Bittersweet Vale

I know this is said soo many times but please could someone comment/critique my work. It seems this is the only way i can get my stuff read, so im asking nicely, please take a look. It is called "Bittersweet Vale" and as you can probably tell by the name it isn't a straight forward, normal cliche filled poem, although there might be one in there. Please anyone critique me. Thanks.

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Thanks Eddie, i appreciate your comment a lot.