Head to Head. Just 2 poems! #1

-topic/theme: (not the title) recovering from heartbreak

-post a truly amazing poem.

-contest ends after two poems.

-prizes: just recognition, and perhaps favorites entry.

-head2head. Quick contest. Hurry. Any poems will do. Just let it be really good. If it is not up to the mark, I might not include the poem in the contest, and another entry might be allowed by anyone.

-best of luck :)

are old poems acceptable? I would love to do this!

Hmm.. well I have a poem I wouldn't mind putting in this contest, I don't know about it being amazing, but I tried really hard and it's worth a go I guess, nothing to lose.

I can only enter it if old poems are acceptable though, because it isn't brand new.

Tammie

Let me know if this is acceptable please... =)

Xx So Pathetic xX

You look at me
Like I tore out your heart
As if I was using you
Right from the start

But we know thats not true
Because you did the using
And when we were together
I felt like I was losing

I'm not gonna go back
To the arguments and pain
I'm not gonna make all
The same mistakes again

You were the one who ended it
Don't look for sympathy
Don't even think of trying
To pin the blame on me

Boy, it's so pathetic
It's actually quite sad
No one believes your stupid lies
Stop making me look bad

If you really want me back
That's not the way to do it
When will you just realise
When you finished me you blew it ©

*Gem*

Afraid of the dark

Fear not of the darkness,
Fear what lies within,
The feather light coldness,
That touches your skin.

The sound in the dark,
That drives you insane,
Spinning and turning,
Searching in vain.

The patter of footsteps,
That run through the dark,
The laughter of children,
In the still park.

The dripping of water,
When all should be dry,
A voice that awakens,
When none should reply

The strong smell of burning,
When nothings alight,
These are the things,
That go bump in the night.

Do not feel secure,
Because I'm not afraid,
When light comes again,
I will soon fade.

That patter of footsteps,
That ran through the dark,
That laughter of children,
That laughed in the park.

That dripping if water,
When all should be dry,
That voice that awoke,
When none should reply.

That strong smell of burning,
When nothings alight,
I am the thing,
That goes bump in the night.

Is this poem ok??

Cheers
Laura
x

I'm sorry...i was looking for something else. 2 more everyone, please. and yes, old ones are welcome! :)

Hang on.. whay exactly are you looking for then?

You said recovering from heartbreak... that was what my other poem was but you said it wasn't right so i don't know exactly what you're looking for..
Do any of this work?

Xx Your Juliet xX

All I want is the best for you
Even if you're not with me
We once shared so many happy hours
But it wasnt meant to be

But I want you to be happy
No one deserves it more than you
You gave me so much happiness
So I have no choice but to...

Let you go without a fight
And tell you everythings just fine
Turns out I was not your Juliet
I was just your Rosaline

I know you used to love me
And I loved you just as much
But now you love her more instead
And the memories are cold to touch

But it's because I love you
That I'm going to let you go
I hope you have a happy life
Just wanted you to know ©

*Gem*

or...

Xx From the bottom of my broken heart xX

From the bottom of my broken heart.
I just want you to know.
I gave you all the love i had,
Yet you still had to go.

From the bottom of my broken heart,
I'm still waiting for it to heal.
I swore you'd never have another chance,
Never again, my heart you'd steal.

From the bottom of my broken heart,
You broke it not once, but twice.
I can't believe i was stupid enough,
To fall for all your lies.

From the bottom of my broken heart,
You said you'd never hurt me again.
But you did and it hurt worse than before,
Now, i can't stand men.

From the bottom of my broken heart,
Only one thing left to do.
Is try to make sure, that never again,
Will i fall in love with you. ©

*Gem*

It was in sync with the topic, but wasnt upto the mark, if i may say so.

But I'm going to accept
"her juliet"
thats nice! :D

one more to go!

~I want more~
By Melissa

The air smells of sandalwood
and fills my nose
with bouquets upon bouquets
of an old burning desire
littering the scenery
of my blurring heart
and I cannot help but force
these lonely fingers
into speaking for a tongue
no longer dedicating itself
to kissing a man
who cannot (will not)
love

I am hungry for more
than just food,
my mouth craves sweetness
a certain kind of ridiculous fruit
to feed these cherry lips
that taste nothing like seeds,
but grows into something
more substantial
than any producing tree

I want to exist as myself
in the exploration
of my newly found entity
while attracting men
who bear their souls
like a woman bears child
blissfully, revealing,
and open for conversation
about honesty and virtue
with a bluntness
that scrapes substance from skin
and filters sin from dirty rivers
without any clocks chiming
at the perfect moment of ruin

how is so pathetic not upto the mark?? it's good!

