put your life into this

  • xxmichaelxx
    18 years ago

    CLOSED CLOSED CLOSED CLOSED CLOSED CLOSED

    WINNERS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    1) Tiana - Harsh Words
    2) Twisted Heart - Shell of Me
    3) CrazyandSweet - Disaster

    so the prizes......hmm...5 comments and votes

    to all of the winners. and 1 for each for the one's

    who entered. great job ppl! this is a hit too!

    hello!!! well, my other poem is done (rage inside you) the other one it still running (my first contest) but there's another one, except that it flopped (mixed up lyrics for me) anyways, i'll do another poem contest. u know how the procedure goes!

    rules:
    1) new or old
    2) dark, sad
    3) i don't kare about cuzzing
    4) put some drama thing in your poem, make me cry, and make me relate to it
    5) i wanna feel your poems
    6) and this poem SHOULD relate on wat ur feeling! don't fake it!
    7) put your life into this

    prize, surprise

    thankz.
    you're acting like a damn saint
    adrian

  • aDORKable x3
    18 years ago

    o0o yay first post! I have a poem that is super long written in January....

    Dead Of A Heartbreak / How Can You Still Call Me Beautiful

    With yesterday’s make-up
    Smeared across her face
    She shies away
    From his loving embrace

    “What’s wrong?” he asks
    “Nothing, why?” she replies
    “I just want to know why
    Your make-up’s smeared under your eyes.”

    “Oh, it’s nothing, don’t worry.
    I’ll be alright.”
    “No really, what’s wrong?”
    What happened last night?”

    She tries hard not to break down
    Right in front of him
    Her soul is shattered again
    She tries to push the pain within

    “You know I care, please tell me.”
    “Don’t worry, I’ll be fine.”
    “No you’re not, you’re not okay
    You’re feeding me a line.”

    “If I were to talk to you
    Would you really care?
    After it’s all done,
    Would you still be standing there?”

    “Oh, honey! You know I do.
    Why wouldn’t I be?
    When ever have I not been?
    It’s alright, you can tell me.”

    “I love this boy, but he doesn’t care…”
    “Are you sure about that?”
    “I’m pretty sure; he never did.”
    “Now, why would you say that?”

    “Well, he lives too far away
    He used to live near me
    And we rarely talk anymore
    It’s hard to deal with really.”

    “Who was this boys?
    Where has he gone?”
    “No, I can’t tell you
    My feelings are wrong.

    He has robbed me of my beauty
    Stole it from within
    When I stopped seeing this boy
    He took it away with him.”

    “You know, I think you’re lying
    Because you know I can tell
    That looking through your eyes
    You can see you’ve gone through hell.

    You’ve been robbed of something, yes
    But not what you speak of
    Your beauty and grace are still there
    So is your kindness and love.”

    “How can you still call me beautiful
    While I’m standing here a mess
    My face looks so horrible
    Plus, this torn and tattered dress?”

    “Baby, you shine from within
    Your beauty glows and shows
    I can see past the make-up
    To see the real eyes, lips, and nose.”

    “You’re just saying that because you have to
    Because you’re just trying to be nice
    But this is too much to deal with
    I can’t let this happen twice.”

    “Sweetie stop…I love you dearly
    You know this much is true.
    I have always been there for you
    And I really truly do.”

    As she stood there stunned
    Her knees began to shake
    As she fell down to the floor
    Her whole body began to quake

    As he bent to pick her up
    He noticed something wrong
    Her eyes were staring upwards
    Her gaze fixed just too long

    He held his dying baby
    As she slowly slipped away
    “I love you and want to marry you…
    I was going to propose Valentine’s Day.”

    Through her last moments of life
    She tried to tell him, with pain
    That he was the boy she loved so dearly
    But her efforts were in vain

    Her body limping, without a soul
    For as she slipped out of life
    Her one last dream that couldn’t come true
    Was just to be his wife

    As her love held her body
    That had once been so full
    He whispered softly in her ear
    “How could I not call you beautiful?”

    After her funeral the very next day
    The boy broke down and cried
    She was his everything in his life
    He didn’t want her to die

    So as the boy walked home
    A dove flew over his head
    As he watched it silently
    He remembered what she said

    And as the boy looked down
    To walk to his home
    He thought he felt something funny
    It’s origin, unknown

    Then he saw it shining
    Lying on the ground
    Her favorite golden necklace
    That he just had found

    He wondered how it got there
    But somehow, it led him home
    Then he finally realized
    That she had already known

    She knew he loved her dearly
    Of course she knew that was true
    But he never even told her
    “Baby, I really love you.”

