Terra's Randomized Contest

Dear Mr....

a letter unread on her hand
she just couldn't, couldn't understand
there she cries, alone who got banned

dear mr.....she writes
how could you break my heart like that?
concluded was this when you started the fights
and how could you blame me, it was my fault just like that

you know it was yours, and you know it truly
but kept denying and blaming the girl, who's me
confess it to god, i know you are guilty

you used me like trashy toy you can do whatever
so hypnotized i was and said yes to you
i know the days will just past by and nothing will ever be better
because all i know it wasn't true

so if you ever want to have a girl
treat her like she's your damn world
but don't make her head spin and there you go *boom* you're over

i don't really like it, but anyways, yea

i like it! lol i commented on it too! lol

4 left :) ..

good job everyone that has completed :D

if the next 4 are done soon i will be judging the day after.

Bump.. any one willing to take the extra three?

umm can i reserve Behind Closed Eyes please

sorry.. there is no more reserving until October 15th ... but if you write it soon maybe no one will take it.

-Terra

To long of a scroll... lol come on... only 4 titles left...

THIS DOES NOT GO TO NEXT PAGE!!!!!....

haha people get writing...

next time it goes to next page im judging the contests

tiz ohkay... only a week left tho...

contest closed... winners will be posted in the next few days

contest closed... winners will be posted in the next few days

--------Broken Angel [English Sonnet]

Good form, but at some points the flow was shaky.

Example- It's something that she just don't understand.

That line threw off the flow a bit. Took me a minute to process.

--------Awaiting 'HIS' Tears

Good poem. The feeling in the poem was well described and so many could see the point you were making. Some points the flow was uneasy. But other then that good work.

-------- -Tinted Petals.- Villonnet

The Form was good. And it flowed really good. There was a picture painted in my head. And the mood of the poem was shown good to. Excellent work.

--------Purple Skies [Terzanelle]

Great work. The flow went good all the way through and I didn’t want to stop reading. It was descriptive and well written… good work

--------Innocence

Good form. Flow was great. I really enjoyed reading it. Good work

--------Shades of Black [Quadruple Senryu]

the poem itself is good.. but it did not follow the 5 7 5 syllable count of a Senryu.

-------- ~*~"Painted"~*~

wow deep… and well written.. great job.

-------- Dear Mr....

the flow was good up until the last stanza… just split it up, or find a way to make it a little shorter.. and it will be awesome.

~*~*~~ Prizes

First Place- Painted. By: Liquid Dreams

Second Place- Tinted Petals. By: Lush Fcuk

Third Place- Purple Skies. By: Jessy

Honourable Mentions-
Broken Angel. By: Twisted Heart
Dear Mr. By: D-M- Saint
Innocence. By: Dark Suicide
Shades Of Black. By: ×ciaO bEllA×
Awaiting His Tears. By: ConCealedInAddiction

Woot!

-Jenna.

awesome! thanks for first place!
~Rhianna