Ciao's Contest ((Relient K))

Alright everyone, thanks for the submissions! keep them coming!
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I'll try When I go down.

When I go down [Acrostic]
By Sarah Elliott

When I go down
He will be there
Everytime, to pick me up
Nice and easily

I know he'll always be there

Guiding me through
One step at a time

Doing everything he can
One problem after the other
Wiping away my tears
Never letting go

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Acrostic Poetry is where the first letter of each line spells a word, usually using the same
words as in the title.

Alright guys, everything is updated! =] Can't wait to judge them! :] Deadline is still May 2, next Wednesday.

xxCiaoxx

Deadline is tomorrow everyone, please post away! =] Can't wait to read them all!

xxCiaoxx

I'm going to try to write "The Only Thing Worse Than Beating A Dead Horse Is Betting On One," but since the deadline is tomorrow, I'm far from promising anything...But, yeah. Maybe. =]

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

I'll extend it with no problem... If more people decide to participate... new deadline: Sunday May 6... =]

xxCiaoxx

Awesome! I'll be sure to do it now, just because you extended it...no matter how bad it turns out! =]]] Thanks!

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

Ok, Sorry about that. Ha. =./
Anyways, the reason it isn't about a horse [lmao] is because I wanted to describe something that was hard, LIKE betting on a horse that was dead. I hope that works? =/ If not, I'll go again! I loved how this turned out either way.
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The Only Thing Better Than Beating A Dead Horse Is Betting On One {Kryielle Sonnet}

Take a sip from this disease,
Any glass you may eat,
Gargle as loud as you please;
Epidemic on the street.

Clothe yourself with the plague,
Muscle your way through the fleet,
To the pavement you will beg;
Epidemic on the street.

Bet on this and you're sure to lose,
For the worms you will soon greet,
Smile great; a happy bruise,
Epidemic on the street.

Take a sip from this disease,
Epidemic on the street.

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Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet consists of only eight syllables.

Rhyme Pattern:
AabB, ccbB, ddbB, AB -or- AbaB, cbcB, dbdB, AB.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

Sheena dear... correct me if I am wrong, but you entered a poem that is not titled nor has anything to do ((I have not read it; part of my judging process)) with the titles... Can you fix it please... I was excited for you! =]

I'd also like to resserve
Be My Escape :]

Be My Escape

Sadness and depression
How cliched can you be?
Yet we feel these emotions
From a triggered memory

Maybe it is something happening
Right now, at this very moment
Mind feels tired, body feels abused
We use this emotion for torment

Yet we always look for a stranger
To be our knight and shining armor
Of course we have standards for them
Good looking, humorous, a charmer

Although we will push them away
And blame them for causing us pain
Depression we will feel once again
Out comes the body's glorious rain

Not again, end this thinking now
Stop seeing the bad in everyone
End the thoughts of pessimism
Yet these thoughts have just begun

Will someone be able to change
These emotions, feelings I feel?
It hurts my heart, hurts my soul
This is a call for help, an appeal

Searching for a knight in armor
It doesn't matter the size, shape
Save me from thoughts, pessimism
Say nothing at all, just be my escape

Marked down! Anyone else? :] I'm open until tomorrow sometime.. Unless I get a flood of people, I will then extend it. :]

Plz reserve me, "Who I Am Hates Who I've Been". Thnx!

Can i have be my escape please,
i'll write it quickly now!!!!

Be my escape

The route I chose
Got blocked,
And I suppose,
You're shocked
That after so long,
I call you,
But people can be wrong.

And after all I'm human too.

Be my escape,
You're my scapegoat.
Be my escape.

I'm still in good shape,
But you prefer personality,
Oh please, delve into reality.
See that no longer exists,
And you're only my safe exit.

I fall on you
Maybe you're dreaming,
I don't care what I do,
I'm devoid of feeling.

The streets are scattered,
I'm cold and numb,
Your heart got battered
for my fun.

But you're my escape,
You'll always be my escape,
I'm your biggest mistake,
But you're only my escape.

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something seems wrong in this poem, but i tried to write it quickly sorry!!

