Lost Love; Depression Contest.

Hey there.
Happy New Year!

this is just a regular contest... the theme is lost love, and depression.

it is going on tell the 5th of january...
or when we get 20 poems.

Rules...
has to have a rhyme scheme,
no swearing,
NO lyrics,
no reserving... you just have to submit them.
and last but not least it can be old BUT i
would like it better if it was new.

The rewards will be posted at the end of the contest.

Enjoy!
Condescending; Heart.

She Only Wants To Be Held {Rondeau}

Holding herself, another day has gone by,
She takes her wings; she only wants to fly.
Many tries to smile with broken frowns,
Falling continuously to the ground;
Her future in her heart, she must deny.

She's not running to be by your side,
Because there are tears finally in her eyes;
Roses cry and nightingales sound-
...She only wants to be held.

Stars gaze at a lonely sight by the sky,
As this girl sits alone tonight to die-
Nothing can catch what's fallen to the ground,
She can't pick up this sadly smiling frown.
Finally fallen, she sits tonight to cry-
...She only wants to be held.

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A Rondeau is a French form, 15 lines long, consisting of three stanzas: a quintet, a quatrain, and a
sestet with a rhyme scheme as follows: aabba aabR aabbaR. Lines 9 and 15 are short - a
refrain (R) consisting of a phrase taken from line one. The other lines are longer (but all of the
same metrical length).

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

nvm. :]

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These Porcelain Tears
Bryan

The sun sets on her Porcelain Face,
tears roll down her cheeks in such disgrace.
For a love that was forgotten, no one really cares,
the pain she shows is too much for her to bare.

Writing her final note, no one around to see,
what she's been through, how hard life can be.
So she sits on her bed, with a pen and some paper,
waiting on her Prince Charming to come and save her.

She writes down her feelings, each and every day,
hoping her true love will come and take her pain away.
Wait as she might, her Prince Charming never shows,
writing down her feelings, but the torture never goes.

So she swallows the pills, lays the bottle by the bed,
and finishes writing her note, this is what it said,
"If my Prince Charming finds this, don't have any fear,
I will die here now with these Porcelain Tears."

Fateful Night. =]

They say one night can change you life
And I know that's true for me.
What happened on that December's night?
You'll just have to wait and see.

I met a boy in the spring of `o6,
and I swore he was the one,
The emotions that we shared together,
were more radiant than the sun

Inseparable they said we were,
For I never left his side.
Nominated for *Cutest Couple*
I was his, and he was mine.

Finally school was over,
and I could see him every day.
And I did until that fateful night,
Now things will never be the same.

Boiling days and sticky nights,
Simply drifted by my mind,
Nothing seemed to matter,
Without him by my side.

School began up again,
but I simply didn't care.
I didn`t do any of the work,
and half the time I wasn't there.

So I guess you probably want to know;
How all this has to do with one night?
Let`s just say it started out with a kiss.
And ended with a blatant lie.

xxLMHY

is this ok? if not i'll fix it. let me know:)

It’s Over

You said we need to take a break for a while,
Since that day I can’t seem to fake a smile.
I can’t believe that we are over again,
You and I are now just ‘friends’.

Now when I look around me I can hardly see,
The tears don’t allow me to see right in front of me.
I keep telling myself that I won’t miss you,
But it’s so hard when I know we’re through.

I can’t pretend I don’t think of you anymore,
Because I have since you walked out the door.
I really miss the feeling I had in your arms,
How I was protected, now I’m vulnerable to harm.

I miss you, but I guess it’s over.
~*Who Cares?*~

--oops forgot about the rhymeing part.

When Love Isn't Real

Desolated heart, sinking into despair
Beating weakly, barely there
Breathy and soft words she speaks
Lost love only makes her weak

Why did she pry into his thoughts?
Going into where she ought not.
Confused because she wanted him
Asked for love on just a whim

An idea led by imaginary hope
Reality made it hard to cope
Honest feelings broken down
Wearing Lonely's blackened crown

Left to search for something true
Gave up on nothing but thoughts of you
Tortured by glimpses of past dreams
Sewing together fraying seams

What was lost she can't get back
But parts of her are still in tact
Those pieces she'll take with her now
Start again. She must, somehow.

