A call to write challenge (Kyrielle Sonnet)

A call to write your best Kyrielle Sonnet. I want all those who enjoy the craft of poetry to attempt a Kyrielle Sonnet and see how well they can do at writing one. Writing a Kyrielle Sonnet is something I wanted to try, because it presents a challenge and I decided to post a challenge surrounding it, so that others may do so and challenge themselves, as well.

Kyrielle Sonnet - Level 3 (challenging)

The Kyrielle Sonnet is a 14 line poem, consisting of 3 rhyming quatrain stanza and a non-rhyming couplet. The Kyrielle Sonnet has a refrain normally, the last line of each stanza. Keeping with French tradition, linking the last line with the first line, the ending couplet is composed by putting the 1st line of the poem with the last line of the poem.

Form:

1st stanza - AabB
2nd stanza - ccbB
3rd stanza - ddbB
4th stanza - AB

or

1st stanza - AbaB
2nd stanza - cbcB
3rd stanza - dbdB
4th stanza - AB

http://www.writing.com/main/books/entry_id/393477

A Kyrielle Sonnet consists of 14 lines (three rhyming quatrain stanzas and a non-rhyming couplet). Just like the traditional Kyrielle poem, the Kyrielle Sonnet also has a repeating line or phrase as a refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet consists of only eight syllables. French poetry forms have a tendency to link back to the beginning of the poem, so common practice is to use the first and last line of the first quatrain as the ending couplet. This would also re-enforce the refrain within the poem. Therefore, a good rhyming scheme for a Kyrielle Sonnet would be:

AabB, ccbB, ddbB, AB -or- AbaB, cbcB, dbdB, AB.

http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/kyriellesonnet.html

A Mind With a Heart of its Own

I’ve discovered that I possess
Passion as wild as a cyclone
Also mine, I must now confess,
A mind with a heart of its own

Rationality out the door
My caution to the wind has blown
This I can no longer ignore:
A mind with a heart of its own

Each time your lips collide with mine
Logic runs to places unknown
Did I receive by God’s design
A mind with a heart of its own

I’ve discovered that I possess
A mind with a heart of its own

I must agree with Bob Ann. Nice job!!!

thanks guys. I wasn't too fond of it when I finished it, but it's growing on me! :)

Very nice!! Here's my attempt:

Autumn's Song

Drift across the grains of Time
To the sway of a crystal chime
With the silver notes of the night
Dance beneath the Autumn twilight

Between the orange and red hues
That the dusk will quietly use
Take a breath of peaceful respite
Dance beneath the Autumn twilight

Hear the song so calm and yet free
The siren call of serenity
The sofest of the birds take flight
Dance beneath the Autumn twilight

Drift across the grains of Time
Dance beneath the Autumn twilight

Wonderful Kim, great job!!!

Here my Effort:

Ecstasy!!!

Rapture, is your heavenly hue.
Your presence is such jubilee.
Rhapsody, the sheer thought of you.
Nothing matches your ecstasy.

Your, sweet comeliness, thrills me, so.
Pleasure, is your serenity.
Where’re, you lead, I’d gladly go.
Nothing matches your ecstasy.

Your beauty is, such resplendence,
Uplifting, your mere company.
Rapturous, your very essence,
Nothing matches your ecstasy.

Rapture, is your heavenly hue.
Nothing matches your ecstasy.

I hope you all enjoy it and looking to see others try this format, as well.

Wonderfully penned Rohit. Although you did not venture into realm of the traditional 8 syllables, it was still a superb write. Magnificently penned!!

The fact that you didn't venture into the specific syllable metering is fine though Rohit, being as this is an informal challenge. It's more a call to write than anything and you wrote really well. You can work on mastering the meter later.

Here`s my attempt:

The Rivalry of Dream and Day

Adrift in streams of silver light
an endless silent summer night.
Engulfed by bliss that dawn will slay.
The rivalry of dream and day.

So cold the tears I weep for thee
in winters cruel depravity.
I feared she`d reach my sleep, but nay!
The rivalry of dream and day

So lief I dream that still, thy pace,
surpasses heaven`s in the chase,
yet as I wake, all dreams decay,
The rivalry of dream and day.

Adrift in streams of silver light.
The rivalry of dream and day.

Wonderful job EOB, Another EOB signature classic, Superb work!!!

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the moon travels across the sky
in the middle of the night way up high
shining on leaves that the trees keep
watching as the world is asleep

grey clouds that no one may see
hide the glittering stars dear to me
theartening the moon as they creep
watching as the world is asleep

the water sprinkles down like tears
making pure the atmospheres
no one may see the sky weep
watching as the world is asleep

the moon travels across the sky
watching as the world is asleep

I loved them all!!! I really really enjoy this form, thanks so much for exposing us to it. The poems are so great ^_^

The Bitterness of Trees

My dreams of late are filled with grief.
I see in them a lonesome leaf
afloat within a silent breeze.
So deep the bitterness of trees.

`Twas not the leaf for which I cared,
but all the trees, that sadly stared.
I saw in them, what no one sees
So deep the bitterness of trees.

To live and grow upon their tomb,
what dreadful life, what bitter doom.
I heard them weeping in the breeze
So deep the bitterness of trees

My dreams of late are filled with grief.
So deep the bitterness of trees.

~Beyond A Cover~

I am but a book,
a book beyond a cover.
If you step inside my cover and look,
a whole new world you will discover.

At times the words do not make sense,
and at times I stutter and stumble.
Sometimes my thoughts are too immense,
and my mind and body crumble.

Sometimes my pages are tattered and torn,
from issues in the past.
You should understand why my cover is worn,
because of all the problems I've had to outlast.

But this is all fine, as long as you see,
that when you look past my cover there is much more to me.

~Sean Dohr~

^Not the exact format, but close...just wanted to share this with you guys!!!

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/life/poems.php?id=678966

Prophecy

The song of tears washed away
Withered to a woeful dismay
Drench the world in a cascade
Where heaven's last light laid

Mournful voyage to all man kind
Enlightment perish in dying mind
Drifting from where love was made
Where heaven's last light laid

Vast oceans drown in pouring blood
Cities conquered by mightly flood
Defenseless against enemies raid
Where heaven's last light laid

A Song of tears Washed away
Where heaven's last light laid

When's the dead line?

I don't think there is a deadline... it's just something to do. But if you read back through the posts and look at the dates, this thread was started March 23... poems were posted and comments made until March 31... and then it sat dormant until May 7.

This is not a contest, so you are more than welcome to write one if you want.