Please help me begin my career!

I posted 'One Wish' which was a chorus on a song I was working on and today in school I thought of lyrics and I put them together and I've basically got half a song. I've posted a few verses so puh-leeze tell me what u think, this could be the beginning of my career coz ths is my first song. Im so stoked coz iv nvr been able to write lyrics before this! thanx guyz. -Lizzy

annmarie, hi! i would love 2 e-mail you but my e-mail dosnt work so i try to avoid e-mail where possible...do u by ay chance hav msn messenger?