    As he sat upon his couch
    The boy felt such an ache
    His friends found him the next day
    Dead of a heartbreak.

    ∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞∞
    Well, that's it! Hope it works for this!
    =] CiaO!ღ

  • xxmichaelxx
    18 years ago

    wow, all of these poems are good. makes me wanna cry! :) he he he he

  • Normal is the Watchword
    18 years ago

    Solitude

    I never thought to bathe in solitude
    Nor reflect a sigh into the starless night
    An echo for an echo; Twinge for twinge
    Beneath silence I waited there, waited still

    I never thought to weep these tears
    Nor melt in Vincent's twisted oil sight
    His brush for brush; Sketch for sketch
    Then waited ever more, waited there alone

    And born under winter light, empty snow
    To heal while sun slips through the white
    Scarlet blush, lost scarlet blush faded soft
    But still I waited for the kiss, waited silent

    While in solitude

  • Twisted Heart
    18 years ago

    Shell of Me
    By: Twisted Heart

    It wasn't just a heart he broke
    That day he said goodbye
    He took away the trust I had
    With his deceit and lies
    He left me scarred and tainted
    In this shell where I now live
    Unable to believe again
    And so hard to forgive.
    I see him every once and awhile
    He had no trouble moving on
    Unlike this mass of emptiness
    That I can't see beyond.
    Each morning I awake to find
    That I'm nowhere near healing
    And even though I try so hard
    I can't get past my feelings.
    Each night I lay beside the pillow
    Where he once laid his head
    I ask the same old questions
    But the answers left unsaid.
    Was it me that turned away
    And stopped him in his tracks
    Maybe he thought he had no choice
    But to leave and not look back.
    Still questions haunt my memory
    They bring me to my knees
    And leave me in this lonely shell
    With barely air to breathe.

  • donna
    18 years ago

    Past

    My ex hubby loved me,
    I'm sure he did once.
    But he played with my head,
    and made me feel like a dunce.

    Ten years of my life,
    and three gorgeus kids later.
    He cheated on me,
    and became a traitor.

    He messed around with my mate,
    well a so called friend.
    and together they broke me,
    I thought I'd not mend.

    Three years after that,
    I loved once again.
    Little did I know,
    She'd cause even more pain.

    Not just emotionally and mentally,
    but physical too.
    I'd be covered in bruises,
    of black and blue.

    She pushed me and punched me,
    strangled and bit.
    She'd go from so loving,
    into a frenzied fit.

    Here excuse always the same,
    'It's PMT.'
    Like that would make right,
    her head butting me.

    Booted me in the face,
    and the back of my head.
    I left her for fear,
    that I'd end up dead.

    Two relationships down,
    heartbroken, head sore.
    I vowed never to fall,
    in love anymore.

  • LadyPearl
    18 years ago

    Thou God cast and bend me hard
    Adorn me with unbreaking will
    Set me aside to test my strength
    Watch my footprints in plain thrill

    My Coat of Arms symbol honor and pride
    Bounding every task amongst my soul
    Unable to break from pain-staking time
    I struggle in humility to gain control

    Pressure bearing upon my shoulders
    As tremors and flashes fall unto my brain
    Every"quiting" notion haunts my pale dreams
    Blurring every answer in unwanting pain

    My strength and pride yields agony
    Allowing torture to inscribe on me
    Showing discomforts of losing my skills
    Forcing the truth so I may agree

    I've tried to call it quits and that it's over
    But disappointment interlopes in every way
    So Still I tread this descending path
    Staring as my bleak breaking soul decay

  • Jessica
    18 years ago

    Remember My Tears
    by ♥ .J.є.ѕ.ѕ.у. ♥

    {...Remember My Tears...}

    Elegantly falling over smooth cheeks
    Destroying perfectly polished makeup
    Sparkling lightly like scattered diamonds
    Cutting deep canyons into soft pale skin..

    {...Remember My Tears...}

    Falling relentlessly like sapphire waterfalls
    Smudging dark blood around saddened eyes
    Carefully outlining their emerald coloring
    Releasing all pain from within in salty drops..

    {...Remember My Tears...}

    Glowing delicately under the pale moon
    Leaving black streams to flow across my face
    Slowly washing away the dirt from my life
    Remember my tears, because you created them..

