New Contest. [SecludedSerendipity]

CLOSED. RESULTS POSTED AT THE BOTTOM.

I've chosen the titles for this contest from episodes of my favourite TV show. [If you can guess the show, I'll give you an extra comment on one of your poems, once the contest is over.]

[Titles]

`The Places You Have Come to Fear the Most - [Endlessly in the Dark] -- DONE.
`You Gotta Go There to Come Back - [Kyles Woman] -- DONE.
`Crash Course in Polite Conversation - [Lush.Fcuk-*] -- DONE.
`What Is and What Should Never Be - [Bryan] -- DONE.
`The Games That Play Us - [xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex] -- DONE.
`First Day on a Brand New Planet - [Chelsey] -- DONE.
`Locked Hearts and Hand Grenades - [xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex] -- DONE.
`How a Resurrection Really Feels - [xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex] -- DONE.
`Just Watch the Fireworks - [Heavy Hearts Bleed] -- DONE.
`I Love You But I've Chosen Darkness
`Songs to Love and Die By - [x Hell0 Beautiful x] -- DONE.
`Sad Songs for Dirty Lovers - [Espoir*failed] -- DONE.
`The Truth Doesn't Make a Noise - [Adam] -- DONE.
`The Trick is to Keep Breathing - [Espoir*failed] -- DONE.
`Somewhere a Clock is Ticking - [Wings of Flames] -- DONE.

[Rules]

`One person per title.
`Can be as long or as short as you wish.
`It doesn't have to rhyme, but I am a big fan of rhyming poems.
`Deadline is 31 May. Make sure your poems are in on time.
`Must be new.
`Have fun, of course.

[Awards]

`First - 8 r/r/c's, added to favourites.
`Second - 6 r/r/c's, added to favourites.
`Third - 4 r/r/c's.
`Two Honourable Mentions - 2 r/r/c's.
`Anyone who manages to guess the show - 1 r/r/c. [Lush.Fcuk-* got it. ;)]

Oooh! Love this show,

One Tree Hill
=]

And I love all these titles, gahh.

I THINK I want to go with, "Crash Course In Polite Conversation" I may change it to "Sad Songs For Dirty Lovers" though. I will write both and see which I like better if no one reserves the other one, but for now, "Crash Course In Polite Conversation"

=]

The trick is to keep breathing please, this looks a good contest,
one tree hill rocks my little socks off
and i love the titles you have chosen.

Just watch the fireworks please

What Is and What Should Never Be please

I'll take First day on a brand new planet

I'll take only the best title here: "Locked Hearts and Hand Grenades."

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

I KNEW YOU WERE GONNA TAKE THAT SHEENA... it seemed like your kinda title... I was gonna take one but I can't write on anything...

<3

Somewhere a Clock is Ticking

The Places You Have Come to Fear the Most please...

Josie

You Gotta Go There To Come Back please!

You Gotta Go There to Come Back

Dude, it's OVER
Don't make me spell it out
I don't want to tell you again
And I don't want to scream and shout

You keep saying
I'll do better next time
Let me come back
Like an annoying little chime

You can't come back
If you were never there
Never in my heart
Never in my heart's care

You gotta go there to come back
Sorry, but I don't let people re-enter
Who have never been inside
And have never felt the center

You don't know what I am like
Because you were too busy with that other girl
Trying to enter into her space
And make her big head swirl

You can't come back
If you were never there
Never in my heart
Never in my heart's care

Songs To Live And Die by plz

The Places You Have Come To Fear The Most

There are places in your mind
Where you once felt protected
Where, when you were thinking
You felt connected

But as the years passed
Your mind grew dark
Your thoughts were no longer as happy
As a walk in the park

These places in your mind
Have consumed you with fear
You try to scream
But there's no one to hear

Your mind, so scary,
Like an evil ghost
These are the places
You have come to fear the most

The darkness engulfed
Your once happy thoughts
It was as if
By the Devil it had been taught

Evil thoughts
Clogging your mind
Tearing at your hair
Is the only salvation you find

Overcome by fears
Of your sickening desires
Thinking too hard
Will be your demise

Josie

Copyright©JosieWentzel09May2007

The trick is to keep breathing

Consciousness knocked upon my door,
But my brother answered
Because I was flat out on the floor,
He thought it was another hazard,
And told him I didn't need it anymore.

