between then and now CONTEST

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ok so i thought it would be a cool idea for a contest to see how far so many of you have come...

what to do:
-post your first (or one of your first) poem that you wrote
-write a new poem to show how much you've improved since your first poem (or if you've recently put it on this site...lets say 3 days ago, you can post that too) and post it up here

RULES:
1) it can be about anything
2) cussing is allowed, but try not to have too much of it
3) you actually have to put up one of your first poems... it doesnt count if you just write a really bad one to put up here...but how will i know? just be HONEST please!
4)your other poem has to be new OR has to have been posted on this site on november 9th or later.
5)there will be 10 spots
6) reserves are allowed
7)contest closes november 26 th(2 weeks!) or when all the spots are taken, whichever comes first
8)to avoid confusion, please put both poems in the same message
9)have fun!

any other questions, just ask me!

PRIZES:
1st place - 5 r/r/c s and put on my favorites list
2nd place - 4 r/r/c s
3rd place - 3 r/r/c s
2 HONORABLE MENTIONS: 1 r/r/c
anyone who submits a poem - 1 vote

poems:
1) DONE {Bryan}
2) DONE {luanne}
3) DONE {Lush.Fcuk-*}
4) DONE {~*Who Cares?*~}
5) DONE {CharismaticCountryGirl}
6) DONE {ily}
7) DONE {[Baby]Blue[Baby]Blanky}
8) DONE {xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex}
9) DONE {YouMakeMeSmile{Skippy Sarah}}
10) DONE {Italian Stallion}

reserve please

xxleisaxx

Reserve please. I'll get them tomorrow.

-Jenna.

My First poem:

I Love You
by Italian Stallion

With the start of each new day
I find myself thinking of you...
In the middle of my busy day,
my mind wanders and I think of you...
Out of nowhere I see your smile,
hear your laugh and I think of you...
Life is beautiful now because I fall in love
all over again each time I think of you.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

A New Poem:

It happened one night
by Italian Stallion

It happened one night
When I was alone
I met a girl
And now I call her my own

Her name was Liz
She was so kind
Her eyes met mine
And we started to entwine

Holding hands
In the warmth of the night
Holding each other oh so tight
We love one another, and that is no lie

She gave me a kiss
And said I love you babe
We held each other
And watched the stars shine

It started to get late
So I took her home
Gave her a kiss
And knelt on one knee

She looked at me and started to cry
I said Liz, will you marry me?
I held out a ring and waited for her reply
She couldn't help but to smile, and say,

"I love you Joe,
Of course I'll marry you,
You are the one I've always loved
And the one that is oh so true"

© Copyright 2006 By: Italian Stallion

theres 3 outta 10... 7 more spaces left!

Can I please reserve a spot? Thanks =]

Sarah
xoxo

Ok its not my first one, but like 3rd:

Best friends are forever
Guys are never
Best friends care
Guys are never there

Best friends are true
Guys make you blue
Best friends stick by you
Guys never do

Best friends never lie
Guys make you die
Best friends you can count on
Guys will con

Best friends will help you
Guys arent true
Best friends love you
Guys sould too.
----------------------------------------------------------

This one I just wrote:

As the first tear falls
Down the smooth cheeks
I finally realise that its over
After all these weeks

I waited so long for you
I thought you were the one
But you threw it back in my face
You were looking for fun

I dont need you know
Nor will I need you later
For you hurt me that deep
There is no hole thats greater

But I wont give up now
I'll keep on staying strong
You have not killed me
I will live long

Suicial Love {Old}

With a delicate soul,
And broken wings,
She is left alone,
Without her dreams.
This little girl,
She weeps and cries,
She's mad at the world,
And doesn't know why.
No one can help her,
Yet no one will try,
So her thoughts are horrors,
Of suicide.
With everything to hide,
She lingers in bed,
As the thoughts of suicide,
Run through her head.
She began to dream,
With a fitful sleep,
In her head it would be,
Much too deep.
She drowns in her thoughts,
Everyday,
It's not her fault,
But she will have it her way.
She will rid of this place,
And be gone forever,
So she begins with haste,
And devises a plan so clever,
That she never sees,
Her one mistake.
This will cost no fee,
And she will never wake.
But the one thing she didn't know
Was that there was someone,
Who truly loved her so.
So now that she's done,
The lover lowered his head.
He whispered in her deaf ear,
'You were my one,
You were my dear,
And I can not live,
Without you near.'
So he took her knife,
Placing it to his heart,
To take his life,
And from this world part.