Thanks guys... alright, I'll extend it once more... Monday the 14 :] Thanks for the support and Espoir*failed, I don't read them until I judge, and if you would like to change it, feel free!

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I'll take "Mmhmm." And the other problem is explained on top of the poem. Hope it's ok.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

That's perfect then! I didn't read it, I won't until I judge, but thanks for explaining it.

Reserved! :]

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This is rather weird, but I enjoyed it. So, enjoy yourself!
And, I may rewrite this, if I have the time. =]
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Mmhmm {Terzanelle}

In the middle of a fight,
You see a beautiful girl,
In the middle of a fight.

She'll send you in a whirl;
"Mmhmm," she will make you say;
You see a beautiful girl.

Smile goofy; you will stray,
With a stupid look and lust
"Mmhmm," she will make you say.

A little bump is a must;
You don't want to let her go,
With a stupid look and lust.

Travel your eyes; study low,
That drooling mouth; steady,
You don't want to let her go.

Fascination; be ready,
In the middle of a fight,
That drooling mouth; steady,
In the middle of a fight.
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1. A
2. B
3. A

4. b
5. C
6. B

7. c
8. D
9. C

10. d
11. E
12. D

13. e
14. F
15. E

16. f
17. A
18. F
19. A

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

I should have written sooner ciao... i can't write in this contest... im sorry i am going to have to unreserve :( ilu still tho .

Thank you Sheena.
Terra dear it's okay! I'm swamped with poetry, so I'm finding it hard to write as well!
ilu2!

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Contest Now Closed! I have PM'ed the remaining two reserves and they have a few days to get their poems in. I will judge this as soon as I have a few moments to spare! Thank you all who participated and I know that this will be challenging to judge... Prizes will be announced when winners are!

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Hello All. I will be judging this Friday night/ Saturday morning when I get the time... Been super busy. Winners will be announced as with the prizes. Thank you all who participated!

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Ciao

Titles:

`Carrie
o1.
o2.

`Espoir*failed
o1.The funeral of hearts [[Done]]
o2.Sad songs for dirty lovers [[Done]]

`Britt
o1. She Knows What To Do With A Saturday Night
o2. ?

`Sarah
o1.Pot of gold
o2.The last jump

`Jenni
o1.True love is whispered heart to heart (Acrostic)
o2. ?
o3. ?

`Gem
o1.
o2.
o3.

`Racheal
o1.Last words
o2.The Feel of war
o3.My Bravory in Teddy
o4.A Man so Different
o5.The Autopsy [[Done]]

`Sheena
o1.My Give A Damn Is Busted [[Done]]
o2.We're All Just A Little Bit Lonely [[Done]]
o3.The Game That Played Us [[Done]]
o4.A Schizophrenic Can Fall Too [[Done]]
o5.You Might Be Able To Stay [[Done]]
o6.Locked Hearts and Hand Grenades {Monorhyme Rondel} [[Done]]

`Startle Me
o1.Lust.
o2.Fantasy.
o3.Hello, Little Girl
o4.Carry That Weight
o5.Her Majesty
o6.Echoes [[Done]]

`Jenna
o1.
o2.
o3.
o4.
o5.
o6.
o7.

Winners and Prizes! Congrats winners!! :]

`*When I Go Down by Carrie: I enjoyed this piece. I was expecting a differnt topic and it was a pleasant suprise when I read this. The rhyme scheme was different, but it made the poem flow well. The second to last stanza held the most imagery for me. It was a well written poem.

`*Let It All Out by Jennie: Very well written poem my dear. I enjoyed the repetition of 'Let it all out' It brought the poem closer together. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. The flow was okay and the rhyme scheme was pretty good as well.

`*Maintain Consciousness by Britt: This was a very interesting poem hun. I wasn't expecting it. but I was shocked with images that my mind conjured up. It was well written. Even though there was no rhyme scheme, it didn't need on to convey the thoughts you were putting out. I also liked the word 'Resuscitate'. I've never seen it and I learned something new.

`*Be My Escape by Racheal: Now, this one blew me away! I love war poems and this one was fantastically written. I liked the different perspective that you wrote it in. 'While our bodies hit the floor' - what a powerful statement! It was a very well done poem.

