Terra's --> only 5 day contest!

ohkay so this contest is held for 5 days.. and sence it is almost the next day already i will hold it over to 6 days so October 13th this contest will be CLOSED!

there is no limit on people... just limited time... who is willing to take the challenge?

object--> to get as many poets to write about one of the following subjects in 5 days...

Rules:
1) no profanity
2) you have 5 days to complete this contest
3) have fun
4) write your heart away
5) one poem per person
6) there is NO RESERVING spots
7) i prefer new poems... but if your stressin you can submit an old one... please state if you have submited an old one
8) more then one person can write about the following topics.

these are not titles... but beside your title put the word in [....] form.
exapmle: Lost Love [Broken]
............ Pink Roses [Beauty]

a) [Beauty]
b) [Broken]
c) [Field]
d) [Tear]

you write around these words. you do not need to directly say the word. but be sure that it is clear on what you are writing about.

-Prizes-
1st place--> 10 comments/votes and some critisizm
2nd place--> 5 comments/votes and some critisizm
3rd place--> 2 comments/votes
4th- __ place --> 1 comment

ARE YOU UP FOR THE CHALLENGE?

JENNA IS UP TO THE CHALLENGE! I'm just a rebel like that

-Jenna.

lmao. lets see if any one else is shall we :D

Remember only have until October 13th

lol pass it around... who nos how many people accually gunna do this one.. tiz differnt.. yet the same. :P

Only Skin [BEAUTY]
By: Twisted Heart

She goes about her busy day
Not taking time to tend
The wants and needs of loved ones
Nor trying to make amends.
She doesn't see the suffering
That's at her own back door
She thinks it's just a waste of time
And caring is such a chore.
When she sees the vagrants
She shoos them all away
She never has the time to stop
Lending help along the way.
She says she's always busy
When someone needs her care
And when she shows up to give aid
It's like she isn't there.

Each night when she gets home
After a grueling day
She sits and looks in the mirror
At the person she became.
She sees a face of beauty
No wrinkles can she find
The plastic surgeon did his job
Erasing every line.
Her hair is soft and wavy
And when it hits the light
Just a touch of auburn sheen
Reflects against the night.
Her nails are long and painted
And the color of her eyes
Were changed by wearing contacts
Quite a great disguise.
Such wonder is her beauty
Not reflecting what's within
A heart and soul that's cold and bare
That's housed in only skin.

The Failing Heart (Broken)
By Letty

Love at first site, was one of the biggest beliefs I owned a very long time ago. Cinderella and Rapunzel fairy tales I harbored too, but that was before the truth was told.

I believed in magic and all of its abilities. Disappearing and reappearing seemed so amazing to me. Wishing on a star held my heart dearly for a very long time. To me poetry wasn’t poetry unless each line would rhyme.

I believed that faith was always a step ahead of me to guide me down the right path. But again that was before reality sunk in and tore my wretched heart in half.

I use to believe that I held the world in the palm of my hands and that it displayed all for me to see. But now that my eyes are opened wide, I see that I had stupid beliefs.

There is no such thing as love at first site. Cinderella and Rapunzel don’t exist. Magic is nothing but a hallucination, of the mind created by an illusionist.

Poetry doesn’t have to rhyme, and faith is just what it is. The world belongs to no one and it all is just a myth.

But now my heart is failing because the truth really hurts.

I have no more childhood dreams because dreaming only make things worst. So I live each day one day at a time and I just let nature take its course.

Unperfect Girl [Broken]

She walks the path from a home that's broken,
Remembers the small things that was never spoken.
At school she's perfect and she smiles every day,
But then she comes home and the smile fades away.
At home she is forgotten, cause they don't even care,
They don't even notice, completely unaware.
Every night in bed, they can't hear her cry,
No one will notice, never ask why.
But now it can't be fixed, it is all to late,
She doesn't even care, she thinks its her fate.
The words that she needs to hear, will be left unspoken,
It won't even help, she is already broken.

i like this one. i'll do it wen i'm not busy. which is i guess tomorrow. idk. but yea. lol

WAIT!!! can it be old?

