gave it to her.She seems to have forgotten I was supposed to,so I just never brought it up again.

A while ago, I worked up the nerve to ask her if she liked me more than a friend,in a casual way,and she said no...that we were just friends....

Should I give it to her regardless?

(I know this normally would go under -request to read-, but I feel that the comments will help me in my LOVE dilema......)

so then y give it 2 her?

because I would love to know how SHE feels about it....but I am too nervous to give it to her.

well, ill read it but if its got to do with loving her, it may make her feel a lil awkward after, im not sure. ill tell after ive read it...

First, it is a lovely poem and your descriptive language was delightful.

And please don't take offense, but there are three minor technical mistakes that deserve to be corrected:
Line 11 suns > sun's
Line 22 mornings > morning's
Line 47 breath taking > breathtaking

I know you have done some agonizing over whether to present this girl with your poem. There is always some element of risk in revealing deeply held feelings for someone with whom you have shared a close friendship. I can only say how I would feel if I were her

Personally, I would be extremely flattered if a guy ever gave me such a beautifully crafted poem as this. You describe your heartfelt affection and longing for this girl in the poem. But you have also taken care to assure her that you have no intent of putting any pressure on her. That should make her feel at ease regardless of whether she wants to explore the next level or chooses to just remain friends with you.

You say that you did ask her about her feelings, to which she replied that you were just friends. Her answer would relate to the past and the present time frame. That is why I would suggest that you change lines 77 and 78 to reflect the future tense instead of past and present tense.

Perhaps:
am I just a good friend > will I be your good friend
or have I always been more? > or have a chance to be more?

And one additional suggestion: for line 80:
but I just need to know… > but I’d just like to know.
I think this change would create a less exigent, less urgent nuance.

I hope you will keep us posted here on the outcome.

¡Buena suerte!