Minutes drag by something awful,
And even the clock's got a murmur.
I've never been so resourceful,
But now my hand is routed firmer,
On the liquid to gain remorse from.

Competing for the glitter of an empty lover's face,
Having more luck playing with the traffic,
And I might as well not run this race,
I'm always going to be holographic,
You see through my bitter taste.

I never last longer than the minute I desire,
But when I crawled into your bed,
I knew we were flickers not a raging fire,
And I chose ignorance instead,
And to this emptiness I aspire.

And the trick is to keep breathing,
Through the months of heavy rain,
And the fluid is my protective sheathing.
So for now, I suffer to refrain...
And try to keep breathing all the same.

The deadline has now been put up.

What Is And What Never Should Be

What Is and What Never Should Be,
this is how my heart now feels,
this pain is just too much for me,
and with it my heart will never heal.

We laughed together, so much fun,
I thought you loved me, felt so true,
I wanted marriage, you were the one,
there has never been one like you.

Then it fell apart when I figured out,
what she was doing with that guy,
now her love I cant do without,
And I cant help but beggin to cry.

But im better than this, I will show,
I will get over it, she will soon see,
that I will move on, she will know,
Whay Is And What Never Should Be.

been awhile since ive done this scheme

Locked Hearts and Hand Grenades {Monorhyme Rondel}

Lock your hearts and man the hand grenades,
Forget love, put your heart to these raids.
We will burn down the town as the light fades,
Pressed to the ground where you are now laid.

Be skeptical now, or you will get aids,
So many he has in them he must wade.
Lock your hearts and man the hand grenades,
Forget love, put your heart to these raids.

Burn down his every dream where his head he laid,
It is not worth it with his nasty aids.
So let us burn down his new town with many raids
And forget any love when the night fades.
Lock you r hearts and man the hand grenades.
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A French form consisting of 13 lines: two quatrains and a quintet, rhyming as follows:
ABba abAB abbaA. The capital letters are the refrains, or repeats.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

Songs To Live And Die By

A deadly melody, played with a deadly tune -
You knew your time was coming, and soon.
But it dragged you in and wouldn't let go;
Taking you a place you didn't know.
The way was laden with cobwebs and dust,
But getting there to the end was a must.

A phantom appeared and said, "Don't be worried.
We have to leave. I don't mean to be hurried."
So you took his hand; it was cold as ice.
His smile enticed you; it was kinda nice.
His eyes, they flashed a fiery green;
Something like that, you have never seen.

The notes got louder as you went your way;
It was so deep you couldn't tell night from day.
"Only a little farther, my dear. I promise it's close."
For some reason, you believed your gut the most.
Ypu knew that this might not be so good;
As the stones began to be replaced with wood.

It reminds you of a story you once read -
Immediately, he recites the words in your head.
Startled, you pull away, ready to run;
But he anticipated this and laughed as if he won.
The music suddenly stopped and you begin to cry.
"These, my dear, are Songs To Live And Die By."

I've changed the rules now so it's only one person per title. Just to let everyone know. :]

I'd really like all the titles to be taken.

Anybody else? Please? XD

How a Resurrection Really Feels
And
The Game That Plays Us...

I could do those. But, that'd be three for me and you'd have to give me a little time; I have finals coming up. Would you like me to do them?

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

Can't do watch the fireworks, sorry

Sheena - That would be great. :] Thank you.

If no one else has taken it, i'd really like to do "sad song for dirty lovers" as well

just let me know xx

Ohh, yes please! That would be awesome. xD

Sad songs for dirty lovers

I'm familiar with the back seat,
And used to lying on my back.
But your grunts are getting boring
And the tape's stuck on that old track.

