I have a note for a girl I love, please tell me what you think

I wrote this poem as a note to a girl (yeah i know, highschool stuff right? lol) anyway, it's called
My definition of love... and I hope you'll comment and rate, and if you'd like, i'll do the same, thanks in advance

hiya, i've commented on your poem, it was real good
would you comment on my newest one "I' sorry Grandad" please
thanks
jemma xxx