Your New Best

In this contest I would like you to write your NEW best poem. That's right....I want everyone to try writing a new poem they feel is their best. So pour yourself into it. Search into your soul and dig up the best you've got! But they only way I can know if it's your best is if you post what you feel WAS your best up until this one. So when you post your new one and your old one, be sure to let me know which is which! Otherwise I can't judge fairly!
I only have a few rules....
1. No profanity (not even the little words)
2. Nothing religious (not even holidayish...no that's not a word lol but you know what I mean.)
3. Please do not submit dark poems. Thank you.
4. Have fun!

Normally, I enjoy rhyming poems, so I can be biased there, but I realize a lot of you like non-rhyming poems, so I'm gonna try to keep an open mind in this contest. I look forward to all your entries.
You have about one week! So that should be plenty of time!!!! Get started!!!!
Charisma*

glad you entered sluvious, but which is your new poem, and which is your old one? I need both, and if they both are here, could you tell me which is which? Thanks!
Charisma*

May we enter one we wrote yesterday? Thus it is fairly new? Or must it be completely new...
For, either way, I want to reserve.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

Yesterday is fine....just as a reminder....make sure you tell me which is new and which is old...thank you!
No reserves....just copy and paste. Try and have it in by January 1st. Thanks!
Charisma*

I Am Your Lie {Triquatrain} [New]

I had to change one word, sorry, it has the star by it, but I hope that's ok.
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I'm your infection, your one detection*,
Your feeling of surrender.
Your dangerous face, with your illegal taste,
I am your heart's defender.
This love of lust, an ebony of trust,
To your one nights eyes.
Take feelings of bliss, by a gentle kiss,
I am your one lie.

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The Triquatrain form was created by Robert L. Huntsman. It is a quatrain poem in tri-rhyme
with a specific rhyming pattern (see below). Lines 1 and 3 have internal rhyme whereas lines 2
and 4 do not.

Rhyme Pattern:

(a,a)
b
(c,c)
b

(d,d)
e
(f,f)
e

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Suicidal Love [Old]

With a delicate soul,
And broken wings,
She is left alone,
Without her dreams.
This little girl,
She weeps and cries,
She's mad at the world,
And doesn't know why.
No one can help her,
Yet no one will try,
So her thoughts are horrors,
Of suicide.
With everything to hide,
She lingers in bed,
As the thoughts of suicide,
Run through her head.
She began to dream,
With a fitful sleep,
In her head it would be,
Much too deep.
She drowns in her thoughts,
Everyday,
It's not her fault,
But she will have it her way.
She will rid of this place,
And be gone forever,
So she begins with haste,
And devises a plan so clever,
That she never sees,
Her one mistake.
This will cost no fee,
And she will never wake.
But the one thing she didn't know
Was that there was someone,
Who truly loved her so.
So now that she's done,
The lover lowered his head.
He whispered in her deaf ear,
'You were my one,
You were my dear,
And I can not live,
Without you near.'
So he took her knife,
Placing it to his heart,
To take his life,
And from this world part.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

^ kewl poem.....

i wanna join here to altho i might do it tomorrow cuz i'm tired today

A Thousand Things Went Right Today

A thousand things went right today
So much more than the wrong
I woke up to a new day, tied my shoes
And sang my favorite song

A thousand things went right today
My friends were all alive
Once again, they greeted me
With a simple, caring, "Hi"

I wasn't scared to flash a smile
My locker opened right
My homework was completed
I didn't get into a fight

A thousand things went right today
I was noticed by my crush
I woke up breathing right today
And I didn't miss the bus

My hair was brushed and combed again
I could see with my eyes
I could hear and smell and think
I could tell dark from light

A thousand things went right today
The sun came up again
When night came, the moon shone oh-so-bright
A thousand things went right

The teacher said I over-achieved
I felt pleased with myself
I figured out how to draw a wink
I put a book up on the shelf

A thousand things went right today
I had a day more of life
I understood the math lesson
Today, I didn't cry

A thousand things went right today
I could tell left from right
Today, I gave good advice
In every hour, I smiled

A thousand things went right today,
My heart still had its beat
I kept my life and didn’t die
I didn’t get mugged on the street

A thousand things went right today,
and I know they will tomorrow
Some other things won't be the same
But I'll get over my sorrow

Every day has some complications
To make the good seem bad
Tomorrow, look on the bright side
Instead of on the sad

A thousand things will go right for you
A couple wrongs will, too
Although you may trip and stumble
Your mistakes are just a few

Try to focus on the good things
Forget about the bad
Because, my friend, the joy in life
Will conquer all that’s sad

