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I'm holding a contest- yay..

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Please read ALL Directions, rules and information before entering,, i dont want this contest filled with poems that poeple go and submit to every consest.

This is a style and topic poetry contest.. what you have to do is choose a topic and style and combine the two to form one poem(so a poem in the one style about one topic)

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there is only going to be **10** spots available because there will be 5 styles and 5 topics and there needs tobe some breathing room..

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EACH TOPIC AND STYLE MAY ONLY BE
USED BY TWO PEOPLE MAX!!!!

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if you reserve you will only have 2 days to complete your poem, if it is not finished.. your spot can be taken by some one else..
-------Ooh, and i doubt any of you have old poems that fit in this criteria, but if you think you may, then pm me with your poem and i will 'examine' it to see if its worthy.. lol

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This is suppossed to be a challenge!!
it is suppossed to be hard. which means, the prizes have sky rocketed!! Yay... it will be worth it for you to enter... everyone wil recieve some kind of prize.. =]

Styles, Topics and other information in the following posts to PLEASE SCROLL DOWN!!!!!

AFTER YOU"VE READ ALL THE INFO--
If you have any more Q's Please ask!!!!!

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Do we choose the style and topic ourselves? I'm confused. Cause you havn't really posted any..

yay this was a long message. =]

**********Topic Choices!!!!!

1-Waterfall(s)(either as a metahor, like being with you is like rafting off a waterfall. its unknown- or as the picture in the poem.. or anything else u may have as an idea- just ask)
2.House arrest(either being under house arrest, or this being a metaphor.. etc)
3.Waterfront Murder(on a beach or lakeside or in a river)
4.Screaming (for any reason- but the word scream(in any tense) must be used at least 3 times.
5. A pegasus(winged/flying horse)

i know that these topics are weird.. but thats the challenging part.

**also. these dont have to be exactly what the poem is aobut, but they have to be used in it, either as a strong reference, or theme, or as the main 'character' or object, but it doesnt have to be a poem strictly about a pegasus, ir could be about how someone feels like a pegusus w/o wings..

But if your unsure about if yours is right, please feel free to ask!!!!!!!!!!

Reservations and completions---
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Styles-
Naani
Triolet Lush.Fcuk-*
Etheree xdarksuicidex & Mooie Ogen
Sedoka Bri.
Septolet Bryan

Topics-
Waterfalls Bri.
House Arrest
Waterfront Murder Lush.Fcuk-*
Screaming xDarkSuicidex && Bryan
Pegasus

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4.. or 5.. complete,,

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..Well, I'll do a Triolet, That's for sure. :]

&& That's alright.

Also--More info. i like sad poems.. and dark poems.. so if you do a sad or dark ill prolly like it better!!)

Kay, If I can refer waterfalls to tears then I'll do waterfalls in a Triolet. Lol..

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Yup. I'm starting on it now. :]

I won't have it done until tomorrow though, cause I gotta get some sleep. It's nearly 3am here. :]

Sure both of you are reserved.. you have 2 days!!

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If you have any suggestions on how i couldve run this better so my next contest will be better- besides me posting the information quicker and more smoothly-- please PM me with suggestions!!!

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I call Screaming as an Etheree... Give me two days and I should have it...

I already started writing a poem like this...So it gives me excuse to finish it. ^.^ Thanks

And great idea!

xDarkSuicidex

Ur reserved.. dang this is going faster than i thought..

1st off -Bri. i loved you poem..

unfortunatley this wasnt the correct format-

The Sedoka is an unrhymed poem made up of two three-line katauta with the following
syllable counts: 5/7/7, 5/7/7.
Your syllables were -

Like a waterfall (5)
Tears cascade down rosey red cheeks (8)
Drowning in poison (5)

Collapsing brick wall (5)
Soul turning into black ash (7)
Descending raindrops (5)

Your welcome to give it another shot if you like.. just replace the one u already submitted..

thats ok, i've done that before.. now what is that style called.....
you wrote two human haikus, well nto really cause the one had eight.. but i think that was what you were writing..

yeah, thats correct, still good poem!! A great start to this contest!

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*reserved.
2days...

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Any more for today?

Please?

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Can i please reserve a spot for a Triolet?

Scream {Etheree}

Scream
Dreamer
Cry to me;
Do not be scared.
Please; scream your heart out,
Let us see you burn, cry,
Let's see your burning soul die.
We are watching your every move -
Passing you by to watch you closely
Not letting you out of our only sight.

