Nickelback Contest!

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For those of you that have done my contests before, you know how I like to judge but for those of you that are new to it....what I like to do is copy and paste the poems into a word document with no names so that it is not a biased competition, I will bold the ones I really like, Italic the ones I sort of like and leave plain the ones that just didn't hit it with me. Next, I make a marking guide with spelling, grammar, content and flow. For each mistake I catch, I deduct .5 from whichever category the mistake belongs to and total it up. I hope you don't take offence to your mark or what I write afterwards, I try to give advice hoping to maybe help some of you...and I also try to make an equilibrium of nice and harsh criticism. ^_^ But anyways, enough of my blabbing, lets get to the results shall we?

Savin' Me; By: TheWorldFell&UWerentThere - The beginning line was amazing, as soon as I read that I actually sat up and focused more because it pulled me in. But than the poem wasn't what I had expected, I didn't expect it to be a love poem, but it was a wonderful love poem, it was different and love poems are usually pretty much all the same. But there was something about this one that I really liked, I don't know what it was but something inside of me screamed 'I love it!' haha. Keep up the great work Hun.
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 5/5
CONTENT - 5/5
FLOW - 3.5/5
TOTAL - 16.5

Follow You Home; By: Lucy - Yours was the opposite of the world fell's poem, the beginning didn't quite pull me in but the ending really did. It was kind of cliched in a love poem sense, not so much the wording you used, that was in its own way unique; but moreover it was the whole ideas that you used in your poem. Nonetheless, it was still a great poem.
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4/5
CONTENT - 3.5/5
FLOW - 4/5
TOTAL - 14.5

Photograph; By: Jean - Well once again your work has amazed me, you are one of my writing idols...I have always looked up to your writing Doll and I am always amazed with each piece I read, especially this one. You stayed on topic and you got the ideas through while keeping them tied together and not bringing in metaphors to overload it with imagery. I loved this to death lol, I don't think any words or explanation I put here can really sum up the quality of this poem, or your talent in itself. Heartchuu.
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4.5/5
CONTENT - 5/5
FLOW - 4.5/5
TOTAL - 17

Rockstar; By: Gem - Once again, I love your work. I have never read any of your poems until you started entering my contests, but I am glad that you did. This poem was, wow...the imagery, I felt like I was there, I was one of her friends there drinking and dancing with her. And than the all over message you tied in with it at the end, I freaking adored this poem! Keep it up. ^_^
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4.5/5
CONTENT - 5/5
FLOW - 4.5/5
TOTAL - 17

If Everyone Cared; By: Ciao - Oh Dearest Ciao, how do you continue to amaze me so? Hahaha. Once again Darling, I loved your work. It was political, and sad at the same time with a little zest of inspiration lol, I truly did admire this piece and your talent continued to blossom with this one, great work. Heartchuu.
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4.5/5
CONTENT - 5/5
FLOW - 4/5
TOTAL - 16.5

Side Of A Bullet; By: Charisma - The first stanza was wow, and then the others just kept me interested. When I read and judge contests I completely clear my mind, I sit in silence with one leg crossed over the other and I read and concentrate but for yours, all I could concentrate on was the quality of your words. For some reason, though I felt they were cliched love lines...they were beautiful in the sense that I felt they were true poetry, I don't know, maybe I'm not even making sense right now haha, but I really did love this poem. =)
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4.5/5
CONTENT - 4.5/5
FLOW - 5/5
TOTAL - 17

Animals; By: Sarah Elliot - It was interesting, it was short so you weren't able to say much, I understand that and with such a vague title it would be hard to write a longer poem on this; understandable. However, this one did confuse me a bit, maybe it was the length but to me it felt like you skipped ideas a tad. The first two lines tied together neatly and stayed on track but than at the third line, you started talking about the leaves falling which had nothing really to do with the topic and than I got to the next line with animals fighting over the food - back on topic - and the last line was back to nature again..I thought it would make a little more sense if you used a period to end the different statement, or sentence breaks. But, I did like it after I read it a few more times and got the picture in my head and really started imagining your words. ^_^
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4/5
CONTENT - 4/5
FLOW - 5/5
TOTAL - 16

Next Contestant; By: Charisma - I liked the uniqueness of this piece, how the first two lines were like almost like oxymoron's and than the last line in each tercet pulled them together. There were a few parts where the flow got a little choppy but nothing too bad. Keep it up.
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4/5
CONTENT - 5/5
FLOW - 4/5
TOTAL - 16

Fight For All The Wrong Reasons; By: HiddenxSoul - I really adored the first quatrain I read it over and over again and each time I read it, the more it got to me, and the following stanzas really captured my heart as well haha, especially the line, 'It's true when they say that love is blind..' Because there is so much truth in that line, I love it! Anyways, all in all this was a really good poem, I loved it and thanks for letting me read it =)
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4/5
CONTENT - 4.5/5
FLOW - 4.5/5
TOTAL - 16

Okay, now the marks aren't the placings for me, they're just a guide to hopefully help you. But, this was an extremely hard contest to judge because there were so many great poems and so many talented writers...but here are the results...