By: Charisma*

Faded Love, Faded Soul
By: Twisted Heart

Was the lingering reflection
Just a passing of the love
Within this shattered dwelling
Is a wound worth speaking of.

A homage for the refuge
Where once a faith had lived
Now holds the broken pieces
Of a heart that can't forgive.

A soul that lost its beauty
By a lie told long ago
Now stands inside the emptiness
Unable to let go.

For just as surely as the heart
Reminds the soul to weep
It'll bring the hope of loving
In the dreams that follow sleep.

But holding to the memories
That tore a life in two
Will be the final judgement
When the pain has carried through.

Among the shards of hopelessness
Is the heart and soul's last breath
Distinguished by the hardened mind
With hands that offer death

Still, we sit inside ourselves
With thoughts we cannot hide
The inkling of a memory
That's formed from faded lies.

It's Pathetic ~couplet~

I can't believe I ever said
I'd love you past the day of my death

I can't believe I missed you when
You tried to break my heart again

On the day you made me cry
I asked myself, "Why, oh why?"

"I'd give anything to have you back
In my arms, for you I lack"

Those days disappeared far into the past
I was a fool to think our love would last

I was naive to think I'd be missed
I used to think you were the reason I lived

I forgot that guys like you
Don't mind ripping any girl's heart in two

I really don't mind, for someday, I'll find
There's someone better who wants to be mine

Goodbye, for in the end I know
There are no friends where trust doesn't grow

Goodbye forever, because at last
Spring has come, and winter has passed

I hate him.
I hate everything he's caused in my life.
I hate how I don't ever want him to go away.
Just the hurt.
I want the hurt to leave,
but he can stay.
My heart-
I was trying to be logical.
I attempted being a civilized person.
You can't be logical when your heart
has been pulled out of your chest,
squeezed, and ripped to shreds.
We can't get over this.
I can't.
This mountains too big for me.
He doesn't know how much I cry now.
How much I cry.
Like a gush of pain over my cheeks.
It lulls me to sleep at night-
sometimes...
Most.
I can't live anymore.
All I see is every miserable detail,
every pathetic hope
that just dies.
It dies so fast, I can't even recognize it.
Gone
within a millisecond of its birth.
The pain is too much to handle.
Bigger than the ache of loneliness,
more horrible than fear.
Who remembers their life without pain?
Pain so big it breaks you in two?
I can't.
Where did I go?
I don't remember where that girl went,
do you?
She was kind.
I liked her.
Is she dead too?

nevermind. it doesn't rhyme.. dang.

Amanda Faye K
Getting Over You

She is out in the pouring rain
No one can tell she is crying
She's feeling great pain
To think this whole time he was ling
What went wrong?
Wishing these feelings won't prolong.
She is missing him so bad
She doesn't want anyone to see
He threw away what they had
Sadly I don't wanna admit that girl is me.

I am trying not to care
Telling you how I now feel
I would not dare
I've told you plenty of times before
But that you just ignored
I thought what we had was true
I didn't mean to fall in love with you
Now what the heck am I gonna do?
This was just enough to let you go
And that I'm gonna do
And these feelings I have hidden
I'll try my best not to let them show

Can't I go back to the start?
When I didn't lose my heart?
I wanna get it back
Get my life on track
I spent so long dreaming
Even though at the same time it was seeming,
seeming all of this was perfect
But really was it worth it?
I haven't forgotten a word you've ever said
And this isn't helping me get you out of my head

Lost in the city
by J. Lau

Wandering aimlessly,
In a city full of people.
So lost...
Mindless...
Nothing seems interesting anymore,
Nothing appears to the mind.
No sense of urgency,
No sense of time.

People all around you,
In a shopping spree.
Talking...
Laughing...
Browsing shops with their loved ones,
Looking for the perfect gift.
Some enjoying the moment,
Some rushing to get back home.

Walking alone quietly,
Without memories to claim my own.
Pacing...
Without purpose...
Just painstakingly waiting,
For a friendship on hold.
A relationship that never started,
Uncertain of its future.

Lost... in a city,
Counting... Every second.

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JUDGING IN PROCESS!
no more entries.

So there will be 3 winners...
1st - 3 comments
2nd - 2 comments
3rd - 1 comment.

