Screaming.

NO THIS WILL NOT BE ON THE SECOND PAGE!!! Come on people!! the rewards will be excellent!!

im in a poem-y mood!!

Flaunt your best stuff!!!!

Come On!!

-Flaunts her poem-

Yessshhhh... Lol

Bump =) Cha.

xDarkSuicidex

by fri people.. if i've no more entrees or reservations ill proceed from there.

this makes me sad .. and you people whove already entered pleeeease read my above posts^^^

**Th**

Didn't I already read the messages? I just want to make sure... I think I did everything you told me to though. Take care. Hope all is getting well.

xDarkSuicidex

Yes^ yours is fine, i was refering to bryan and mooie ogen,. hrm.. well since theres only.. lemme count.. 5 entrees i think im not going to actually jugde this. tis a pity. i think i will just rrc hrmm 8 poems each.. and if you would like i will fully and openly(or through email) critique 1 of your poems(either the one from this poem or another.. )

-sigh- so much for a tough challenge.. i guess it was too tough for most.. =[

Bryan- just get it fixed by saturday. =]

Thank you all for entering. im sorry it didnt turn out to be a crazy death match competition. -sigh-

(ps although i doubt there will be.. if any one else chooses to enter,, just doit by tomorrow. =])

Awe I want placings! =[

But if not, I'd love critizm on the poem I wrote for you, anyways. Thanks.

Good luck... And this was a wonderful contest.

xDarkSuicidex

well umm i guess i could place u guys.. but it wont any effect on the 'prizes' or reward. sorry. (u should be happy =P)

xDSx- im working on ur rrc's. ive got like 4 done so far today!! im working

*cough* stupid cigar smoke *cough*
i hate my dad..

So this contest is over then? =S

-Jenna.

yea jenna its over.. and i shall read all your poems., tonight and by sun night, i will have the placings.

ok this is what i want all of you to do who have entered-
give me 5 of your poems that you want commented and rated. then give me 2 poems you want me to critique thoroughly(sp?) through email.

Rewards-
1st- 5 poems rrc'd & 2 critiqued
2nd 5 poems rrc'd and 1 critiqued
3rd 5 poems rrc'd
4th 4 ''
5th 4 ''

************side note.
ya know, bryan .. u r one lucky dude. i said only 2 people could use the same topic or style. the etheree was already used twice.. but as i said above, youre lucky,, and ill tkae your poem. =]]

do not mind this post, im just putting all the poems in one post so i dont have to keep scrolling up and down and up and down..

(in order of entrance.. well in order as the appear in this thread)
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1
Waterfall [Sedoka].
by Bri. < 3

Like a waterfall
Tears cascade down her red cheeks
Drowning in all of his lies

Collapsing brick wall
Soul turning into black ash
Descending unsaltened tears

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2
Scream {Etheree}
by xDarkSuicidex

Scream
Dreamer
Cry to me;
Do not be scared.
Please; scream your heart out,
Let us see you burn, cry,
Let's see your burning soul die.
We are watching your every move -
Passing you by to watch you closely
Not letting you out of our only sight.

Scream as loud as you can my dear dreamer,
Hold on tightly to what you now have;
Now never let go of your dreams.
But - scream as loud as you can,
Listen to your heartbeat;
Hurt yourself dreamer.
Let your heart go,
I dare you,
Dreamer,
Scream.

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3

Nature At Its Finest (Etheree)
by Mooie Ogen-

Swans
Graceful
Elegant
Upon nature
Tis the Pegasus
Of all kingdoms of birds
Bows it's head upon presence
So subtle, so lovely that it
Shall never be corrupted by man
The essence of their beauty will live long

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4

My Love Screams (Etheree)
By: Bryan

my
love screams
like the snow
falling on the
ground below, it screams
like a fire in my heart.
my thoughts have been caught ablaze
by the smile i get from your gaze
my love for has and will never fail
my love screams for the chance to have your love..

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5
-In The Blackened Water, Widows Weep.-
© Jenna Elphick
September 5, 2006

In the blackened water, widows weep;
Enticed by lovers shattered lullabies,
Praying to God, their souls to keep.
In the blackened water, widows weep;
Crying - - kiss their eyes and lay them to sleep,
Where bullets were lost in their husbands eyes.
In the blackened water, widows weep;
Enticed by lovers shattered lullabies.

Pretty Eyes Made For Crying
The Stars Had Names
Shattered Screams
Twilights Ghost
and;
Romeo And Juliet Put To Shame.

...Then do we send the others pm? Or titles here?

-Jenna.

jenna just put the 2 on here. lol. just say those r the wants u'd want critiqued.

and ill have the stats by tonite.. or tops tomorrow. .. i couldnt get on yesterday.. and i gotta get off early tonight to bbsit tomorrow. im soorry..

but im promise by tomorrow. !! Promise!

ok this was TOUGH.. i mena all the poems were amazing. .. i had a huge trouble picking 1st, and 2nd and the rest too. if i could i would give u alll 1st.. well i can.. but i dint. =P.truth betold i think that even if more people entered these would rpobably be the standings.. or pretty close to it! i konw most of you would be in the top 5!!

RESULTS

5th - Bri - Waterfall
4th - Mooie Ogen - Nature At Its Finest
3rd - Bryan - My Love Screams
2nd - xDarkSuicidex - Scream
..
and
..
1st - Lush.Fcuk - In The Blackened Water, Widows Weep

Congrats. and i will rrc & critque your poems as soon as you tell me the titles. =]]

i need titles people.. 'else i wont rrc. =]]

Just keep your promise and do it as soon as you can, Tinyheart, and we'll be even. Eh? =]

xDarkSuicidex

i wrote up there^^ but i will say it again. =]

1st- 5 poems rrc'd & 2 critiqued
2nd 5 poems rrc'd and 1 critiqued
3rd 5 poems rrc'd
4th 4 ''
5th 4 ''

So say which you want rrc'd and which you want critiqued. (make sure i know the diffrerences)

If you were talking to me, Tinyheart, then do these ones:

The Champagne Bottle
Finally {Pleiades}
The Lady of the Gloom
The Whipser of the Dead
Bitter Sweet Revege {Double Ottava Rima}

Critque: The Champagne Bottle

I think that's right. I don't know, I'm getting confused. =]

xDarkSuicidex

Bryyyyan.. i still dont know which poems..to rrc.. =|

??

And DarkSuicide i wasnt lol. atleast i dont htink i was. h/o lemme go look . xD

nope i was talking to bri

ok done with Jenna's (Lush.Fcuk).((rrc's i still dont know which you want thoroughly critiqued,., hint hint)

=]]

*Skips off to do bri's*

(and xDarkSuicidex ill continue yours after im done with bri nd bryans. =]])

x.xLauren

Done With Bri's Too.

Yay. Now Bryans. =]]

Darn. i cant my daddy's leaving so i gotta get off. im sorry.. ill finish up the rest tomorrow. =]]

x.xLauren

♥

Holy moly, sorry Darling I didn't even notice that I had gotten 1st lol. Uhh, thoroughly critiqued, can they be some that you've already commented on or no? I will have to check through my poems and see which ones. Thanks Darling! =]]

-Jenna.

umm, they can be whatever, but i do like thoroughly comment on the poems(atleasti think i do) so i wouldnt see the point. lol

xx3

x.x Lauren