`*The One I'm Waiting For by Sarah: This is a new style for me to read. I always love new styles. It was a well written poem, but your syllable count is off in a few of the lines. Still, a good idea and good use of words.

`*This Week The Trend by Jenna: Deary I have been waiting AGES to read this one... I can say that I was not dissappointed at all. It brought tears to my eyes and my mouth is still open. I had images of every person in there; the cheerleader, the football captain. It was amazing and the ending stanza really really sumed it up perfectly. Flow was near perfect as with the rhyme scheme.

`*More Than Useless by Startle Me: It wasn't until I hit the third stanza that I realized: this is about same sex appeal. I applaud you for writing about a difficult topic. Many people don't understand this way of life. I, for one, feel that they should be allowed to do whatever they want. This was a great choice and the flow was perfect. The rhyme scheme was great and the whole topic was amazing!

`*When I Go Down by Jenna: Whoa. Lmao. This was another fantastic one darling. With each poem I have read of yours, your work keeps getting better and better. This one was so perfect without a rhyme to it; it made it 100x more believable. The last two lines really brought the whole thing to a close. You have yet to dissappoint me dear!

`*Who I Am Hates Who I've Been by Gem: This was a poem that I thourghly ((I know I didn't spell that right)) enjoyed. The way you wrote this reminded me of looking at an album of pictures and comparing then to now. The last two lines are my absolute favorite! You are a great writer!

`*When I Go Down by Sarah: I like that you used different styles in here instead of the same abcb or aabb style that most everyone ((I included)) use. The acrostic didn't seem forced at all and it flowed quite nicely.

`*The Only Thing Better Than Beating A Dead Horse Is Betting On One by Sheena: First, I would like to congragulate you on taking, I think, the hardest title on here. You stepped up to the challenge. It was a very well written poem. I enjoy this style and you did it flawlessly. I got images from this one. Flow was great as well.

`*Be My Escape by Startle Me: You write very well and this is no exception. There's something to this poem that I really like. The ideas in this are really great. It was just an all-around great poem.

`*Be My Escape by Espoir*failed: You could turn this into a great song! It was written quite nicely and I enjoyed the rhyme scheme. The topic was pretty cool and the flow was great.

`*Mmhmm by Sheena: Another style that I have never read nor done. The topic was pretty cool and it was perfect in this style. You have chosen the two hardest titles and written them beautifuly. You should be proud! :]

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This was an extrmemly hard contest to judge. Everyone wrote amazing pieces and I enjoyed reading them.

Prizes:
Everyone who entered and didn't win: 2 r/r/c
H/M: 3 r/r/c
3rd: 5 r/r/c
2nd: 6 r/r/c
1st: 7 r/r/c

Winners:

H/M: Let It All Out ~ Jenni and Who I Am... ~ Gem
3rd: Be My Escape ~ Racheal
2nd: The Only Thing Better ... ~ Sheena && More Than Useless ~ Startle Me
1st: This Week The Trend~Jenna Dear!

please leave me your titles otherwise I WILL NOT COMMENT!! I need titles please!! :]

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YAY!
I finally won a contest
Lol.
Will you do
Lust.
Fantasy.
Hello, Little Girl
Carry That Weight
Her Majesty
And
Echoes :]
Please and thank you.

Awesome! Thank you for the second place! I really appreciate it. I'm glad you liked it so much.

You can pick any titles you want. =]]

xTheEcsatsyofSuicidex

Thanks for giving everyone comments :D i don't mind which you do, choose titles which appeal to you!!!
thanks xxx

Sheena && Espi yours are done, Racheal, I've been trying to finish yours amd I need titles please from everyone else... Britt, Gem, Sarah, Carrrie, Jenna, please guys!!!!! :]

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So I get two comments?

Can you please do:
Pot of gold
The last jump
Thank you.

Ok sorry to tell you guys that Ciao still owes comments to that she is grounded until school gets out and won't be able to get to them until then. Sorry!!

.:Danielle:.

Wooot, thanking you!

When you get back could you do
True love is whispered heart to heart (Acrostic)
and any other two of my latest.

Sorry guys... I just got back... give me a little time and then I will comment. I was grounded... so sorry!!!!

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Ciao