The car shakes to an offbeat rhythm,
The windows are getting steamy,
And there's no point denying what I am,
I never aspired to be seedy.

I'm fraudulent and cheap,
Maybe you could find a plastic bag for more.
A self fulfilling prophecy of a dirty little whore.

I'm not listening to the radio,
Because the stereo plays that sad song,
I think you might recognise me in it,
Yeah but I guess I thought wrong...

That would require you to know who I am.

Your hairs stand up on end,
I'm repulsed as they brush against mine,
I mutter romance is dead,
You reply we don't have much time.

But the clock is blinking eights,
And it's been 9:03 for hours now,
Your fingers exploit my skin
And I swear not to allow,
This to happen again.

But that sad song plays somewhere in the distance,
I admit the persona is quietly reminiscent,
Of some girl wasting her life in sleazy drinking bars,
But I'm just a dirty lover with sad songs in her car.

Somewhere a Clock Is Ticking

They slit our throats like flowers,
As we parade into this tomb,
A gentle pain of knowing,
That this birth will be our doom,

Our mouths stuck with glue,
Our heads filled with lies,
Our hearts tattered nothings,
As we watch society rise,

This God is our media,
Worshipped by all,
Seeking our attention,
And laughing as we fall,

The cracks in our hearts,
As we march into death,
Unwoken spirits lay,
In the shallows of our breath.

Deadline is a week today guys. Please everyone get your poems in on time.

The Game That Played Us

Love struck us like lighting bringing us down as if a broken kite,
We stood strong against the wind, but like a child we couldn't fight.
This game that played us is like children playing hide and seek,
The game that played us is called love, made us weak.

We'll fall to our knees, but still believe that love might save us,
Yet as we believe the game takes a twisting turn so we lose trust.
We're pushed to the ground by the game's crushing lies,
We're thrown around as the ground disappears and we forget how to cry.

This game that played us like children play hop-scotch,
It abused us and used us and then sat there and watched.
This game played us like children play hide and seek,
The game that played call love made us weak.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

How A Resurrection Really Feels

Burning a cross in the forgotten fields,
Feel the fire across your eyes.
Harsh heat scars into your skin,
Burning within every new lie.

Field set ablaze on a horrific night;
Twas so bright you couldn't see the moon.
This is Jesus's tomb where he was resurrected;
I wonder how it feel to be forgotten this soon.

Losing something so precious to you,
You're own place is gone and there's nothing you can do,
You may be God, but you can't interfere with life,
Until, that is, the end of the world comes on cue.

Maybe this is how it must feel,
With tears streaming down His face.
His children have betrayed him again,
And left the holy scene in haste.

Field set ablaze on a horrific night;
Twas so bright you couldn't see the moon.
This is Jesus's tomb where he was resurrected;
I wonder how it feel to be forgotten this soon.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

I've sent PMs out to those who have yet to submit their poem.

Crash Course In Polite Conversation

"You need to learn how to treat a girl properly,"
Is what his old mama had always told him,
"Just like your Pa, you need to learn to treat a lady,"
She said with her hands on his shoulders -

And as she looked deep into her little boys eyes,
She said: "You need to hold her close you your heart,
Kiss her cheek and hold her hand, but never deny -
The love she feels for you, what she tells you is true.

Tell her she is beautiful and kiss her each night,
Count out the stars while laying on your back with her,
And for all the strength in you, do not start a fight -
If you see another pretty girl, look toward the one you're with -

Because my boy, I can tell you right here and now,
The pretty little strangers that you meet along the way,
They may be the cause of the sweat along your brow,
But they will never love you as much as the one in your arms.

It's not about being a super hero in her loving eyes,
The little things often mean more than anything else,
And if you do something wrong, you must never lie,
Because girls talk and it will get back to her somehow.