Carved From Stone {Newest}

Take this heart now carved from stone
Take this heart, now your own
This beautiful vision nothing can compare
To your sacred heart is a beauty so fair

A gorgeous stranger, all alone;
Take this heart now carved from stone,
Charish what is yours, forever confess
This love of yours you may caress

A joyous dance upon a soul of light,
You are my love, my one delight
Take this heart now carved from stone,
Forever you will hold it as your own.

As the sun surrenders to the moon,
I'll be with you to hold you soon
Take my heart, now your own,
Take this heart, now carved from stone.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

reserve me please

Reserve me, also. :]

~this first poem i had written in grade 7. (i am now in grade 11)

Broken

I've traveled this road before
I remember thinking which way i should go
the thoughts that ran through my mind
was hatred and despair

You have no idea how much i miss you
or even that i care
you cant see the pain I'm going through
because you ain't here

I wish you were here, by my side
telling me you love me
I need you to be here
so I'm no longer alone

wipe away my tears
as we lay on the grass
kiss me so gently
as we cuddle in the rain

For every passing moment
I am away from you
I try to re-put together
the puzzle of my life

You see it's hard
much tougher then it looks
for you are my life
and always will be

~this one.. although its not my best work... was written today.. November13th... my first poem in a few weeks..

Between, me and my reflection

Shards of tainted glass;
Streams of crystal tears
Spread across the bedspread
Where crimson droplets lay

With eyes seductive and sexy
and smile flirtatious and frisky
I beg for the attention;
That I dare not foretell

My heart is clouded and concealed
my soul is scared and screaming
yet I dare not foretell
I beg for the attention

You kiss upon my lips
A tongue teases my breast
And so close to my heart
you can not feel the beating?

my lips upon your ear,
Finger tips trace your chest
And so close to my soul
You can not hear the screams

When i say , I love you
Be sure to whisper in;
And please answer this, between
me and my reflection, who do you love?

Dear Father,

Things in my life are slowly getting better.
That is why I'm writing this letter.
We haven't talked, in what seems like forever.
We haven't got along, not ever.
I know you don't know, but I really do miss you.
I wonder if you feel the same too.
Dad, I need a father in my life,
it might help me get rid of my strife.
After you left, my best friend came back,
now it's only you I lack.
I miss and love you with all my heart.
Even if I didn't at the start.
I dream of nightmeres,
where you die.
All I can do is lay there and cry.
I know you're a drunk now.
There's not much I can do,
but dad, I still love you.
Mom's here for me,
being everything you can't be.
But she's not the real thing,
And it's not the same.
Dad, Iove you
I miss you too.
please come back, I need you.
I know you need me too.
We can fight this together,
make things all better.
I'm writing this for one reason,
It's you I'm needing

That was my very first poem..

This is one I just wrote two days ago.

Good Memories Leave The Toughest Scar.

The echos of my foot that hit the ground,
with each step.. leave that lonely sound.
Reminding me of the pain you gave me,
and telling me everything i couldn't be.

Dreadful things you put me through.
Thinking of the hateful words slung from you..
memories haunting my every dream,
ruining that smile that use to gleam.

Forgetting all the bad times,
and all the hate filled lines.
Forgetting all the scary thoughts,
and anger feelings you have brought.

Well, the bad memories have disappeared,
and the good have become the most feared.
For, my father who's drifted oh so far,
has made good memories leave the toughest scar.

The other's not my best, but it's what I've improved in that topic. So, I figured it'd be more fair, because some topics are better than others.. SO yeah. Lol.

Thanks. :]

Friendship Is…

Friendship isn't about silly sayings
Like Best Friends Till The End
And even though that's what we are
The meaning far extends

It's finishing the other's sentence
For your thoughts are the same
Laughing at some inside joke
That no reason can explain

It is late nights spent talking
About those non-important things
Or really listening to the other
When life shares its sting

It's turning up the radio
And singing the music off key
Because in such a friendship
There's a deep sense of security

It's a sincere appreciation
A knowing that someone's there
A shoulder to lean on
When the world's too much to bear

And when everyone else has left
They stick by your side
Yes it's this kind of friendship
That gives meaning to my life.

Second poem I posted on this site, not my second ever, but in a LONG time.

Questions

Love leaves so many questions,
Still needing an answer from you.
Is it happening to me?
And do you feel all of this too?

Will we stand the test of time?
How can you tell if we are right?
Are you showing the true you?
Can we make it through the fights?

Will you be truly happy?
Will I be everything you need?
In twenty years will you still smile,
When you awaken next to me?

Will our love keep on growing?
Will each kiss feel like the first time?
Will our separate dreams come closer,
And as one will they entertwine?

I wonder all of these things in my head,
But when I'm with you, I don't doubt.
For somehow in the back of my mind,
I know that you and I will work out.