FIRST(spot on favorites [if not already there] & 10 r/r/c) - Photograph by Jean.
SECOND(5 r/r/c) - Fight For All The Wrong Reasons by HiddenxSoul
THIRD(3 r/r/c) - If Everyone Cared by Ciao
HONORABLE MENTION(2 r/r/c) - Rockstar by Gem

Everyone who entered, great job, you made it worth my time haha, and you will all get one r/r/c each as well, just LEAVE THE TITLES everyone. ^_^

I LOVE NICKELBACK!!! yay first pick!

Damn!
I love the CD I have it.

If Everyone Cared
please!!

Ciao

Actually someone has done something similar, but oh well. I'll give this one a try. I'll have to get back to you on which one I really want. What I'm thinking of right now is Next Contestant or Far Away.

Thnks.

I reall want far away but if i cant get it, i'll do saving me

Are we allowed to do parodies?

Rockstar please x

savin me plz XD YAY NICKLEBACK

Synh, take far away.

ill do next contestant i suppose, since lucy wants saving me.

bleh. i dont know which one i really want. i just love nickelback too much.

maybe photograph unless someone wants that too. >

haha kitty you have to shoose quick or else you will be left with your least favourite, i was thinking about photograph, you should do it coz i think that one can be real good!!! it has potential lol

side of a bullet plz...
Charisma*

*bangs head* i really dont know. i dont want to mess up such a good song. killing my favorite bands masterpiece would be horrible! ill get it at some point. once some one requests next contestant or photograph, ill just go with the other...unless i miracuosly figure out which i want!

i'd like to try 'someone that you're with'

thanx!

I want Savin` Me.

Thanks xx

Savin` Me

I'll forever be the eyes of an untold story,
The one that never could say the words to her lover,
Just for that one chance that he'll leave,
Would break my heart in a million pieces.

The heartaches,
And the lies that follow,
I just want once chance to make him stay,
One chance to say, " I love you."

I can cry and cry,
But I know it won't get him back,
I can tell myself the lies,
But deep inside I know he's not walking back in again.

I can keep turning my head back,
To maybe see just one glimpse of him,
But he's so far away,
So far down the road.

He was the only one,
Savin` Me,
He was the only one,
I truly loved.

sorry but that has been reserved before you.

no its ok, she can have it, now that its been written i will try to compete and mess it up more, and because its already up there i will lose what i had by thinking about whats already been put... hmmm *sigh* i shall try to pick again

Well I'm sorry but it does get confusing when you dont say which one is reserved or not.

I'm sorry I even entered jeesh.

ok TAKE TWO lol this time i shall reserve follow you home...

lol.

Lucy you can have Savin` Me.

I was bored anyways. As a blonde is I dn't tend to read very far til I get bored lol. So sorry.. You can take it.

no no your right to take it, you might as well, its up there now and i havent even started writing it yet, follow you home is as good as any other for me so no worries.

Oh. I'm sorry if it sounded like I was biting your head off. I should find a more "friendly" approach next time.

I think the one who made this thread should come back and update the list. It would be vert beneficial to those just reading this thread. O well.

Now, if only I had time to figure out what to write. hah.

Uh yeah sorry that I don't live at my computer and my friend needed me before she killed herself...but you're right, yeah I should be here checking in every two seconds.

It's updated..

ok ok no need to get so nasty Lush Fcuk, Kitty was saying that because of the mix up we had just before, she was suggesting and being open minded and saying what she feels, she wasn't telling you to update it or getting angry because you hadn't. you jumped to a conclusion and accusation, calm down before you reply next time and read over it again, maybe it won't sound so bad.

Follow You Home

Your my dream, my angel
A hope I won't let die
I'll do it all for you
You know I will always try

I can't let you walk out
Your love I shall redeem
No matter how, or what you do
I will always follow you home

Because your my everything and more
And you just won't free my head
I'm always doing something crazy
Because I think of you and don't think at all

Each and every night
I will be at your door
I will follow you home
For a chance to gain what I lost

Lucy

Would like to reserve 'Photograph' please. The poem is forthcoming.

Thanks.

