HELP PLEASE IM STUCK

Hey what do ya'll think of this poem. im not sure, and i dont know how to end it yet.

Where do you go
When no one is there
When everyone's gone
And it seems like they dont care

Where do you go
When you're by yourself
Who do you turn to
When everyone thinks about themselves

Where do you go
When you cant go home
No one understands
They dont see you're alone

Where do you go
When your friends dont have time
They are to busy to help you
Even though you are in a bind

Where do you go
When you have no one in whom you confide
Left alonde with your feelings
Sometimes you think it'd be better if you died

Where do you go
To let it all out
Where do you go
To just scream and shout

Where do you go
To the one whom you can tell all
Who's there for you
And will hold you when you bawl

Where do you go
To you notebook and write it all down
Not letting people know how you feel
You put on a smile to hide the frown

I really like it! Great job! Very well written! Those are some really good questions i think every one has asked them selves. Great job! Definatly 5 stars!

Thank you. but it doesnt seem like it is done, i feel like it needs sum thing but i dont know what or how to write it

I have to say, I'm not that impressed. I don't like the irregularity of your verses and the length of some of your sentences. Sorry if this offends you, but I think before you work on finishing, you'd be better off just shortnening some of your lines.

it doent not offend me, i know that is a problem that i have, i dont have consisty on the lenght of my lines. thanks.

I think it was great and I think you could stop now if you wanted. I don't think that people should ever tell you they are not impressed with your work. Who cares if you are impressed? It came from her heart and I think it's awesome. You have a few lines that are longer than the rest, big frigin deal! Your poem is great.

haha thanks but i do want peoples honest opinoins about my poems, if there is sum thing wrong i want them to tell me. thanks thought, its jus it doesnt seem like its done that's all. but i dont know how to end it.

i really do want ppls honest opinions

does ne one else have a comment on the poem i really dont know how to finish it, im stuck

thats a dumb question...let me ask you a ?, do you write withy our head, or your heart, your soul...your insides, let them pour out intensly and in great mass'...dont be afraid of ridicule, end it how it is in your head...let it be alive, it rhymes well, great questions, your poem feels dead, make it come to life...it can be great...
Lee nicole

good point, i jus dont know how to end it, im stuck, i write with all of the above. thanks

Huh i really like that idea, im not sure how it would work in this case i will work at it and see, good idea though, i really like it.

I think i got it but im not sure, i worked on it last night,

Where do you go
When no one is there
When everyone's gone
And it seems like they dont care

Where do you go
When you're by yourself
Who do you turn to
When everyone thinks about themselves

Where do you go
When you cant go home
No one understands
They dont see you're alone

Where do you go
When your friends dont have time
They are to busy to help you
Even though you are in a bind

Where do you go
When you have no one in whom you confide
Left alonde with your feelings
Sometimes you think it'd be better if you died

Where do you go
To the one whom you can tell all
Who's there for you
And will hold you when you bawl

Where do you go
To you notebook and write it all down
Not letting people know how you feel
You put on a smile to hide the frown

Where do you go
To let it all out
Where do you go
To just scream and shout

Where do you go
When no one is there
When everyone's gone
Leaving you with this load to bear.

How does that sound.