'I Can Love Myself Much Better Than Loving You'

[New & Best]

I watch myself fall down on the ground
And everything just collapse in my hand
everything changed when you weren't around
Nobody else knew and nobody else understand

I'm trying to love myself just like i loved you
And i try to do my best to hold back my tears
Everything was going right, now I'm living the truth
Where my dreams are over, everything what i fear

Nobody listens to me, i am just a part of yesterday
And till the day i die, i will stay like it
Everybody moves on, they're in joy and they play
Everything that they have, what right now i wanted

I sometimes think, this was a curse of love
But now i just really realized i was too young
After what happened, everyone pushes and shoves
When everything went right, it was just all wrong

People say to not look back at their past
And now I'm living with that saying
I'm trying to be more positive, hopefully it will last
Because i realize, you're not really my everything

I can love myself much better than loving you
Myself is my everything, I only live for myself
The past are the lies, what now is the truth
I've picked myself up, i don't need anymore help

I can help myself, you just weren't there
Every minute i lived, i didn't give up
So now, alone, i just really don't care
I understand myself, i help myself, and i won't stop

Not today...Not ever...
I love yous don't really mean 'forever'

Not.so.tough.after.all [lyric]

[Old & Best]

Faking a laugh, faking a smile
trying to make my damn life worth while
it's making me weak, you're making me sick
please give me the words for the rest of this lyric

can you hear me crying, crying all day long?
can you hear me singing, singing this song?

we were meant to be, we had it all
but one day, you slipped your hands away, and on the ground i fall
didn't you hear me? your name i called
broken apart, shattered i lie, between us, a soundproof wall

i saw you flirt with her
she's everything you see in your cheating world
in front of me, you always did it
even your damn poses admit
why are you doing this to me?
what did i do wrong, that made our relationship break apart, so badly?

you seize me everyday
blaming me, is a game i don't want to play
but everyday you look at me, just like how you used to do
can you still feel the feeling the love i have for you?
i know you like her, even before you met me
but why treat me sh!tty?
is this my punishment, your revenge?
my life you'd avenge
full of misery and depression
we're over i already learned my lesson!

we were meant to be, we had it all
but one day, you slipped your hands away, and on the ground i fall
didn't you hear me? your name i called
broken apart, shattered i lie, between us, a soundproof wall

i saw you flirt with her
she's everything you see in your cheating world
in front of me, you always did it
even your damn friends admit
why are you doing this to me?
what did i do wrong, that made our relationship break apart, so badly?

fine you don't want to be my friend
that's alright, i want our relationship to freaking end
i don't want to hear your voice
i want to make my own choice
leave me alone, stop looking at me
what did i do wrong, that made our relationship break apart, so badly!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!bye!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

*whispers* it's making me weak, you're making me sick, this is the end of my song, and my lyric *whispers*

Dead Of A Heartbreak / How Can You Still Call Me Beautiful (OLDEST AND BEST)

by ♥ Miss Ciao

With yesterday’s make-up
Smeared across her face
She shies away
From his loving embrace

“What’s wrong?” he asks
“Nothing, why?” she replies
“I just want to know why
Your make-up’s smeared under your eyes.”

“Oh, it’s nothing, don’t worry.
I’ll be alright.”
“No really, what’s wrong?”
What happened last night?”

She tries hard not to break down
Right in front of him
Her soul is shattered again
She tries to push the pain within

“You know I care, please tell me.”
“Don’t worry, I’ll be fine.”
“No you’re not, you’re not okay
You’re feeding me a line.”

“If I were to talk to you
Would you really care?
After it’s all done,
Would you still be standing there?”

“Oh, honey! You know I do.
Why wouldn’t I be?
When ever have I not been?
It’s alright, you can tell me.”

“I love this boy, but he doesn’t care…”
“Are you sure about that?”
“I’m pretty sure; he never did.”
“Now, why would you say that?”

“Well, he lives too far away
He used to live near me
And we rarely talk anymore
It’s hard to deal with really.”

“Who was this boys?
Where has he gone?”
“No, I can’t tell you
My feelings are wrong.

He has robbed me of my beauty
Stole it from within
When I stopped seeing this boy
He took it away with him.”

“You know, I think you’re lying
Because you know I can tell
That looking through your eyes
You can see you’ve gone through Hell.

You’ve been robbed of something, yes
But not what you speak of
Your beauty and grace are still there
So is your kindness and love.”

“How can you still call me beautiful
While I’m standing here a mess
My face looks so horrible
Plus, this torn and tattered dress?”

