Tempting Titles - POEMS!!!!

Scoring Procedure

Use whatever scoring procedure you like in order to rank the poems you are judging from first to fourth place. In the form below, simply put a 1, 2, 3 & 4 next to which poem you would choose for which place.

When you’ve made your decision, copy and paste the following form into an email, fill in the blanks and SEND IT TO ME VIA EMAIL. After I receive results from all judges, I will display the winners. In the event of a tie, the poet that received the most “first place” votes will win.

HAPPY JUDGING!!!! Good Luck everybody!!

(Please note, Poem #1 is not necessarily the person I listed first when the title assignments were given)

Scoring Form:

Judge Name:
Poem Title:

Poem #1:
Poem #2:
Poem #3:
Poem #4:

Title: The Burden of Truth
Judged by: Judges 1-4

Poem #1 by Kristen
She didn't want it to be true
.. You were such good friends ..
She wanted the burdens to mend
All she wanted was to be with you
 
Wasn't sure just what to do
Your words always have to contend
She didn't want it to be true
.. You were such good friends ..
 
You walked right out of her view
Was your friendship all pretend?
Screaming into the night; why did it have to end
She knew deep down she had lost you
She didn't want it to be true

A rondel has the rhyme scheme:
ABba abAB abbaA
Capitals are refrains

Title: The Burden of Truth
Judged by: Judges 1-4

Poem #2 - Bob
My name provided the perfect initials
for the way I lived my life
lying about who I really was
lessened painful burdens of strife

selling a mythical child
was an easy thing to do
for not too many people
would ever see from my view

the truth was never in me
and I saw no need for it
it is so easy to say, "be honest"
when you aren't the one getting hit

so I lied, and lied even more
until one day I became lost
in a nightmarish journey
in which deceit is tossed

to and fro, back and forth
there was never any proof
of that child's mere existence
held in the burden of truth.......

Title: The Burden of Truth
Judged by: Judges 1-4

Poem #3 by Holly
Caught in the turmoil
of drugs and ecstasy
Just another club kid
longing to be free

from the threat of normalcy
haunting every day
chasing indifference with
each line of Special K

Swirling into madness
thoughts no longer clear
watching with a smile
as the world disappears

Unable to accept that
there's no real escape
drugs numb the pain
but life they can't reshape

Denying the need
as you crave another line
while fragments of the truth
creep into your mind

Pushing them away
the choice is not to see
when the burden of addiction
becomes reality

Title: The Burden of Truth
Judged by: Judges 1-4

Poem #4 by Sunny
Truth weighs heavy upon my chest
rocks which stack, one by one
this process started many years ago
at an age when hiding begun

countless times evil spats
hatred for my eyes
contempt for a lost soul
a fake beauty who cries

lies which echoed truth
mixture too confusing
lost within the thickets
a girl not so amusing

tears for who I truly am
beg to reach the top
so they may flow freely
soul aches for me to stop

people love my smile of joy
I remain sealed within my shell
they don't know the woman inside
burden I call "truthful hell"

you may walk away
from what you read within
yet I will cleanse this dark nightmare
the day I release this wretched sin

The Winner of "The Burden of Truth" was unanimous!!!

Congratulations, BOB!!!!!!!

Great work everyone else! You 4 may now post your poems with your others! (And I will post mine as well!) :)

The next two sets of poems will be coming up soon!

YAY GREMLIN BOB!

//Ari\\

Way to go Bob!!! WooHoo! Congrats to all who participated as well!

Congrats. AnnMarie, I should have mine later today ready to send to you.

Congratulations Bob

Yay bob!

~Jacklyn

GO BOBBY!!!! Congratulations! Loved the poem:)

OK.. Here is the next set...

Judges, please refer to the first post in this thread for scoring procedures.