  • crazyandsweet
    18 years ago

    Disaster

    A ticking bomb is what I am...
    Cause in an instant I hit ya, with a WHAM!

    You thought I was perfect in a sense,
    But in reality I am nothing but a dense.

    My love should be locked away forever...
    So I couldn't cause any more hurt ever!

    A convent seems where I should be,
    Because no relationship deserves me.

    I regret all the pain I have caused you...
    Cause hurting you is not what I wanted to do!

    I could kick my self in the a** for this,
    Knowing it takes more than just the piss.

    The thought of losing you cause of my arrogance...
    Makes me wish I could take my self presence!

    Doing what is right for me is what I have been told,
    But that doesn't help me as my life starts to unfold.

    One by one; tear after tear begins to fall,
    With the thought of a new surrounding wall.

    Walls have always been a part of my life...
    Not just as a challenge but more as a strife!

    You truly deserve better than me,
    But for some reason that is not what you see.

    I have a friend, lover, and angel all wrapped in one...
    My one thought is constant, "What have I done?!"

  • Moose
    18 years ago

    Understand, This is a Dream
    by †!♪~*`Bryce Dressler`*~♪!†

    Finding happiness in his sleep,
    that life doesnt supply.
    The pain that continually bears down,
    never releasing
    never easing.
    Pulling him deeper
    into a further slumber,
    hiding him away from the world.
    He doesnt realize in his dreams
    everything is unrealistic,
    his happiness and joy
    when he wakes,
    exists no more.
    Lost in a reality
    of depression and fantasies
    waiting for nightfall
    when he lives again...

    (C) 2006 Bryce Dressler

    ((my first poem in like 2 months, sorry bout that))

  • xxmichaelxx
    18 years ago

    all are great!!!!! :)

  • David Marshall
    18 years ago

    Until I herd her voice

    By David Marshall

    I felt so happy,
    Until I herd her voice.
    It brings back memories.
    It brings back pain.
    All I hear is rejection.
    All I feel is rejection.
    All I fear is rejection.
    I hear her voice,
    and I'm afraid to love again.
    The world's against me.
    All hope is pushed back.
    Sorrow overflowing.
    I can't balance my heart any more.
    Her pride overthrows her feelings.
    leaving me to my own.
    She attempts to prove to me in words,
    and fails with a sense of pride still left,
    and a tear in my eye with a broken heart.
    These feelings are released with no where to go.
    I'm rejected and replaced with pride.
    From the soul who can not control their decisions.
    I'm left shattered and un attended to..
    Not enough faith to live on.
    When you look to the sky, you hope to find stars.
    When you look to the ocean, you hope to see fish.
    When you look for a forest, you hope to find trees.
    When you look into their heart, you hope to find love.
    But once you lose your hope.
    you lose your sight,
    and love turns to sorrow as sorrow slowly ends your fate.
    The stars are gone,
    The trees die.
    The fish disappear,
    and you still can't cry.
    I felt so happy,
    Until I herd her voice.
    Her rejection.

  • Oscar
    18 years ago

    October Rain

    You don't know how you make me feel, standing here next to you. Knowing that I love you, and hoping you love me too. The dark purple sky, with clouds all around. As the soft rain falls on us, and we listen to it's sound.

    I wish it would never end, this beautiful October rain, because when I'm with you, I can feel no pain. As we lay on the ground, staring up at a star. I think of all the good times, and how we've come so far.

    Had I only just known, it would be our last night. If someone would have told me it would be your last sight. I never would have let you go, as we walked around, and listened to the wind blow.

    However now i'm alone, you're simply a memory. forgotten by all, all of course except me. I kept you in my heart, but it just caused me pain. As I tried to hold on, I started going insane.

    I want to be with you, want to see you anew. so i found out a way, to be with you real soon. and as i pick up this gun, and hold it up to my brain. i'll never forget, that this is my last October Rain.

    Oscar

  • xxmichaelxx
    18 years ago

    wow! i'm damn impressed!