“Baby, you shine from within
Your beauty glows and shows
I can see past the make-up
To see the real eyes, lips, and nose.”

“You’re just saying that because you have to
Because you’re just trying to be nice
But this is too much to deal with
I can’t let this happen twice.”

“Sweetie stop…I love you dearly
You know this much is true.
I have always been there for you
And I really truly do.”

As she stood there stunned
Her knees began to shake
As she fell down to the floor
Her whole body began to quake

As he bent to pick her up
He noticed something wrong
Her eyes were staring upwards
Her gaze fixed just too long

He held his dying baby
As she slowly slipped away
“I love you and want to marry you…
I was going to propose Valentine’s Day.”

Through her last moments of life
She tried to tell him, with pain
That he was the boy she loved so dearly
But her efforts were in vain

Her body limping, without a soul
For as she slipped out of life
Her one last dream that couldn’t come true
Was just to be his wife

As her love held her body
That had once been so full
He whispered softly in her ear
“How could I not call you beautiful?”

After her funeral the very next day
The boy broke down and cried
She was his everything in his life
He didn’t want her to die

So as the boy walked home
A dove flew over his head
As he watched it silently
He remembered what she said

And as the boy looked down
To walk to his home
He thought he felt something funny
It’s origin, unknown

Then he saw it shining
Lying on the ground
Her favorite golden necklace
That he just had found

He wondered how it got there
But somehow, it led him home
Then he finally realized
That she had already known

She knew he loved her dearly
Of course she knew that was true
But he never even told her
“Baby, I really love you.”

As he sat upon his couch
The boy felt such an ache
His friends found him the next day
Dead of a heartbreak.

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[(Newest) haven't even submitted it yet]

Teardrops and Heartaches [Lyrics]

Verse 1:
It kills me to see you in the hallway with her
When back then, I was the girl in your world
It hurts so much and it pains me to say
That I still love you in every way

Chorus:
These teardrops and heartaches, they just don't stop
Raining down, these tears still drop
Broken hearts just don't seem to mend
As this pain, oh it just doesn't end

Verse 2:
Tears start falling from my eyes
It's then that I finally realize
You're over me, all's said and done
You've moved on now, you've had your fun

Chorus

Verse 3:
Tissue upon tissue, curled up in my bed
Replaying the scene and what you had said
You think that I wanted this to end
Are YOU content with just being a friend

Chorus

Bridge:
Lines of black stream down my face
As your memory can't be replaced
Look into my eyes, and tell me
Is this the way love's supossed to be

Chorus

Outro Chorus:
Whoa, they just don't stop
Falling hard, they just wanna drop
Baby can't you see, it wasn't meant to end
Let's just forget this, I don't wanna be just a friend

hope ya like them!! =]
♥Ciao

ps. when I said hell I meant the place, not the word =]

Till the Sun Sets (new one)

Sun shall soon rise
And it will stop cries
The dust will clear
And peace is real near

Please make it stop
Make bullets all drop.
Moms soon cry
Asking God why?

Bodies fill the streets
Death rate it completes.
Rivers filled with tears,
brings out our worst fears.

May we meet an Angel
May peace finally come.
May eyes once more twinkle
May hearts all be one.

December comes again
It happens every year
Yet children never seem to win
And bullets are all they hear.

But daylight still is safer
A time when they move on
The people all are gentler
Till the setting sun,
again endangers everyone

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My Guardian Angel (old, best one)

I stand here protected, as one guarded child.
I sit alone safely, where nothing is wild.
Never been in danger, never in harm's way.
and all of life's challenges, waited at bay.

i have always been happy, for I've never felt pain.
my angel stands by me through sun snow and rain.
she is always smiling. and a smile she receives.
she tricks enemies away, or is it me she deceives?

I have always been guarded, and so never in fear.
and I stay locked up always, year after year.
have not seen a human, for she said they are bad
and even though i am healthy, i remain sad.

have i been missing out, is there much more to life,
could i someday have children and maybe a wife?
I must see it for myself, no longer can i wait.
i must be fragile, for fear is a human trait.

i wanted the experience, yet she locked me in.
i tried to run away, but she will always win.
I'm stuck here forever, i cry through the night.
and for the first time ever, i am feeling fright.

so long's gone by now, i still am stuck here.
i now cry every night, for real life is so near.
but here i shall stay, until my final breath.
so is she My Guardian Angel, or my Angel of Death

i don't think my new one beats it but i'll still try

CHAINS UNBROKEN (oldest)