Title: A Whiter Shade of Pale
Judged by: Judges 5-8

Poem #1 by Beyond
Stark pale moon
Illuminating the sky
With a placid veil
On this mellow night

"So maybe we can
Send letters to each other
Once in a while..."
Clogged, gagging the words
Pseudo-confidently
Ripe with the wrath of time
Like the autumn gold
Waiting to come crashing home.

Illuminating the sky
On this mellow night
Soon to be unveiled
As your face details
A whiter shade of pale

Title: A Whiter Shade of Pale
Judged by: Judges 5-8

Poem #2 by Kaylee
Speak of nothing but the
rampant thunderstorm
brewing in my heart.

Screeching winds touching
the edges of the startled
window glass pane.

Rippling water churning
the misery embedded in
the sands of my heart.

Against the mahogany
bookcase lined with knowledge
titles printed in gold,

lies the hourglass of life
tilting on the rocking shelf
I forgot to tighten.

The foundation which
shaped the person I am
slowly slipping beneath the Earth.

Winter snow divulging
classified information
buried beneath these vacant eyes.

But speak not of this budding
storm that threatens the
Spring flowered life.

For if you shall travel
deeper into the subconscious,
you might dislike your reflection.

Young, though I am, I have
picked many flowers dying
from the same tempest.

Pounded by hailstones
raining down from the heavens
you have destroyed.

My mind in tatters,
thoughts exposed attached
to flagpoles, I see your face and...

I turn a whiter shade of pale

Title: A Whiter Shade of Pale
Judged by: Judges 5-8

Poem #3 By Ken (**Misunderstood**)
I couldn't see through my love for you
I was becoming feeble in the mind
You were the god I bowed too
you were my golden shrine

The love that we once shared
was as gentle as the breeze
Now that it is over with
it’s rougher than the churning seas

Like a ship upon the waters
surely to someday sink
Like the love that doesn't last forever
sometimes gone within a blink

My body has become
A whiter shade of pale
From losing all the people I love
and all of the betrayal

Title: A Whiter Shade of Pale
Judged by: Judges 5-8

Poem #4 by Jacklyn
Looking upon the pale horizon
where my fingertips once rested
beautiful curves, yet so innocent
with a soft and smooth surface

My soul which was once restless
learned of peace within passion
Stripped of masks and all clothing
blankets of body heat from another

My midnight hands danced upon her
As two tongues collided, becoming one
no disturbances, only natures music
two bodies tangled desiring more

Her pale hands find comfort upon me
A new day breaks across the horizon
a sun shines on her pale beauty
My restless soul has found its peace

OK.. Here is the last set...

Judges, please refer to the first post in this thread for scoring procedures.

Title: Come In, Stranger
Judged by: Judges 9-12

Poem #1 by Amanda Bee
Trying my hardest not to cry
It was exactly one year ago, today
I had kissed your perfect lips goodbye
Whilst you pleaded with me to stay

It was exactly one year ago, today
When I walked right out your door
Whilst you pleaded with me to stay
Claimed I didn't love you anymore

When I walked right out your door
Swore I'd never step back in
Claimed I didn't love you anymore
Your scent still lingering upon my skin

Swore I'd never step back in
Yet, here I stand in your doorway
Your scent still lingering upon my skin
'Come in, stranger' is all you say

Yet, here I stand in your doorway
Went full circle, right back to start
'Come in, stranger' is all you say
No use trying to argue with my heart

Went full circle, right back to start
I had kissed your perfect lips goodbye
No use trying to argue with my heart
Trying my hardest not to cry

*PANTOUM: A poem in a fixed form, consisting of a varying number of four-line stanzas with lines rhyming alternately; the second and fourth lines of each stanza are repeated to form the first and third lines of the succeeding stanza, with the first and third lines of the first stanza forming the second and fourth of the last stanza, but in reverse order, so that the opening and closing lines of the poem are identical .

