Need help with a stanza that isn't flowing!!!

He dumped you for the stupidest reason of them all
You would give up
What you worked so hard to keep
Something he would understand if he cared about you enough
AHH I cant get this to flow. Any suggestions?

Maybe breaking up the longer lines :S

I know but im trying to get the same message across with less words...it isnt working out....

ya but "up" has to be the last word of the second line for the rhyme scheme.....thanx though

awwww thanx so much bob...now wheres that window.......

lol i see you have already had help good luck with the rest on the poem

^

LMAO

Don't you realize how old this thread is? And do you not also realize that the problem was solved during the merry month of march?

Sheesh, people need to learn how to be attentive.

He dumped you for the stupidest reason
Of them all
You would give up
What you worked so hard to keep
Something he would understand if he cared about you enough
To not disrupt your heart
And now you have had enough....

Um, you know, quite frankly, this doesn't have to rhyme.
The words alone sound good enough.

//T.L.//