By: Charisma*

the last one was done today!

cani reserve? i have to go now..but ill do it when i get home in a few hrs...thnx

there was 11 entries, but i will allow them because i didnt fill in all the spots at the top

officially, besides the people who reserved, this contest is CLOSED!! i will put the results up once i get every poem

New:
I Won't Be There (11/11/06)

When you need me, remember one thing,
Remember the pain when you hear me sing.
Remember you hurt me, you broke my heart,
Just stabbed me with a poisonous dart.

Remember everything you told me was a lie,
Didn't even care when I said I want to die.
You're no good to me, but I miss you so,
But there's one thing you should know.

When you need me, I won't be there,
You can cry and scream, but I won't care.
You can call me up, I'll let it ring,
It's all your fault, you ruined everything.

Told me of your plans to take me from this hell,
Just another lie that your mouth did tell.
Said you loved me, but you have no heart,
Day after day the pain would restart...

I thought you cared, but I was wrong again,
No more Ms. Nice Girl, you're not my friend.
I thought you cared, why and I ALWAYS wrong?
Now all I can listen to are sad songs.

When you need me, I won't be there,
Remember I loved you, but now I won't care.
You can continue to hurt, continue to stare,
But it's too late baby, I won't be there.

Old:
They Never love me too...(oldest i can find)

I admit I've fallen in love,
and thought that my man, fell from up above.
But no matter how hard I ever try,
All he'd say is I don't like you, goodbye!
I cant ever figure out whats wrong with me,
Every night god hears a plea, coming from me,
To send out a miracle, let me be loved too,
Instead of being tossed aside like an old shoe.

Waits for others to finish....*whistles* haha

well, if you want to write a new one, but want to be in a contest and dont want it to fill up before you get to writing it.... lol but i agree, the reserve thing gets too much sometimes...

K, Then. o_O

Well, three more. :]

Good Job, Everyone. :]

I'd remove their Reserves If I where you and open it up to others again since they have had plenty of time and they never did it. Just my two cents.

Peace, Joe

i think i will....
OK heres the deal:
if those three people get their poems in on time, then they can still be in the contest. BUT if three OTHER people before you post with their poem, then you are out of it in order of when you reserved

got it? KK

in otherwords, three spots open!

EMILY

First On This Site:

Im sorry but life just is not worth this pain,
its time for me to say my good-byes,
lets take one more stroll down memory lane,
please didn't cry;wipe the tears from your eyes.

Its better this way,
but please didn't you forget,
i Love u all more than words can say,
but this is one thing i know ill never regret.

Each cut is a step up to heaven's door,
one more and i'll be there,
I just can't stay here anymore,
this life i cannot bare.

So i pick up the knife and cut,
one more step and i'm at the door,
i have a sinking feeling in my gut,
but the door opens and i take my first step onto heavens floor.

© Jenna Elphick
November 4, 2004

&& Latest:

The Fourth Drink Instinct.

With a fake ID and her Daddy's credit card,
She steps her innocent feet inside the bar.
Heads turn and eyes watch from all around,
As she sits down and orders up the first round.

Shot after shot she drinks her past away,
Drowning her tears as the bartender turns to say;
"Girly, you're way too young to be in here,
And this life that you've chosen, isn't the best dear."

And she looks up with blood shot eyes and slurs;
"This habit of mine, it used to be one of hers,
And some would say it's what I'm destined to be,
For Mr.Jose Cuervo has sure grown on me."

And she stoops her head and asks for one more,
As the gentleman watches her from beside the door.
And later tonight, he will find that bed so easily,
But in the morning, he'll lose all credibility.

The fourth drink instinct starts to kick in,
As she feels his breath dampen upon her skin.
She stumbles toward the door as tears fall down,
Ending her night with a stranger and a bottle of Crown.

© Jenna Elphick
November 19, 2006

__Sorry that I didn't get it in sooner. Once again, I've been busy helping my friends through a car crash that two of my best friends were involved in. So I've been busy. __

no problem jenna, there was still 5 more days in this! and i hope everythings alright:)

i cant wait to see the other two ones! then i will judge and hopefully get the results out pretty quickly

First poem: Submission date : 2005-06-17
- A world of hate and pain

A three year old is walking lost down the street late at night
Wearing only a diaper and a t-shirt that is dirty and way to tight
Across the world another child is crying, mommy I am hungry
We have nothing left to eat
Another child is beaten and left dying in the street

In a quite town a girl is raped by a father or an uncle
Or someone she thought she could trust
Completely stripped away of her pride
By incestive lust

Another child lays hopeless and helpless
In a hospital bed
Dying of cancer or leukemia
Something any mother would dread

