Terra's Only 5 Day Opposite contest

well.. i already have 2 out... but i just thought of an idea so i decided to post it...

Going through most peoples poems.. i have come to the realization that they will mostly do Rhyming.. or NonRhyming poetry... I havnt seen an equal balance of the two.. but im sure there are people out there that are equally proud of thier Rhyming as the Non Rhyming poetry... well anyways

This contest is for you to step away from what you are used to. if you love rhyming, do a non rhyming poem... and vise versa.

Or try a new poetry tecnique. if you do sonnets... try something you have never attempted before.
In general TRY THE NEW!

Rules
1) above your poem write what you are trying to do.
example:

I am atemping my first.... Sonnet
title
... poem....

~~~MORE THEN 12 Lines please

2) please leave your name off you post... of put it 4-5 lines down so it will be easier for me to copy and paste it into microsoft. this way i dont no who write what and it will be un bias.
3) profanity is allowed at small doses.
4) New poems only.. and no exeptions will be made for this contest.
5) 1 poem per person
6) you are allowed to make up your own titles.. but if you wish to use one of the following you are allowed... and sence JENNA is very convincing with her faces.. there is reseves...

Reserves have only 3 days!

Titles

3- pull me to heaven
4- pink roses
5- the waterlily
6- Tears of Science
7- banishing secrets
or what ever you wish it to be...

Reserved
1- Crystal Tears [R 4 D-M- Saint]

Complete
Jess -- completed
Bryan -- completed
2- kissing the moonlight [complete Jenna]

And remember... this is all about trying new things... so have fun... cry, laugh, joke, smile, stomp your feet do what ever you wish... as long as it is New

-Terra

PS -Deadline is October 15th.

Hm, I kinda want either Kissing The Moonlight or Pull Me To Heaven. =| I'll have Kissing the moonlight lmao.

-Jenna.

I'll try pull me to heaven please

Letty

sounds good. the quicker you get em in the better :D lol :P

Can i reserve pink roses?

Sure can...

Remember... Reserves only have 3 days to get thiers in.

and you do not need to use these titles... you can make your own if you wish

sure thing :D

Yeppers.. reminder to those who reserved yesterday... only 2 more days

reminder to bryan... 3 days

Kiss The Moonlight.

A childs' hands are wrapped around a railing on the stairs,
Holding tight onto the red oak beneath her fingers,
Listening closely as her Mothers' tears linger
Followed by the crashing and banging of kitchen chairs.

Tears glow in the moonlight from a crack in the window shades,
As a Mothers' pleads are muffled behind calloused hands,
A Father stumbling side to side, staggering to stand,
And a daughter listens as a Mothers' heart beat fades.

A mess of beer cans enlaces the kitchen floor around her,
As two decaying hearts lay beneath the moon that night,
A child holds onto a Fathers dirty hand so tight - -
As she whispers to him to walk a little straighter.

A childs' sweet breath decorates the window tonight,
As blue eyes look up toward a Mothers' face in the sky - -
Whispering goodnight; little Amy lets out a shattered sigh,
Praying that her Mother will find a way to kiss the moonlight.

© Jenna Elphick
October 12, 2006.

I don't like it =| . I will more than likely be fixing this one soon lol.

-Jenna.

:D ... exlelent... any other reserves are now no longer reserved.

Jenna. what type of poem have you tried?? ... [sonnet] ect.... ? please place it by your answer

-Terra

Awe eff me, I forgot we hadta try a new style =| . Ugh, sorry Hunn, I'll redo it later on tonight.

-Jenna.

crystal tears please!

CRYSTAL TEARS [who cares]

crystal tears you'll never see
who cares about me. leave me alone
stop looking stop staring please!
i hate to see what my mistake was

i'll stand strong, no one knows who i am
because i don't trust no one, especially myself
so just stab me with your little sharp knife
and let me be like i never existed

go on do it! i don't care anymore!
show them who you really are, how bad you are!
how i am so guilty and how you so regret it
show them what you feel don't lie about it

i don't care anymore, because you're the only one i care about
not even myself i take care, who cares about me
just one more chance or kill me
at least i don't have to feel the feelings vibrating between us

it sounds weird lol. i'm not used to not writing with rhymes. lol. this is a great contest!

I am attempting a non-rhyming poem

Pull me to heaven

I dream of a golden throne
surrounded by angels.

I dream of soft and sweet angelic music
streaming from a golden harp.

I dream of pure white clouds
that are softer then down pillows.

I dream of beautiful lambs
grazing in the meadow.

I can smell the sweet smell of milk and honey
and I can almost taste it too.

I see beautiful people of all ages,
shapes, and sizes floating in white robes.

Everyone is smiling
they even know my name.

I hear whispered words
that I can clearly understand,
saying they will save a place for me.

They all gather around a tall and glorious tree
full of an unknown fruit.

I walk toward them with my hand
held out, hoping that I can have a
share.

A beautiful women appears out of
no where and says: "It's not your
turn."

I step away then she smiles at me
and that is when I awake.

I know that it all was just a dream,
but to me it seemed so real.

So I pray to God everyday, asking him
to pull me to heaven.

I know that this is one of the worse poems that I have ever written, but I did the best that I could. So I ask that you please not be to harsh with your commenting.

Hey id love to enter this contest.. but.. i dont kow what to write.. i strted out only writing rhyming poems,., now im doing everything.-all diff styles and forms-. any suggestions?

DM Saint --> [who cares] will not work.. im sorry but you have to specify what you have tried that is differnt.

Some suggestions...

MonoRhyme... all the way through, the last word rhymes

Tyburn
sylable count... 2,2,2,2,9,9
first four lines are desciptive words
last 2 lines rhyme... and how the first four discriptive words some where in them.

Ottava Rima
10 or 11 syllables
one octive poem--- abababcc
two octive poem--- abababcc, dededeff
three octive poem--- abababcc, dededeff, ghghghii

Letty... your poem is accually realy good i like it...

but in the beggining you didnt break your lines up like you did at the end...

Example

I can smell the sweet smell of milk and honey and I can almost taste it too.

I walk toward them with my hand
held out, hoping that I can have a
share.

just break up your first couple of verses, as you did your last and it will be awsome

-Terra

Contest closing at 5pm
3 hours from now....

any last entrys?

When is 3 hours from now?
Lol!

It was yesterday lol. =P

-Jenna.

sorry this is taking so long for me to judge... im almost done and the poems are so far awsome :D

… Tears [Tetractys]

good work. It worked out really well.. you’re a natural

… Confessions Of A BrokenHeart (Trois-Par-Huit)

second stanza does not equal 6 syllables
second verse, second stanza does not equal 12 syllables

now onto the poem. It was well written. Good job. The flow was steady… the only thing that made me stop reading was the kids that are here. lmao.

JENNAS… tiz not a knew format sweety

…. Pull Me To Heaven

Great poem.. drew me in and kept me there.. great work

…. CRYSTAL TEARS [who cares]

great poem.. well written and kept me interested. Great work

Now.. sense this was a Opposite Contest… there is going to be no first place, second place.. ect. You all did great poems. And will all get 2 comments.
( i dont believe some one should be judged on something new.. but should get suggestions on how to improve.)

Hey Mister! It was a new rhyme scheme for me lmao. Yeah I know it wasn't hunn, that's why I said don't worry about it if I didn't get it later that night lol, I forgot we had to do a new format. -Blushes.-

-Jenna.