HELP!

Need help on a new poem I've submitted called Night Fire (for the mean time at least). Please read it, once you do, you'll know what I need help on. Thanks for anyone that helps :) it means a lot to me.

Hey, I read the poem and commented on it, but figured it would be better to add my suggestions here. I think it was a really well written poem, as I said. It is fine in the nature category, but if I were you I'd change the title to "In the Deep of Night" just because thats when fire is most alluring, and you say it often in the poem. The only other thing I can think of is that maybe if it were a little bit longer, it might be better, but it is fine either way. Thats all the advice I have...hope it helped. :o)

Thanks a lot. I think I'll use that title since it rocks lol. Yeah I'm hoping to add another stanza or two to it sometime soon since I myself thought as well that it could be a little longer. Thanks a lot though!!

Eh I actually changed it to Fire in the Deep of Night because I thought the title should mention something about fire in there somewhere since that is what the whole poem was written about...

I've also added 2 more stanzas to it in case you happen to see this Robyn and want to check it out again..

Hey, I'll read your poems. Return the favour please! If not, then I'll understand :) thanks.

I'll be more than happy too. If I'm not able to do it right away don't worry...school and such has been keeping me kinda busy but I will soon as I can.

Those last two stanzas are excellent! You didn't loose the feeling of the poem, which is what I do when I go back and try to write more of them. Awesome job! :o)

I'm thinking of Flames of Darkness or maybe something like Fire in the Night..Burning Darkness..something to that effect. Anyone like any of these titles or have any more suggestions?

And thanks a lot Robyn, I'm heading over to check some of yours out right now Marta :)