I know it's a long shot, but if the rest of the peoms do not meet your standards, I wanted to try:
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Change Can Hurt

Wipe away the golden, crystal ashes,
Hide behind gaping, scarring gashes,
Pick up yourself from many lies,
Press your hands deep within your eyes.
Cry out in help to the nightingale,
Fall onto the bed with your body so fraile;
Fall to your knees by a bed and pray,
Chose your words carefully for the day.

Grasping on to what is no longer there,
These threats these lies, you cannot compare,
A timeless hate with a thoughtless lie,
Change can hurt but love can defy.
Check your wrist for the daily words;
Of what they say we have not heard,
Let your heart sing out full with ambition,
Realizing this new sign of utter hate addition.

Look at me; smile with your brand new deceits,
Defy all those around you who happiness greets;
A lawful trust is by long now broken as it lays,
Amoungst the dirty figures of many broken frays.
Peaceful twists of your last words you speak;
Fall to your knees and admit you are weak;
A play on words is what you do portray,
Yet now in front of God, on your knees, you lay.

Now wipe away golden, crystal ashes,
Tell me of your hidden plastic gashes.
I say, I will not lie, I will not cheat,
To this you know you won't be beat.
Change can hurt, but much more stays,
Underneath the heart the truth may lay;
Listen closely as you now hear;
Change can hurt to what we hold dear.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

starsnsmiles, that was just my opinion. It might be a great poem, but it wasn'r what I had in mind. I had in mind something a little different...never mind.

Britt, thats one nice little work out there :)

Winners will be declared shortly....

(how I wish I'd made this contest more than two people, this really is a stupid contest...the last of its kind...because theres so much good poetry its hard to choose...sorry Melissa and Ecstacy!!)

Aww how could i have missed this???? I am interested in this kind of contest, so if you have another one i am reserving lmao. But jist in case (since you are still deciding as it looks, what do ya think of this???

She cries
lies in bed
she wonders why
when her life is torn in two
There isn't much she can do
when all she does is think of you

Life goes on
and time grows near
her whole world
is made of fear
she waits for the day
when she is let out of here

Love is dear to her existence
keeps her alive
every day she strives to survive
She can't decide if she has lost hope
or just lost her mind
She's still got the only thing thats true

so caught up, she has lost track of time
Now she watches it pass her by
memories catch up
They will never fade
she runs passed the water and catches
her own gaze wanting your glare

All she needs now is for you to be there
she seeks the one who has always cared
The one who understands her pain
and has nothing to gain accept her love
The best are always the first to get sent above
All she ever wanted was to be loved

Her life seems unreal it doesn't last
is there a way for her to get past this?
She dreams of those midnight walks
those long talks
holding her in the rain
and it too will remain in her heart

Longing to hear your voice
she sobs in the memory
hands connected where they are strong
No longer standing she is now on the ground
not a sound as a rose petal hits the water
you once said it, to wither is not the way

My thoughts have changed but not of you
many times have gone
and you are where you belong
My body will break, and life will shatter
there is aching in my heart
but that doesn't matter

When all beauty is revealed
it doesn't change the healing of your heart
the flower will always die
and the petal will always wilt
but the Thorn will never fade
One thing she will not forget for all of her days

or this one.....

Can you hear it?
Can you hear my heart beat?
Every step I take,
Every move I make
only a shorter amount of time
before you let me down.
You want to be there
And yet you tell me you are somewhere else
lost inside,
stop denying,
I know the truth.
I can see it too.
I know where you sleep at night,
not a bed you could call your own.
You tell me you love me,
and you tell me you care,
It would mean something
if only you were there.
sure,
your busy.
But not with what you say you are.
hiding it away,
I know that she's there,
don't lie.
I can feel it passing by.
just spare me.
I'm sick of your face,
sick of your laugh,
sick of your smile,
sick of your lies.
Next time you kiss her just think of me and what you have put me through.
Can you hear it?
Can you hear my heart beat through their lust.

(you know its not to late to say there can be more contestants!! lol)

last one I will post

A sound so dear
your words now don't seem so near
almost like an echo
they fade as I hear the start of something new

So how are you?
Things aren't the same
times have changed
if only they were like yesterday

I see you pass by
from a distance I can hear your sorry sigh
The wind blows hair in your face
You think that I don't care
If only you could see me cry

As I lie in bed awake
I take a breath and think
what could I do
to change your mind
if only you weren't so blind

why does life take time?
if I looked inside of your heart
would I find mine?

Such patience I don't have
I use what I am given
and that seems not to be enough
by your standards I am nothing
just a puddle in your way

Is that something I can change?
Or am I just a mistake
Putting up with me is tough
but don't take what you can't give
sorry that my heart wasn't enough

and the winner is.......................

!Britt!

Congrats deary... :) It was a lovely write...the other one too...but there has to be a winner right.

(PS. You're on my Favorites already!)