In the corner
filled with dust
not a soul
that she can trust

she sits alone
in the grey
in the fog
that blocks the day

cobwebs sway
on crumbling walls
she stuck inside them
as they fall

and they bring wind
that burn her face
as the debri
is thrown her way

the breeze is cold
on tear wet cheeks
on eyes that search
a heart that seeks

for some faith
some way to trust
to break down walls
and sweep the dust

a chance to live
some air to breathe
some love is really
all she needs

but she is locked
in real tight,
and nightmares haunt her
through the night

and in this room
with broken dreams,
ripped and torn
at the seams

and doors with dust
just left to open
hidden by
the chains unbroken

DEAD WORDS (newest)
“Things really will get better”
That is what you said
But I’ve heard it all before
And your words to me are dead

You tell me that you love me
That I mean so much to you
Yet you never want to be with me
You’ve got better things to do

You barely even notice me
Don’t know that im alive
You don’t see my sadness
Or my tearing eyes

You call me when you’re lonely
When no one is around
Im just you fall back girl
your sheild from the ground

And I tell you time and time again
Im sick of this disdain
yet you show me time again
You don’t care for my pain

But you always know just what to say
To make me feel at ease
You always know just what to say
So that I don’t leave

“things really will get better”
that is what you said
but I’ve heard it all before
and now your words to me are dead

NEW:

I'm sorry (I'm just not good enough)

I'm sorry I did that
But I made a mistake
I don't know how much more
Perfection I can take

I'm sorry I let you down
I never really meant to
I strive so hard to imitate
The oh so flawless you

Every time I fall down
I can never get back up
When you walk away from me
I'm left there feeling stuck

To see just how far I'll go
To get what you want me to
I wont eat breakfast, dinner or lunch
I don't really need to

I'll exercise every day
Stop eating all together
Look! there goes my self-respect
Into horrible, stormy weather

I try and try again and again
To be just what you want
So I'm sorry if you realized
I'm just not good enough

OLD:

Every care you've ever thought
Every gift you've ever bought
Every thing you've ever shared
Every time you've ever cared

Every street you have walked
Every language you have talked
Every treasure you have found
Every moment that's come around

Every sound I've ever heard
Every lesson I've ever learned
Every memory I've ever known
Every emotion I've ever shown

Every food I have tasted
Every moment I have wasted
Every feeling I have felt
Every knee I have knelt

Every person we have loved
Every gift received from above
Every moment of true bliss
It seems to all come down to this

**haha well, i completely missed the part about putting in your old best one.... sry bout that :) :) :) but its in now !**

Emily

Great job everyone! Can't wait to judge! Umm...for those of you who DIDN'T enter your oldest one, please do so soon!
Thank you to all entries!
Charisma*

i hope im not to late..

"together we will glow" (new favorite)

My heart beats fast
My knees grow weak
I get light headed
When you look at me

My body feels warm
When you hold me tight
Butterflies flutter
All dreams in sight

I close my eyes
You kiss my lips
Your hands move down
Rest on my hips

Ill never leave
ill never go
I love you more
Than you could know

Forever and a day
Is what I mean
Ill be here for you
Through the unseen

You can have my heart
my life and soul
Cause you’re the one
That makes me whole

I’ll promise you forever
I will be your all
I’ll never fail to catch you
If by chance you fall

so promise me forever
and never let me go
be my shining star
together we will glow

"selfish boy" (old favorite)

Selfish boy
don't you see
its not about you
its about me

these are my feelings
tied in my heart
the feelings that kill
that never depart

i try not to like you
but it just wont work
you've stolen my being
my heart, and it hurts

if you wont hold me
then just let me be
give back my heart
so that i can breathe

I've fallen for you
to far to see
the light at the end
or whats left of me

you've taken my heart
you invade my mind
your all i can see
when i close my eyes

i want to be yours
i want you to see
that your the only
one for me

but if that wont happen
then please understand
that I'm asking for you
to let go of my hand

don't mess with my mind
cause its all that I've got
you've taken my heart
and its begun to rot

id rather you kept it
safe and warm
close to you
away from the storm

the storm of lust
the storm of greed
when i realize that you're
the one that i need

but i cant keep on going
if your not willing to try
give me a chance
before my heart dies

I'm not going
to waste any more time
the decision yours
it is not mine

so selfish boy
please do see
this isn't for you
this is for me

Besides the one person who needs to post TWO poems, this contest is now closed! The above entry will be accepted, and judging will be done later tonight if at all possible! thank you to all who entered!
Charisma*

Sooo sorry but I was busy last night, and probably can't judge it until tonight or tomorrow. So sorry, but the judging will be done SOON!
Charisma*

oops! really sorry! plz let me still be entered? i guess i read the rules too fast ~

my old fave poem:
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Kiss the stars..
by ∫Bëløveđ∫