[ oh yeah; im NOT placing people on their rating...
just by the ones i most enjoyed. ]

And everybody gets 1 comment on the poem that they entered. The comments that i have made (making) are not really the nicest comments and im sure some of you will not be happy with them. How ever everybody looks at poetry differently, and i apoligize for my open ness. Im not normally so judgemental, but for some reason i have latly noticed that that is the way many people like to have their poems viewed apon.

Condescending;Heart.

[Twisted Heart 9.6]
Great Job! I loved your poem.
And I Am deffinitly giving you first place.
It flowed so smooth and had such a
detailed touch. It was amazing. And my favourite one!
What i liked most about it was how it kept my attention,
through the whole poem... and not just parts
of it.

[CharismaticCountryGirl 8.9]
I really did like this poem. I liked how you
used different 'describing' words, and didnt use
the same word over and over again.
And it was just a 'different' type
of poetry, and i had fun reading it.
I am also giving you second place,
because this was amoung one of my favourites.

[YouHaveMe ♥ 8.0]
I gave you an 8.0 because
i thought your poem had a
farely good rhythm sceme
and it had good rythum.
the ending was also really neat.
great job : ) Im also giving you 3rd place!
congrats...

[ ¤°º♥b3au†ifuliBяok3n♥� 7.0]
This was a really interesting poem,
it started one way and ended so differently.
i really enjoyed reading it. But I dont think that you
should ever rhyme knife with life... it takes
alot away from a really great poem.
I think that if you just change that then
your poem would be amazing.

[Bryan 6.8]
I rated your poem a 6.8 it as well;
had a really off rhythm as well as rhyme scheme,
and i find that those are the 2 most important
things in poetry. But it was an okay poem
other wise.

[xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 6.2]
I rated your poem a 6.2 out of 10,
not because i didnt like it,
i just didnt find it was really attention grabbing.
and alot of times your rhythm was really of track.
how ever I did like the idea of the poem and what it was
describing. good job.

[LoveMeHateYouxx[Lauren] 5.9]
This poem I found was just like any other
typical love poem. Nothing Really stood Out.
And then at the end of the poem you ruined
you rhyme sceme but writing lie instead of something
that rhymed with night.

[∫Bëløveđ∫ 5.4]
I liked this poem... it was really good,
until the end. The end ruined this poem for me,
and i find that the ending is the most important
part and is supposed to some up the whole poem.
And i didnt find that yours did that.

[~*Who Cares?*~ 4.2]
For some reason I just didnt like this poem,
the 1st 2 lines of your 2nd stanza kinda ruined it
for me, because you said 'me' so many times.
sorry, i have read alot of your poetry,
and know that you are a great writer.

[Amanda Faye K 4.0]
Some of the words you wrote in
Here; didnt seem as though they were
in the right spot... or that you didnt entirely
know what they ment. Like you just put them
in there to make it rhyme. Know what i Mean?
And that is another thing that i find really
takes away from strongly written poetry.

[ J. Lau 2.5]
Ha-ha your poem reminds me
exsactly of where i live : )
although... your poem didnt really belong
in this contest... because neither depression
or lost relationship seemed to be in the poem.
well i guess a little bit in the end... But yeah.]

Condescending;Heart.

Wow! Second place?!?!?! That's great! It's been a while since I've really placed in a contest, so thanks a bunch! It was lots of fun!
Charisma*
Would you comment on Shattered Memories and Almost Okay...if you haven't already!? Thanks a bunch!

i do not want to sound witchy. so i warn you , i am open too. =]

actually that poem wasnt like any other love poem, just so you know. if you understood anything about looking deeper into poetry maybe you would know that. seriously she, i was raped., its kind of suck by the one i loved, so i really hate that you say nothing stood out anr that. think of it that way maybe?

ouch. lol o well. haha wat can i say i like talking about myself a lot:P oh well no hard feelings. it was still fun. thnx

xxLoveMeHateYou[Lauren]
Im sorry if you didnt like my comment but that was just the way it seemed when i read it. I Honestly thought that you were talking about ur first time with someone... it was really describing anything about being raped. Although i am sorry that it happened to you.

And by the way... who cares... i do really like ur poems :) I just didnt like that one impaticular.