Men are tortured or beaten in some far away place
Women and children shot ,beaten and raped
Bombs going off and bodies torn to pieces
People losing their loved ones to a senseless massacre

A homeless man on the street begging for money
Sleeping in a cardboard box to shelter from the cold
A pregnant crack addicted girl prostituting so she can eat
And a desperate junkie robbing the store down the street

Gay bashings occurring in an alley late at night
Animals being tortured and killed for the fur on their back
A knife being torn through a person on the street
Some one shot through the head for the shoes on their feet

A child molester sitting beside you at the next table
A burglar lerking outside your house late at night
An innocent bystander hit by a stolen truck
I can only think to myself , what the f***

So many diseases I can't even name
People dying of aids , cancer and many others
So much sadness, pain and hurt
I often wonder if it will be better when I am buried in the dirt

If only we could learn to love one another
To help that older person across the street
To hold the hand of that person dying of aids
And to not criticize that 13 year old having a baby

Some of us were born into a life of cruelty and despair
And then there are others who don't even care
To stand and watch that man getting beaten
Turning our heads and walk away

Why is there hate in the world
And so many disasters
Why don't we do something when we see it happen
Because we are afraid of what might happen or do we not care

I hope today we will all do just one nice thing
To help our fellow man
And even if something little is all you can do
Just remember this world didn't get this way in a day
But with everyone just giving a little our world will someday find Peace

Most recent poem : Submission date : 2006-11-20
-Aunt Flo Visits Again-

*Dedicated to all the ladies

Has it been 28 days already
since you've gone away
now your back again to visit
and I alway dread your stay
...... no welcome mat for you

You simply have no consideration
dropping in whenever you please
delivering cramps to my stomach
that nearly knocks me to my knees
...... should be a law against this

Woof down a pound of chocolate
what do you care, how fat I get
emotions on a teeter-tatter
oh, this mood swing isn't over yet
...... so men beware

Ah, those feminine hygiene products
the ones that bear your name
with pretty colors and little flowers
haven't you any deceitful shame
...... nothing pretty about this

We've had the cramps long enough
women should now have a chance to vote
I kindly hand over my menses crown to all men
now wouldn't that just sink their boat
...... but after all it is called MENstruation

Don't bother calling the gynecologist
he'll only say, he knows how it feels
I'll give him a taste of his medicine
with this pair of 3 inch heels
...... now who feels nauseous huh ?

Well, 5 days have now passed
time to say good-bye again Aunt Flo
I know you'll be back again real soon
can't say I'm sad to see you go
...... Good Lord, how long till menopause

ok one more entry! (or reserve that needs to be filled)

2 days!!

*e-con[allineare].viene-il[dolor

name chage

now i am [Baby]Blue[Baby]blanky

-Terra

kk thanks for letting me know!

lol it gets confusing. so i have learnt to tell people lol :)

ONE MORE SPOT LEFT! and no reserves, its gotta be done by tonight if at all. if it isnt, i wont count that one and i'll just judge on what i have.

ok , so ive judged this contest, meaning it is officially CLOSED. so just to let you know, one of the things i was judging was how much youve improved, and the other one was how good the newer poem was. to be honest, there were a few poems where i thought the older ones were better! BUT i had to choose a few winners so.....

honorable mentions:
[Baby]Blue[Baby]blanky

YouMakeMeSmile{Skippy Sarah}

3RD place: CharismaticCountryGirl

2ND place: ily

1ST place: xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

CONGRATS all, and i should be giving you your 'prizes' later today

Oh my goodness..
I am seriously baffled I got 1st...
I mean.. wow..
[Is speechless]

Thank you so much. I felt that I had improved, but to see that someone else thinks that as well means so much to me; the world. From writing so much, I have learned an abundant amount of things... and knowing that I improved...
I'm really glad you liked them... Thank you so much.... [Mouth still open]

Wow...

And congradulations to everyone else.. I hope you were as happy as I was. =]

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

Congrats to all the winners!

I am truly amazed I placed...I didn't think it had been that much of an improvement..so I am glad to be wrong! LOL ! Thank you and congrats to ALL !
Charisma*

congragulateions... wow i splelt that wrong but am to lazy to back space... congrants everyone.

i lose. o well. congrats every1.

lol I posted the poems I was hoping you'd comment on in a different site. I honestly can't remember if you did mine yet or not. If not, would you do
Thunderstorm Tears
Dodging Bullets
Friends Isn't Enough

Thanks!
Charisma*

yup, ive done yours Charisma but i will still comment on those ones sometime soon, because ive got you on my favorites list :)

awww....thanks! That's always cool to know! I believe you're on mine too! Cool!
Charisma*

ohhhhhhh.
YAY.
thank you so very much. :]]]