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One Of the First poems that I ever wrote. And I've had it on different sites. but They've all came up different. I really need your help. Is this good or not :-\

The bright lights are coming closer
Its starting to blind my eyes
I feel a hard blow to my chest
I hear loud hurtful cries

I’m on the solid road
My own blood is all around me
What is going on?
Someone please tell me

It all goes black once more
I feel my body rise
I open my eyes to see my self
In a casket, and I hear more cries

My body is as white as a ghost
It looks so helpless and weak
I look up to see my daddy
He’s crying too much to speak

I reach out to touch him
I feel nothing and neither does he?
I myself starts to cry
Daddy I love you I scream!

I have so much to live for
Why did god have to take my life?
This doesn’t make any sense to me
He didn’t even let me fight

My daddy goes to my casket
And kisses me softly on the head
I run up to him to say I’m sorry
“I love you pumpkin, he says.

I love you too I scream
This just isn’t right
I’m’ not supposed to die yet
8 years isn’t a life

I just can’t go yet daddy
Grandma is up there right?
Oh man that stinks badly
She never lets me stay up at night

Grandpa is up there too though
Maybe he’ll play with me
Last time I seen him he was sick
But god will make him better for me

Ohhh yea, he’s up there too
I wonder what he is like
Daddy I don’t wanna go yet
What if he doesn’t read me stories at
night?

You’re the only one that tied my shoes
perfectly
What if God doesn’t do it that way?
Daddy this just isn’t far
Don’t I get a say?

Please take my hand
And don’t ever let me go
I’m just not set to leave you
I may never be ready though

I look around for mommy
But she’s no where to be seen
I think God took her too that night
But I can’t find her, where is she?

I glance over at another box
Everyone is gathered around
She looks so beautiful and still
That no one is making a sound

A tear falls from my eye
I look deep in your quiet face
I know that God has taken you
and he’s taken you to a better place

This just isn’t fair God
I sit and pray on my knees
Please just let me stay with daddy
I love him he needs me

Now that mommy’s gone
And you took her away
Daddy has to be alone
For the rest, of his tearful days

I run back over to you daddy
But you just don’t know I’m there
I don’t know what to do
Daddy, I’m really scared

Why aren’t you listening?
I’m beginning to get mad
I’m right here in front of you
so please don’t look so sad

I glance up to see a light
A voice saying its time
“NO!” I scream I can’t leave my daddy
I’m all he has in life

A hand reaches out to me
I tremble, as he takes my own
“No Daddy! Help me!!”
I don’t want to leave you here alone

You look up as if you know
I’m going to leave
I love you Pumpkin
But please don’t forget me

Daddy, I won’t I promise
I’ll always remember you
I’ll be waiting by the golden gates
I must go now daddy, I love you

oh mi god!!!! i am just so amazed. that poem is not only good, its amazing, and so powerful. its filled with such raw emotion. i love it!!!! great work.
xnikkix