But boy, if there's one thing you must never forget,
It would be to never spend your time with a girl,
Having her fall head over heels in love and than regret -
Ever falling in love with a lyin', cheatin' fool."

With tears in her blue eyes she looked to her son,
Giving him a crash course in polite conversation,
Sighing she said: "If you love her, you must never run!"
And with her hands over her heart, she cried -

"You need to learn how to treat a girl properly,"
Is what his old mama had stood and told him,
"Just like your Pa, you need to learn to treat a lady,"
She said with her hands on his shoulders.

-Jenna Elphick
May 28, 2007

This is Chelsey's poem. She couldn't find the thread so she PM'd it to me. :]

I'm ready to be committed to you
Become your sunshine, become your world
I'm ready to be the the constant thought on your mind
Your mate, your lover, known as your girl

We now take this journey as boyfriend and girlfriend
I don't want any drama to be thrown our way
I want it to feel like I'm on a brand new planet
Starting fresh on a brand new day

When I'm with you, no one else is around
I can't see them or hear them move
In our new world its just you and me
I feel no one else's presence and thats the truth

On our secret planet theres no restaurants or malls
No buildings to block the sun from shining down
There are no towers, no gas stations anywhere
No neighborhoods are to be found

Just a garden filled with different roses
All of which are for you and I
The weather is never snowy or cloudy
The suns rays are constantly hot in the sky

Its just us on a flower bed with no movement
All I can do is breathe nice and slow
Because if I blink or breathe too fast
I might miss a glance of your smile and not even know

The first day on a brand new planet
Is what it feels like whenever you're near
There are no frowns, no cries, or angry faces
Its just smiles and laughs in the atmosphere

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This contest is now CLOSED. I'll begin judging tonight, hopefully.

You Gotta Go There to Come Back - Kyles Woman

This was a sweet poem. Now and again the flow was a little bit off, and some of the rhyming seemed forced (e.g. let me come back, like an annoying little chime). I understand what you were trying to say, but I think a different phrase could maybe have been used. I also don't like how you started it off with "Dude, it's OVER" - it just doesn't seem very poetic. However, overall, it was a good read. You tried hard, so well done.

The Places You Have Come To Fear The Most - Endlessly in the Dark

I liked this a lot. It was so dark and gave off a somewhat "hopeless" feel, especially with the ending, as if there's no way to get out of the thoughts in your mind. I love how you got this idea from the title. The only thing that I think you could have improved on is that you could have maybe used more punctuation in this. Overall though - excellent. Job.

The Trick is to Keep Breathing - Espoir*failed

Wow, this was brilliant. I love the opening two lines, "Consciousness knocked upon my door, but my brother answered." - The second line was somewhat unexpected, and I liked that.
"Minutes drag by something awful,
And even the clock's got a murmur."
^ I love the imagery those lines created. I also absolutely adored the line, "I'm always going to be holographic." - Amazing.
Overall this was an amazing poem. Very well done.

What Is And What Never Should Be - Bryan

Awe, this was a sad poem. I liked how it flowed so well, the lines seemed to just float into one another. However, you had a few mistakes:
'Beggin' should be 'begin', 'im' should always be capitalised, with an apostrophe.
"now her love I cant do without" - 'cant' should have an apostrophe: "can't".
And you had a small typo in the last line, "Whay" should be "What".
Overall it was a good try. Well done.

Locked Hearts and Hand Grenades {Monorhyme Rondel} - xTheEcstasOfSuicidex

I really liked this. First of all, it's nice to read a poem with a form that I'm somewhat unfamiliar with. You also, in my opinion, had one of the toughest titles, but you produced an awesome poem from it. I like the repetition of different lines. Well done.

Songs To Live And Die By - x Hell0 Beautiful x

I love that you got an idea like this from the title. It's really quite creepy, especially as it nears the end of the poem. The flow and rhyming was spot on, too. Your poem had me intrigued from start to finish.
"Ypu knew that this might not be so good;" - I presume you meant 'Yup' at the beginning of this line?
Overall, excellent job.