Title: Come In, Stranger
Judged by: Judges 9-12

Poem #2 JustAri
In the wake of my Naproxen lullaby
An interruption is gradually lured
The shadow of a stranger
Drowns silently at my door

The lurking iris swivels
In crazed curiosity, I imagine
His cavernous pupils contracting livid images
Of what he fears could come to happen

A prisoner of this solitude
I have yet to present my white flag
It will not be hanging out of my window
Nor will it be stuffed through the cracks

The hourglass on the wall
Shivers down to the last grain of sand
What was once ample time is in the aftermath of “too late”
No more chances to make amends

I'm much too lazy to turn over
The hourglass to buy more time
There's no use in attempting anymore
If he's going to leave me out on a line

In the wake of my Naproxen lullaby
An interruption is gradually lured
The shadow of a stranger
Drowning silently at my door

Title: Come In, Stranger
Judged by: Judges 9-12

Poem #3 Joe (Italian Stallion)
Working in the yard
With nothing to do
Along comes this saint bernard
He stops and then he pursues

Crouching down like a dastard
I walk over to only find a bruise
As much as I want to disregard
I refuse

I walk closer
and try to pick him up
but he growls like I'm an abuser
I try not to get to close-up

For he may accuse
He lets out a yaup
So why do I prolong?
I give a yell, and say, "Come In, Stranger."

Stay strong
For you are out of danger
It won't take long
Until I can call you my own

Title: Come In, Stranger
Judged by: Judges 9-12

Poem #4 Kenshin
Come in, stranger,
Don't be shy,
I'll take away from this world,
To a place no one can see us.

Feel at home,
With the rest of the angels
No one here to harm you,
None to ever kill you.

Come in, Stranger,
Don't be shy,
Let's live together,
In this place called Heaven.

The angels are waiting for us,
Making sure we'll never be sad again,
Don't you think this place is good?
Don't you think this is where you truly belong?

Come in, Stranger,
Don't be shy,
This is a place with no sins,
Just peaceful and filled with love.

We'll be your new family,
Away from all the harm,
So come in, stranger,
Don't be shy,
We'll always be together,
And you'll always be in my heart.

The Winner of "Come In, Stranger" was Pinch Hitter Amanda Bee!!!

Congratulations!!!!!

Great work everyone else, you 4 may now post your poems.

I'm still waiting on results from one judge for "A Whiter Shade of Pale"

YAY good job Amanda Bee! congrates.

~Jacklyn

Go Amanda Bee lol

Congratulations Amanda Bee

Congratulations To all the winners, this was a fun contest. :)

well there's still one to be decided.

~Jacklyn

WOOHOOOO!!!! YAY AMANDA!

Lol, i knew she'd get it. ^_^

//Ari\\

Still waiting on that 4th judge for "A Whiter Shade of Pale"

The first poem only had 3 judges voting, but even if the fourth judge would have voted Bob 4th place, he still would have won. The second poem had all four judges voting... but was in the same situation... even if Amanda would have and a 4th place vote from that last judge, she still would have won.

This last one is a LOT closer and the last judge's votes are very important (I've already emailed that judge, so hopefully the votes will be in soon!)

they are all good entries i have read all the poems submitted. i am quiet excited about this.

~Jacklyn

WOOOO HOOOO! YEA! Thanks you guys:)

*does a little curtsey...dips too low...falls on her face...*

The results of "A Lighter Shade of Pale" were VERYYY close!

The score was a tie, but as explained in the beginning, a tie goes to the person with more first place votes. So, the winner is: JACKLYN!!!

Congratulations!!!!!!!

Great work everyone else. You may now post your poems.

~~~~~

Thanks to everyone that participated in this challenge!

Congratulations JACKLYN!!!

sluvious you are right...punctuality is not my strong point. LOL!!!

And in honor of my award I say to my students school's out...LET'S PARTY!!! Ha! Ha!

Congrats Amanda and Jacklyn! Awesome stuff....

wow good poems

who ever i was tied with congrates to you. i read all the poems and they were all good in my eyes. thanks though, i am pretty proud of that poem because that title was hard!

~Jacklyn