  • Lauren Waszkiewicz
    18 years ago

    ********i changed my poem. i hope you dont mind..
    Caged Animal With A Blade
    by *tinyheart*

    Caged in this dark prison
    my only relief: a rusted blade
    and the memories of the beauty and light
    will forever fade

    the cage I'm in is made of your love,
    your hate, your pain, and your lies
    they've trapped me here for my whole life
    and even after i die

    this murderous pain and suffering
    it is what you've done to my soul
    and its being torn apart piece by piece
    it'll never again be whole

    this cage of death is your love
    and this wretched blade is mine
    its the only pain i can cause
    theres a heart beneath those lines

    this razor blade opens the truth
    though it seems as though only my skin
    it breaks through this barren cage
    and shows whats truly within.

    feelings mean nothing in this prison
    i am but an animal caged and forgotten
    only this animal has been torn apart
    and has been left cold and rotten

    this razor cuts away the dead flesh
    and shows whats truly there inside
    but this lovely gift comes with a price
    and emotions whats denied.

    please let me out of this prison
    i have exposed my every thought
    but still I'm locked up in this prison
    even though i am overwrought.

  • xxmichaelxx
    18 years ago

    i think ur poem (concealed) is really kool. all of u guys poem are great!

  • John (Mr. Whuppy)
    18 years ago

    by John (Mr. Whuppy)

    What a soldier must go through
    (from personal experience)

    Its now been five long years
    since this bloody war began
    and everyone's reduced
    to being less than man
    the civvies just don't know
    what a soldier must go through
    that's why he must turn off
    deny whatever's true
    to kill a man is awful
    but it must be done
    to kill or just to be killed
    until the battles won
    to watch your best friends head blow up
    right in front of you
    to hear the screams of grown up men
    whilst their guts do spew
    to see a river red with blood
    to feel your feet sink in the mud
    to wish your mom could hold your hand
    will they ever understand
    what a soldier must go through

  • xxmichaelxx
    18 years ago

    wow kool! keep it up ppl!

  • crazyandsweet
    18 years ago

    can I change mine?
    I have a new one I did tonight...

  • xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex
    18 years ago

    ***I changed my poem. Same topic, just different poem.

    This is definitely not my best.. But it means a lot to me. It brings -me- to tears everytime I read it. I hope you enjoy it and can feel the emotion.
    --------------------------------------
    Rusting bells chime in a towered distance,
    Sounding quietly against the night's resistance,
    Picking up sounds you will beg to escape;
    Screams to be heard is a prisoner of rape.

    Eight- thousand stars cry out to help the victim.
    Around the stars night grows cold; ice storm falls numb
    Trying to speak of a treacherous tale.
    Knowing it can't speak, the wind begins to wail.

    Bells shudder and chime, cracking under the screams,
    Reaching out to save the withered, lost dreams.

    Snow falls loudly; for the victim needed to hush;
    The night turns away in utter disgust.
    The snow dashing over icing, streaming tears,
    The man of a thousand words creates our fears.

    As ringing bells chime in a towered distance,
    Breaking the creeping silence for an instant.

    With a shuttering cry the night gives away,
    To whisper of the tragic tales to the day.
    The day then lurches out, crying in dismay,
    About the withered lies; bloodied they lay.

    As the man takes a soul that is only half there,
    Silence over takes the tolling bells that stare.
    Of this terrible dream that does not protest,
    Those who do not dream certainly are blessed.

    ----------------------------------------

    Understanding: It is about someone being raped and all of nature is protesting it... But it was only a dream.

    xDarkSuicidex

  • xxmichaelxx
    18 years ago

    sure u can change it. and i'm sorry about the poem^ watever happened......it's ok......wat i want here is not THE BEST but a poem that will make me cry, feel the feelings u got wen u wrote this poem, ok?

  • Kim
    18 years ago

    Unchained

    You, my hooded falcon,
    Once creened promises of love,
    Enjoyed being touched by my hand

    But I should have known
    I could never keep you here
    Child of the skies

    So I cut your jesses
    Unbound your lovely wings
    And let you soar away to freedom

    You never once looked back

    So glad to be free of me, and my constrictions
    So happy to turn your back and fly
    So joyful of your new beginning

    Was I that horrible?

    The memories I once treasured seem so distant
    And I no longer know if they're true
    My beloved

    I won't chain you, so I let you go
    But that doesn't stop my tears

    A soft trill from the sky caught my attention
    A quick glimpse of your shining eyes
    Whispering goodbye

  • crazyandsweet
    18 years ago

    ok thank you, I just wrote that one last night and wanted to use it...so I went ahead and switched it, thanks for allowing me to do that...

  • Sherry Lynn
    18 years ago

    Kill Me

    You fucking bastard
    Look what you did
    Why don’t you kill me
    Let my bloody death
    Be upon your raging hands?

