Difficult Contest :P

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K...I was starting to write a poem today and i was thinking...my last contest was a complete disaster so...this one may give u some initiative to just try it...

You have to try to make as many words rhyme as possible...while still making sense of course...

you cant use this because this is what i wrote earlier but heres my example

As I take my last breath or two,
Id fake a fast death for you,
If I could tell me whats right,
It would propel me through the night

because this is going to be a more difficult then usual contest...i will accept the first 5 poems depending on how fast i get submissions...i may allow more or less im not sure...so if u want it to last please start submittin

Rules:
1.please try to contain the length
2.MUST be new
3.MUST be yours
4.probably should be winning material if you wanna win...but it doesnt have to be lol
5.MUST have more then 1 rhyme per line...not just the typical 1 rhyme at the end of the line...

1st: 10 r/r/c's
2nd: 8 r/r/c's
3rd:7 r/r/c's
Rest depends on submissions

-Edit-

My Chaos

Thoughts of my utter madness are flying...
while knots start stuttering as I am dying!

Losing control of what's left of my mind,
while cruising with the depth of all time!

Will I ever get rid of these overpowering thoughts...
or even feel fit to shove the towering plots?

Could I be insane or just fairly plain...
would you see my rein or only my fame?

So many faces trying to prevail,
but only disgraces of crying will sail!

wow this was a very challenging contest...it is harder than it seems...I usually ryhme with all my poems with the last word of each sentence ryhming but trying to do more within the sentences are extremely hard....but was fun ;) thanks for the challenge :)

Mams Regret

Underneath the night sky,
wonder if she's right to cry.
Flowing free again the tears,
knowing all the pain she fears.

Trying to explain herself,
dying to regain her health.
Her daughter cries. Began to fret.
She caught her lies. Her Mams regret.

Donna

^^^ Ha ha, that was cute, Bob!

The Shop on Willow Street
By: Twisted Heart

Inside a shop on Willow street
You may stop and chance to meet
The man who has collected things
From lands that he has seen.
Unique, they are, in design
Critiqued by him, over time
Funny looking, ordinary, things

He's seen so many things its clear
From dreams inside his mind, they rear
He'll change simple little notions
With strange goo from a potion.
Resisting all the common parts
Persisting, as he wields his art
As he puts his hands in motion.

With grace of hand that never strays
He'll take a vase that's made of clay
And slap a little of his goo
a map he'll trace as he goes through
omitting all the mundane things
submitting it with lively rings
Then places it upon a shelf for you.

No longer does he sell his art
Much stronger, he, to be a part
Of all that is less ordinary
And called a man extraordinary.
Redeeming things with simple tools
Beaming like a silly fool
He proudly dances as you tarry.

He'll gladly show you all his treasures
And madly glow with his pleasures
As you ooh and awe in glee
Its true you'll leave more happily.
You'll swear you'll return one day
It's hard to tear yourself away
From the shop on Willow Street.

hmm...jess and suicide...i dont think you get what i meant...its more then just the word at the end that rhymes its like...2+ words per line like...im my example its capitalize all the rhymes to show u...

As i TAKE my LAST BREATH OR TWO,
Id FAKE a FAST DEATH FOR YOU,
If i COULD TELL me whats RIGHT,
it WOULD PROPEL me through the NIGHT

but all the rest are awesome...compared to the other contest im really surprised on the amount of feedback...also i forgot to add that the poem has to be new...but for those who already submitted you are ok because...u already submitted and didnt know...so ya...

ok...sorry

I hope this works, I changed an old poem so that it would fit your rhyme scheme, but if you compare the two truly only the last two lines are the same, is that ok? If not just let me know.

Final Goodbye

Snowflakes melt through an angel sigh
Emotions I felt will never run dry
As Lady Dusk knelt with her hands to the sky

My flooded eyes search for a trace
A lost soul cries in the enormity of space
Numerous tries for a glimpse of your face

Yet laughter stalls in the tumbling streams
The forest silent falls as the hawk above screams
And Time, she enthralls the mocking of dreams

Now my heart's undying tears will no longer mend
I shed all my fears while I spiral to the end
The fading light clears as I start to descend

Shimmering I weep as you slowly die
Yet you smile so sweet with our final goodbye

yep...thats awesome...its even better how it was an existing poem and u managed to change it and it turned out so well...i like it

um is this over?

well umm...it doesnt look like anyone has anything else for it so umm...i guess so...i'll start judging em now

didnt get a look in

do u wanna post something cuz i havent started judging yet...i just got home

ok ive decided...

1st-Twisted-I had no clue what this was really getting at but i loved how amazingly flowing it was and how poet...my jaw dropped...almost...

2nd-Crazy-I really liked this poem cuz i like poems that the author is kinda questioning but giving possible answers...i dunno if that made sense but it did to me lol

3rd-Bob-I liked this one because it is so true about our society...no one really cares about poets its just...crappy music these days...i wish some of these "gangstas" would come to realize music is only poetry with a beat...i think the only time it rhymed more then once was the slippity sloppity flippity floppity part but i liked it alot

4th-Donna-I liked this poem too...i dunno y but i did it just flowed really nicely i guess...

5th-Kim-I liked this one as well but it didnt flow that well and i dunno maybe seemed a bit forced

Congrats to everyone...sorry for the wait...give me the names of the poems u want ur r/r/c's for and i'll start right away

here is how many u get

1st-10
2nd-8
3rd-7
4th-5
5th-4

Thanks. I appreciate the 1st place. Congrats to the other winners.

Happiness
Jeannie

Thanks :] Well done everybody.. erm 5 poems?

Save The Lectures Please
Life
I Can't Lie... It Hurts Like Hell
Circumstantial
My Apology

Thanks xx

wow...thats awesome...just for that...i'll give em to someone else...and do some of urs :P

just to make sure...sluvious u r bob shank right?

im pretty sure u r but just checkin

If you would just take any ten, or my last ten submitted. I would like to thank you for choosing me for first place. This was a very good contest.

Trully enjoyed it.
Jeannie

Oh yea, and Bob, thanks for the comliment.

congrats to the winners ^_^ it was fun contest, u can comment any u want, thanks!

you can pick any of mine is fine...thanks :)

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