Don't be discouraged by what people say
Don't let words like that drive you away

Don't cry because you think nothing will help
Don't give up on your dreams cause you don't believe in yourself

When you want to feel better,yet you feel your dreams are destroyed....
Remember what I told you

Kiss the stars
No matter how far
They will always be there
No matter where you are

Feel the moon
Beneath your feet
Taste the air
Its always sweet

Smile when you're crying
Not when you're alone
Just pretend
You never left home

Become what you want
If thats what you wish
Don't fall down
When you feel your heart lift

Don't pretend to be someone you don't want to be
Don't forget how to be a person like me
To be like me you have to kiss the stars
You'll always be near them no matter how far

You don't die at funerals,you just move on
You realize the people you love are too almost gone
You are born again at gods will
Never broken or bent or killed by a thrill

Don't be who everyone wants you to be
Be what god made you (THE BEST YOU CAN BE)

Inspiration often comes in the smallest things
But exactly one of these stars helped me earn my wings

Don't fall down when you try to get up
Just smile and do all this kind stuff
You can be depressed,or optimistic-
It doesn't matter as long as you get with it.

Be happy with who you are
And after you read this start kissing the stars
Maybe you to will get a gift of wings
Exactly given by these heavenly things

Close your eyes,hear the wind
It has my voice surrounded
You'll never lose hope in the things you will leave
But remember thats what you wanted
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Ķįşš Ŧĥĕ Śŧǻŕś

I wanted to say I really only read maybe one or two of these before judging, and so when I went to judge, realized that some had to be disqualified for not following the rules. For instance, profanity seemed to be the largest cause of disqualification. I am sorry to do this, but it's not fair to the others who enter to accept those that didn't follow the guidelines, though some were very good despite! Anyhoo...I chose two winners who will receive 2 comments or critiques each as long as you let me knew which two poems you want done!
They are!!!!!!!!
xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex
&
becca ♥

Both of your poems were just so good and had great flow to them.

(on a side note to sluvious, your oldest poem was very well done. I am sorry that I had to disqualify you due to even the minor cussing. But just so you know, it was a well done poem and very original)
Congrats everyone!
Charisma*

I would like to say something regarding the Sluvious disqualification.
I don't think that using the word "ass" even in its derogitory sence in a contest like this is worth disqualification.
These people poured thier hearts into thier new works and you disqualify them for ONE word?!?!?!
Without even offering them the option of changing thier poem.
Thats absolutely rediculous.

I know this is just a contest on a random website, but this had to be said in the interest of fairness.

Sincerly,
GA

I do feel bad that I had to disqualify some of the contestants, but I had fairly placed the rules up above stating that not even the LITTLE words could be used. Trust me, I do feel bad having to do that, because what I read of their poems was very good, and I do feel I should have given them a chance to change, but I had stated when the judging would be, and I didn't read but maybe ONE poem before judging, so I couldn't go back. I do enjoy the work of all these poets, so it wasn't easy, but they were rules...next time though, I will try to read the poems before hand, or make sure I ask everyone to double check their entries before entering. Thank you for your opinion, and I am sorry to those I had to disqualify. I do look forward to more contests, and this was a good learning experience for me. Thank you for being patient with me.
Charisma*

I agree with the Sluvious comment, but again, I understand it had to be done.

Thank you for my placing...I appreciate it.

And if Sluvious wants the comments for the correct placing he could have, I'll give them to him.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

thanks im glad you liked my poems.. you can comment any 2 of my poems on my featured list and it would be greatly apprectiated

thank yuou :)

I appreciate the understanding shown on everyone's part. It's all a learning experience for me since I've only held a few contests. Thank you once again for the understanding, and I hope there's no hurt feelings!
Charisma*

was I disqualified for saying hell meaning the place? just curious...
♥Ciao

Honestly, I can't remember. I know that sounds corny...if I had recognized you meant the place, NO i would not have disqualified you. But if there was a misunderstanding on my part, I apologize. Once again, this was a flop on my part. .... I've got a new contest going, and it's going to be checked by me and if I feel anything needs to be changed, everyone will have time to change it!
Charisma*

Thank you, Charisma, for the comments.
They were very well thought out - I hate one lined comments.
Again, thank you.
And thank you for the placing.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

Alright Charisma... no hard feelings :) sometimes it's hard to hold a contest better luck next time =]

♥ Ciao

awww...thanks for understanding sluvious. And thank you everyone! :) *blushes* I feel much better. I look forward to more contests!
Charisma*