-Whiskey Lullaby [Broken.]-

Lines decorated the sides of her sky blue eyes
In the reflection of her old shattered mirror
A face staring back; talking of memories and goodbyes
And running down her rosy cheek was a silent tear.

A gold band hugged her finger; she wallowed in your lies
Blond hair draped around her trembling face
A raven corset muffled her rusted hearts lonely cries
Masquerading her deceptions in linen and lace.

A shattered picture frame lay in the middle of the floor
Beneath the bed you tainted with disgrace
A silhouette watching from behind the door - -
The shadows of another women taking her place.

Holding your picture tight she drowns in a whiskey lullaby
Singing her to sleep - - the angels scream in dismay
Taking the ring off as a strangers hand grazes her thigh
And late that evening, two broken hearts died in decay.

© Jenna Elphick
October 8, 2006.

--Meaning being that her husband was cheating on her and she was cheating on him. Everynight, she would get drunk at the bar and cheat with a new person, and it broke her down more each time. It is a true story about someone I know.--

new poems please

wow this is working better then i thought it would...

im loving it :D

-Terra

4 Days Left...

Wow, A lot of people did broken. I'll try something else.

Walk in Waters [beauty]

Seated high upon pale clouds of innocence
Draped in shimmering gold and purple satin
Strong yet elegant in her young appearance
Silk woven around her luminating skin

Borne from the clear waters of aphrodite
Wise and humble from the mind of Athena
She awakes from the dark as a shining light
Painted in life and arousing all awes

Here is the child in which we lay our lives
Her hands hold the key where our lies abide
Purifying the world once more to contrive
A hopeful, healthy soul as our eternal guide

:D good work everyone who has wrote...
any one else up for the challenge?

:( i am but i have so much stress and homework n stuff to do i dont have time to write a new one:( so good luck guys wish i could do an old one but i understand. ill keep an eye out 2 see who wins, good luck all:D

oh dear... i know how all this homework and stress is. :( ... well... its logical enough that you can submit an old one.

-Terra

[Broken] Ghost's Don't Cry

Walking around, aimless, lost in the crowd.
Trying to be heard, but the noises are so loud.
After a long day, coming home to fights,
Not getting a word in edgewise; lonely nights.

Welcome to my life, I'm only a ghost,
Not noticed by many, ignored by most.
Often want to break down, and want to die,
Or cry my eyes out, but ghosts don't cry.

Finally a little freedom, out with friends,
But ignored by you, the pain never ends.
Love shown one way, yet hate the other,
Then the time comes to see my mother.

I see her only a little, yet important I'm not,
Complaining and yelling, making cheeks hot.
Talking to her boyfriend for an hour it seems,
Actually spending time with HER is just a dream.

Welcome to my life, a ghost I'll remain,
Many ignore me, many don't know my name.
Often I want to break down, but when I try,
I recall that one thing, ghosts don't cry.

~*Who Cares?*~
is this ok? thank u so much:D

im not reading any of them until i have them all... then im gunna put them in microsoft word and read them with out the person names... so im not biased. lol :P

but i am sure its awsome :D

Bump... 3 more days...

who else is up for this?

So Terra, I was thinking...and, October the thirteenth is...FRIDAY THE THIRTEENTH =|

-Jenna.

OMG!!!!! that's badluck! [i think] lol!

lol it sure is.. i realized that this morning when i woke up....

haha i no a kid who was born on friday the thirteenth! ... hate him and hope he dies.. but still

... lol bad luck... well lets just wait and see. lol :P

HAHA yeah, I might be going to see it too! =]]]

-Jenna.