    Why did you stop?
    Can you not see
    There is still life
    Breathing within me?

    Why can’t you kill me
    Or else let me be?
    Can you not tell
    I am past broken
    From your beatings?

    My right shoulder
    Seems to be your favorite
    But then again
    Since my surgery
    You know that it is my weakest

    Another fist in my back
    Across the face I take another smack
    Here a jib there a jab
    It feels as though another bone has cracked

    Please, Father, hear me beg
    Let this be it
    Let me take my last breath
    Please, Father, I plea to thee
    Let this son of a bitch
    Hurry and murder me.

    © Sherry L. Richardson

  • ~T i a n a~
    18 years ago

    ~Harsh Words~

    Harsh words go straight to the heart,
    She knew it would happen right from the start.
    Everything was wrong not one thing right,
    Her life turned around after that one fight.

    Innocent words not meant to do harm,
    But deep down inside she was not so calm.
    You would never think one person could cause this,
    But everything she felt, everyone would miss.

    One cold night when she was alone,
    Thinking and worrying as she held the phone.
    Should she call him and solve there fight,
    Or sit there sad and alone all that night.

    She sat staring into her life, what had gone so wrong,
    As she listened over and over to there very own song.
    Smiles, laughs no one thought there relationship would end like this,
    But she will always remember that very last kiss.

    All she wanted was the pain to end,
    So she picked up knife thinking the scars would mend.
    How wrong she was as she fell to the floor,
    But the love they had will last forever more.

  • blissfulbearje
    18 years ago

    Scarred Without You

    As I stare into this photograph,
    Tears of pain, burn my cheeks,
    As I cry for you, my darling friend.
    My heartaches, you meant so much.
    It is not fair, you were too young,
    You were supposed to live forever.
    I never got to say a proper goodbye,
    And as each day passes,
    My heart bruises more.
    Every night I lye on your grave,
    My tears soak into the ground,
    Down to you.
    Why did this happen?
    You never did anything wrong.
    Why cant the innocent ever last?
    My heart is scarred,
    Without you by my side.

    *for my dear friend, Willandra. love him sooooooo much and forever i will..!!!!*
    xoxo

  • xxmichaelxx
    18 years ago

    ur welcome crazyandsweet!

  • Dacey Flame
    18 years ago

    May I enter please? I wrote this..last week.

    The Price

    "Have you heard? Shes gone!"
    Suicides the price,
    to finally get her classmates,
    to talk about her nice.

    "Pack her things up neat!"
    Their driven by the money,
    her parents sold her off,
    Aren't their actions funny?

    "No more watching that darkish girl!"
    Shes restored her teacher's sanity.
    Sit far back, don't say a word,
    her gift to humanity.

    "My beautiful girl is gone!"
    Her loving boy is hurt.
    He trys to keep a straight face,
    as tears run down his shirt.

    "I trusted you above everyone!"
    Her best friend sobs at night.
    Seeing her buddy covered in blood,
    was just to much of a sight.

    "I don't think I can go on!"
    Her last words to us all.
    But now if she were here she'd warn,
    don't ever let your hopes fall.

    "The world is an unfair place!"
    It seems either way you loose,
    stay alive or kill yourself,
    which one will you choose?

  • xxmichaelxx
    18 years ago

    wow, a lot of emotions and dialogue, great job!

  • xxmichaelxx
    18 years ago

    anyone else?

  • Lauren Waszkiewicz
    18 years ago

    umm ichanged my poem.. i hope thats okay. ..

    if its not ill change it back. =]]

  • aDORKable x3
    18 years ago

    when is it over?! lol

  • xxmichaelxx
    18 years ago

    good question, hmm......this friday! :)

  • xxmichaelxx
    18 years ago

    anyone?

  • xxmichaelxx
    18 years ago

    is this a bump to myself?

  • xxmichaelxx
    18 years ago

    WINNERS PPL!

  • Sherry Lynn
    18 years ago

    Good Job winners ... WTG!

    --Sher

  • crazyandsweet
    18 years ago

    wooohooo to 3 rd places in the same day....my lucky day sweet deal ;)
    all the poems were excellent by the way and I would not be able to judge cause it would be to hard ;)

  • ~T i a n a~
    18 years ago

    Yay my very first 1st place!! thanks heaps glad u liked it =D x x

  • xxmichaelxx
    18 years ago

    ur welcome!