I will have your feedback,plz

hi,
i'm new in this community.
i come from germany and have
already tried to post my poems
in german forums,
but i think there are to few people
which understand them really,
so i will now try to post them to
people, which understand the
language very well ;)

please read thru them and
tell me, if i make some mistakes
in expression, because i know
what i mean in german, but if i can
take it to english, i do not know

why i write poems in english?
because i find that they sound much
better than those i write in german

give me a chance to improve my writing

thx

come on, give me a chance