What kid Terra? :O

-Jenna.

what kid... i am confused?? :S

"haha i no a kid who was born on friday the thirteenth! ... hate him and hope he dies.. but still"

^^ That kidd lol.

-Jenna.

oh his name is tyler... ive known him sence almost kindergarden.. and hes so effing annoying.. you no one of those people you just want to punch in the face.. yea that kind of person. lol

Contest Closes Friday.!

Bump

Oh! Was he the one that threatened to slit Steve's throught when we came to badminton? Tall, kinda chubby-ish? Lol.

-Jenna.

no... lmao almsot all tis town wants to slit stevens throat ... lmao tall.. chubbyish.. explains alot of them... haha

Not Steven from warburg, the one at badminton deushe. And he was standing outside of ur drama class while I was visiting you, Jethica and Domeslice at the bus lol.

-Jenna.

i am no idea... umm... uhh.... *lost*

hello :D

CONTEST ENDS TOMOROW!

any one else for the challenge?

Lol you do too know!!! I can remember this so vividly and you can't :'(

-Jenna.

i have bad memory

Yipeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It's Friday!

tiz 720 am where i am right now... i am off to school and will be home around 5:00 ...

Contest closes at 5:00 ... any last entries get them here in the next couple of hours..

have a good day

-Terra

contest closed... and i will look through the poems iin the next hour.

winners will be posted in the next few hours

-Terra

First the Poems themselves

-----Only Skin [BEAUTY]

Excellent job on the imagery… reflect on what she acts like, and see what she looks like. The poem flowed well. You could distinguish between her outer beauty, and inner ugliness. Great work.

-----The Failing Heart (Broken)

The flow is a little choppy; I couldn’t get into the flow. The lines were more like lines of a story, idk maybe its just me but I believe the only rule in any poem is the end of the page, shoes the end of the line, as your just goes on, like a story. One fact that was pointed out is that it doesn’t have to rhyme, and that is true. Many non rhyming poems flow well. Try and break your lines up, and it may just work. Other wise good job. And keep on trying, you defiantly have potential

Example

Instead of
è Love at first site, was one of the biggest beliefs I owned a very long time ago. Cinderella and Rapunzel fairy tales I harboured too, but that was before the truth was told.

Try

à Love at first site, was one of my biggest beliefs,
I owned it a very long time ago;
Cinderella, and Rapunzel, fairy tales I harboured too,
But this was before the truth was told.

-----Unperfect Girl [Broken]

The flow had gone good. exept in stanza 4 and stanza 9, where you have written ‘But’ . it throws the poem off, and caught me. I had to read it over a few times. But other then that I was drawn in to read more. Just cut the ‘But’ and it will be good.

----- -Whiskey Lullaby [Broken.]-

good word choices, it set the mood of the poem right away. I was brought into the poem in the first stanza, and never once got thrown off the rhythm … good work. And keep it up.

----- Love [Tear]

in the first verse there is imagery, but it didn’t draw me into it. The word ‘scared’ is sort’a like a dead word. It doesn’t draw attention, find a more descriptive word… like terrified, or petrified. But after that verse, the imagery had gotten much better. It drew me in as I read on.

----- Walk in Waters [beauty]

nicely written. Great imagery, and wording. I was drawn in, but I wanted to read more… it seems as if part of your poem is missing.

----- Ghost's Don't Cry [broken]

first verse, third stanza, it seems as if there is a word missing between ‘to’ and ‘fights’, good work at following the rhyme scheme in the first verse all the way through the poem.
‘Many ignore me, many don't know my name.’ It seems as if there is a word or two missing out of this stanza as well. The ending is perfect for the beginning, and makes the poem seem it is at an end. Good work.

and then the

PRIZES

First Place -- Twisted Heart

Second Place-- Lush.Fcuk-*, Noni Wang©

Third Place— ~*Who Cares?*~, Angel of Secrets

Honourable Mention-- Letty...., ♥JeSS♥ ~Broken Soul~