Just Watch the Fireworks - Heavy Hearts Bleed

This was a very sweet poem, but the repetition kind of annoyed me. I usually like repetition, but in moderation, not directly after each line. The second stanza was my favourite; it had a lot of imagery. I wasn't sure if this was supposed to be a rhyming poem or not. It seems to rhyme at the beginning, but then it didn't at the end. I was confused. Overall, good try, well done.

Sad Songs for Dirty Lovers - Espoir*failed

Although the structure of this poem was quite, random? I loved it. Usually I prefer a strict structure, unless an actual poetry style is being used, but I think the random differences in the number of lines in each stanza worked well here. The ending was wonderful. Overall, an excellent poem.

Somewhere a Clock Is Ticking - Wins of Flames

This was interesting; very dark and morbid, which I like. I especially liked the last stanza, however, is 'unwoken' actually a word? Haha, I wasn't sure. Anyhow, very good poem. I liked it a lot - nice job.

The Game That Played Us - xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

I like the simile at the beginning of the poem, it helps to create imagery. I thought in some places the flow was a little bit off, but overall it was a good poem. The last stanza was my favourite, especially the first two lines, however isn't the last line supposed to be 'The game that played us [is] call[ed] love[,] made us weak.'?
Overall, good job, and well done.

How A Resurrection Really Feels - xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

I like the idea you have here.
"I wonder how it feel to be forgotten this soon." - Don't you mean 'felt' or 'feels', instead of 'feel'? I really like the third stanza. And overall I think this poem had really strong imagery.
Overall, as usual, I really enjoyed reading. It was very interesting.

Crash Course In Polite Conversation - Lush.Fcuk-*

This was interesting. I liked it. It kind of makes you wish that all guys would get this talk from their mum, haha. I also liked how the poem was pretty long, it sort of reflects the fact that it was a conversation, or more like a lecture, from a parent. Good job, and well done.

First Day on a Brand New Planet - Chelsey

Awww. Haha, this was generally very sweet and beautiful, I liked it.
You had a small typo in the first stanza - "I'm ready to be the [the] constant thought on your mind": two 'the's instead of one.
"I feel no one else's presence and thats the truth" - "thats" should be "that's".
On our secret planet theres no restaurants or malls - "theres" should be "there's".
Overall this was incredibly sweet and I liked it a lot. Good job.

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[WINNERS]

First - Sad Songs for Dirty Lovers - Espoir*failed
Second - Songs to Live and Die By - x Hell0 Beautiful x
Third - Locked Hearts and Hand Grenades {Monorhyme Rondel} - xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex
Honourable Mention (1) - Crash Course in Polite Conversation - Lush.Fcuk-*
Honourable Mention (2) - The Trick is to Keep Breathing - Espoir*failed
Guessed the show name correctly [One Tree Hill] - Lush.Fcuk-*

Please leave titles for me to do.

And there we go. =D Thank you everyone for taking part. Everybody submitted really great poems. :] Congrats to the winners.

Has anybody noticed that I've announced the winners? Lol...

Wow, thanks a billion, i never expected to win this one...

please could you do:
1. today i am tomorrow i won't
2. what goes on
3. spring time blues
4. we're young an beautiful
5. hidden depths
6. misery loves it company
7. cure for the itch
8. Vivid animation, a whirl of colour and a lost chance of hatred

9. cancer
10. Cheers, (i'm on my own, but Carol's here)

thanks so much again xxx

01. Being A Poet
02. A Schizophrenic Can Fall Too
03. How To Succeed In Business Without Really Trying
04. My Give A Damn Busted

I noticed this awhile ago, but my computer broke down. So. Here are the titles. Enjoy. =]

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

Congrats winners! =]

01. The Game
02. Paint and Pillows [Lyrics]
03. Sad Songs For Dirty Lovers [Lyrics]

^ All posted above have been commented and voted on, and first and second places have been added to favourites.