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please people I am desperatly requiring more feedback for this particular poem. It's making me want to tear my heart out. This poem is for someone very important to me and it needs to be perfect.

Ink splattered paper,
Filled with written words,
Trying to apologise,
To everyone I've hurt.

I have hurt you,
And so I must say,
Can we start anew?
Think of it this way.

My life is full of poison,
Infecting all my friends,
Seeping through my being,
So this pain won't end.

I must erase this poison,
So that I can move on,
Throwing off confusion,
Learn what's right and wrong.

I wish I could explain,
Why I'm drawn to you,
Is it because you listen?
Because good people are few?

I have learnt how to live,
Holding secrets close to heart,
Revealing only pieces,
In case I fall apart.

I have caused confusion,
And worry to your days,
I wish I could take that back,
In the most imperative of ways.

Everyday I grieve,
For all that I have done,
All that has happened to me,
Feeling like 'He' has won.

I can't let what 'He' did,
Take control of me,
I have to live my life,
Learn how to feel free.

I'm sorry I upset you,
Emotions were cloudy and damp,
I'm sorry that I scowled,
Being naughty at Music Camp.

So ofcourse you are valued,
In my heart and mind,
Thank you for your patience,
And for being so very kind.

Once again I'm sorry,
For treating you so wrong,
I appreciate you so very much,
For helping me be strong.

this is nice poem

There is a forum here where you will get more response to this than in this one.

-Jenna.