Scream as loud as you can my dear dreamer,
Hold on tightly to what you now have;
Now never let go of your dreams.
But - scream as loud as you can,
Listen to your heartbeat;
Hurt yourself dreamer.
Let your heart go,
I dare you,
Dreamer,
Scream.

xDarkSuicidex

--It's not my best, but this was harder to write than I thought it would be. But there you are! Great contest idea, once again! =]

Lush. you cant just reserve the style you must reserve a topic to go along with it.

xDarkSuicidex- I believe you have some lines that are too long/short,.,,., please review you poem and recount.. ( i will try to post your syllable count asap)

Scream 1
Dreamer 2
Cry to me; 3
Don't be scared. *3* try changing it to 'do not'
Please; scream your heart out, 5
Let us see you burn, cry, 6
Let us see your burning soul die. **8 change let us to let's
We are watching your every move -8
Passing you by to watch you closely 9
Never letting you out of our only sight. 11** i dont know any easy solutions

Scream as loud as you can my dear dreamer, 10
Hold on tightly to what you now have; 9
Now never let go of your dreams. 8(although i think it should be- dont ever)
But - scream as loud as you can, 7
Listen to your heartbeat; 6
Hurt yourself dreamer. 5
Let your heart go, 4
I dare you, 3
Dreamer, 2
Scream. 1

I wont be back on tonight or prolly tomorrow, so if you have any reservations you can post but your time limit wont start until i reply and it wont be reserved...

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Please feel free to write a poem, but please do not submit it!!

i wont be able to change the stats!!!!!!!!!

Sorry about that.. I've been distracted tonight but I wanted to get it done. Thanks for pointing out the mistakes, helping me, and trying to fix it. After everything tonight, I really appreciate it.

I fixed it..It should be correct now. ((But hey, it was really hard to write!))

xDarkSuicidex

No Prob.. thats what i'm here for.

I was wondering if you guys think it'd be a good idea if when theyre all done (or the 14th) if i should make suggestions.. then have you resubmit(with or with out using my ideas/help) lateron?

Good or bad idea?

**i've not held a 'real' contest before(only simple title ones)

Okay, waterfront murder.

jhust cause i love you-and this contest, u two are reserved!!

(actually its only cause i had time ot go on today!!))

Tell us how to fix it, in my opinion... It'll make our poems stronger and I'd love to hear critic...Though I really want to see who wins. ^.^

xDarkSuicidex

I won't be able to finish mine untill tomorrow... but if that's too long then you can unreserve me if you like.

-In The Blackened Water, Widows Weep.-

In the blackened water, widows weep;
Enticed by lovers shattered lullabies,
Praying to God, their souls to keep.
In the blackened water, widows weep;
Crying - - kiss their eyes and lay them to sleep,
Where bullets were lost in their husbands eyes.
In the blackened water, widows weep;
Enticed by lovers shattered lullabies.

© Jenna Elphick
September 5, 2006.

**I know that it sounds off topic, but it is about a waterfront murder. It's about war widows, hence the blackened water and the widows weeping, and the bullets lost in their husbands eyes, and yeah. I like to write every poem with a deeper meaning, but if this one doesn't work for this contest, then let me know and i will re-write one. =) **

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I've decided not to openly critique all your poems for no other reason than i will have no time- i know i am selfish- because school's begun and i have many things i have to do and have no time after school. like at all. instead i will choose 5 finalists, openly critque theirs in another thread. after they recieve their invite that they have been chosen they will then adjust their poems-or not- to my comments.. i will give a week after i critique to re-do/fix your poem.. after of which i will re-read, then judge and announce the winners.

any problems with this- tough!

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Byran- Please re-read your poem and the guidelines for the Septolet.. Your poem is suppossed to create a picture.. like in the examples.. when your poem is read the reader should see a picture. or scene. which yours does not..
Please try again or you can drop out if you cannot.

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Mooie- Just me wondering- im not that good at like interpreting poems. lol. but correct me if im wrong about your poem-(exact meaning not like deep thought)

the swans are the 'essense of beauty'. right? and the pegusus 'the king' bows its own head because of its beauty, howit is magnificent, in its subtle beauty..

*cough**cough*whats the 3rd line have to do with the poem.. it dont get how it fits in...*hacks up a lung*

*sniffle*basicly i think this poem is confusing..*sneeze* -sssh- im not cheating and giving critique.. =]] just i like have a cold..

*cough**cough* i think that confusing poems should have an explanation of some sort*cough**cough*

i need some tylenol flu.. =]]

sssssssssssssssssssssssshhh.. its my contest.. i do what i want. =]]

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Nat.uh.lee- tommorrow will be fine because the interest has seemed to die down.. lol. but if not in by tomorrow-if i get the opp. to get on- then i will reopen your subjects.. ok? but if i dont get on tomorrow(fri night.. =]]) then /please/ have it done by sat. fri preferribly.. but im nice. .

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you can fix up / change your poems as much as you like during this conest.. but please tell me.. =]]

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any one else interested?

anyone...?

oh srry dat i kinda did stole ur idea, but i didn't do it in purpose that's just wat i was feeling. well urs is more challenging about the whole "other styles" anyways, good luck in here! hope more ppl will come!

PEOPLE WHO'VE ENTERED******

Please read above posts, i wrote about your poems.

PLEASE ENTER-other People.. =]

Come On.. this contest needs some more entrees!!

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xDarkSuicidex