Photograph
By: Twisted Heart

Although the pictures faded
and the black has turned to gray
The white is kind of yellowed
you can hardly see the face
I remember when it was taken
the love we felt back then
It was the love of innocents
that captured us, my friend.

We lived so carelessly inside,
not wounded hearts to mend
Among the wishes of the young
and dreams that soared within
Even though our younger days
were filled with love anew
We never thought that broken hearts
would tear us both in two.

A night that filled our souls with love,
and passion was released
Nine months of worry then tiny sounds
of baby breaths and grief
We were too young to make a home
for what our passion brought
In this tiny little photograph,
lay the evidence of loss.

Now years have come and gone for us,
we went our separate ways
And distant is the love we knew,
that left us there that day
And though I think of me and you
and dream from time to time
There is no chance of turning back,
reliving every line.

A soul was lost to us that day,
so many years ago.
The little girl that we created,
must now be fully grown.
I hope she comes and finds me,
or they tell her where I'm at
Until I see her face to face,
I'll love this photograph.

Xx Rock Star xX

She was a rock star girl
Partying every night
The world was now her oyster
A flame waiting to ignite

Everyone was her friend
They all loved her attitude
She bought almost every round
They were full of gratitude

Someone offered her a drink
With an umbrella in the glass
She took it with a sparkling smile
It wouldn’t be her last

The life and soul of the party
As she danced to the bass line
She spun and swirled around the room
Her hair streaming out behind

But then her lights all faded
She tumbled gracefully to the floor
Pandemonium filled the room
It was time to meet the score

Our rock star girl was rushed away
The lights had turned to black
Someone previously spiked her drink
When she had turned her back

So let this be a lesson
To keep an eye on your drink
Don’t be like our rock star girl
Use your head and think!

*Gem*

Copyright©GemmaStott2007

Could I please reserve "Fight For All the Wrong Reasons"?

Lucy,

I'm sorry if it seemed that I was being bitter up there, I wasn't. I was upset about a few things last night so maybe my typing came off like that, but I really didn't mean to seem like I was snapping at everyone.

Ah. I think you were talking to me. The whole updating thing...

It's okay. Everyone is entitled to frustration.

haha no worries lush fcuk, i was just settling it down hehe sry your night didn't go so good :(

Ah. I see how you could find that as something mean. I'm sorry. I didn't mean it like that. ><

These are really good poems so far. I really don't know what should I write in mine.

If Everyone Cared
By: Ciao

Dear Mister President, I have some words to say.
Will you listen to me or turn your head away?
I'm nothing special, but I speak my mind.
And this is something that I have come to find.

If everyone cared, then no one would die.
Did you ever stop and think about why?
People are killing and people are crying;
All because some people are lying.

If everyone cared, would we still be fighting?
If we cared, then I wouldn't be writing.
Stop the war; get our forces home.
We can't deal with being alone.

Men torn from families; women left alone.
They're being hardened by each bomb thrown.
Help our families, please bring them back.
Stop the fighting and the attacks.

Don't you see that if everyone cared,
No one would lie; no one would dare.
Hurtful words would never be spoken;
Leaving people with hearts, broken.

If everyone cared, no one would be dead.
We wouldn't have to worry; we wouldn't have to dread.
All the stories on the news, filled with scary sorrows.
All the women and the men, scared about tomorrow.

Dear Mister President, Please lend me a moment or two.
I know that you have the time to stop what we go through.
Look at our lives; we are all living scared.
It would be different, If Everyone Cared.

I think mine went passed the maximum line limit...=[

Ciao

Lol only by 12 :P . I'll let it pass though.

I wouldn't know if they'er good yet, I don't read them until I copy and paste them into a wordpad but I'm looking forward to it!

And it's fine Lucy, bad days are inevitable.

THANK YOU! lol =]

Ciao

Pee.Ess. I noticed that others are over as well...=\

Hey. I'm dropping out.

Sorry.

Side of a Bullet

I nearly fell in head over heels,
Though I've never been that type.
Something in my life was missing
And at the time you felt so right.

You seemed to be the pieces
That left my puzzle still undone.
It's no wonder I couldn't resist.
I believed you were the one.

Yet, a part of me kept thinking
Maybe there was more to you.
My mind wouldn't let go of thoughts
That all you said wasn't true.

And because I kept myself from
Falling completely over and above
I was only hit by the side of a bullet
Laced with the pangs of love.

By: Charisma*

I'll reserve Animals, thanks.

Kitty - dont pull out, there is still next contestant left, you should do it, come on, nickleback!!! do it for me, u have been involved in this thread... now you should at least try and score some comments out of it lol