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CLOSED....RESULTS AT BOTTOM!!! :) CONGRATS!

Hey guys,
I got another title contest for yah! But this time I took 5 titles of my own poems and those are gonna be the title you use. Hope you like 'em! :)

Rules:
1- No profanity
2- No religious references (preferably not even about heaven)
3- Two poets per title
4- Must reserve
5- If something comes up you must UNreserve!
6- Nothing explicit

Rewards:
1st: 10 comments
2nd: 5 comments
3rd: 3 comments

Due Date: June 30

Titles:

Dark Angel
1- Adam
2- Brian: DONE

A Silent River
1- Kyles Woman: DONE
2- Rocky: DONE

A Dangerous Mind
1- SilentRebuke
2- Blissful Torture: DONE

Behind Your Eyes
1- Lush.Fcuk-*: DONE
2- Kyles Woman: DONE

My Hollow Palace
1- Teria: DONE
2- Hellon: DONE

HAVE FUN!!! :)

Behind Your Eyes, please.

=]

Dark Angel Please

A silent river pls

Un reserve me pls

Dark Angel (Pantoum)

The moon sets in this darkened sky
The Dark Angel sits full of tears
She wipes them from her eyes
The pain she feels is her only fear.

The Dark Angel sits full of tears
she waits but she already knows
The pain she feels is her only fear
so she waits for it to finally go.

She waits but she already knows
his picture will bring her demise
so she waits for it to finally go
as the monnlight begins to rise.

His picture will bring her demise
she sits wiping tears from her eyes
as the moonlight begins to rise
She watches it as it sits in the sky

The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.

OOOO... nice one. i will give it a shot.

A dangerous mind please. :)

Dangerous Mind please..

Josie

Dangerous Mind

My thoughts are haunting -
Not so kind
Best beware of my
Dangerous mind

My ideas, so scary
Fill you with fear
If you listen carefully
You will hear

The little voices
Screaming in my head
They're becoming excited
At the thought of you dead

You can run
But you'll never hide
From the unsettling thoughts
Of my dangerous mind

Josie

Copyright©JosieWentzel25May2007

I will take a silent river please.

Ok this is going kinda slow so I'm gonna extend it to the 30th of June. Hopefully I get more reserves between now and then. Thanks! :)
~Midnight Sun

My Hollow Palace

I'll have it in by the 30th, promise.

My Hollow Place.

Vacancy unleashing the power held within,
swiftly soaring above each broken soul.
Droplets of fury melt upon each tongue,
slowly devouring the black-filled lung.

Rings of smoke deify a social life.
Piercing screams of whiskey breath,
find their way inside the cursed,
assigning the devil as their thirst.

Selfishly stealing thoughtless minds,
mended by dreams of illuminated skies.
As my hollow place slowly fills in agony,
with the uneducated studies of astronomy.

(*sigh*) Any other takers? I think if I don't get a couple more in the next few days I'll just wait until my reserves post and then I'll close it. Let me know guys. Thanks!
~Midnight Sun

(It's a song so if that's not ok then tell me and I'll fix it) ((edited))

A Silent River

People hiding in cold fear
You can tell that he's been here
Broken hearts, they line the street
Taking cold unwelcome heat
Mistreated and misused
Almost like they've been abused
Silence is all that fills the air
Dead souls walking everywhere
His evil intent rose
All while a silent river flows

My how luck has changed
How hope has rearranged
Now it's a town no more
All the souls, they cannot soar
The river, how it's transformed
All because of this bad storm

The river it flowed deep and true
Beside the willow trees they grew
The river was clear and flowed strong
Everything they got along
But now he has moved on
Took his love and took his song
Left destruction in his wake
The poor hearts are what he takes
The river once was gay with songs
But now to silence it belongs

My how luck has changed
How hope has rearranged
Now it's a town no more
All the souls, they cannot soar
The river, how it's transformed
All because of this bad storm

Dreams of love they disappear
The truth of pain is all that's near
He took my love he took my song
That's when everything went wrong
Lies, they flew left & right
All during the cold night
Fear is what is lingering
While I am fingering
The notes of my life

My how luck has changed
How hope has rearranged
Now it's a heart no more
Oh my soul, it cannot soar
The river, how it's transformed
All because of this bad storm

Come on people...two more reserves and then I can judge! :)
~Midnight Sun

Behind Your Eyes

She faces him with her bags; standing at the door,
His breath still wreaking of the night before,
And he grabs her hands in his; she pulls away and sighs:
"Baby, don't say a word; the truth's behind your eyes."

She purses her lips; turns her back and walks away,
And he runs after her; grabbing onto her hand to say:
"I know what you must be thinking; but it's not true!"
And she laughs: "Trying to hide your lies is no good for you."

With tears clouding in his eyes; lipstick on his face;
He holds his hand over his black heart, feels it race,
And with spite on his tongue he yells: "You'll miss me!"
She sighs: "The truth's behind your eyes for me to see."

She walks away from him; stepping into her car,
And he laughs at her: "You won't go very far!"
With her foot pressed to the gas, she waves goodbye,
Muttering under her breath: "The truth's behind your eyes."

-Jenna Elphick
June 13, 2007

Edit**

sorry dear. i tried to write both of them. and nothing is coming out for me. i guess i am still in writers block. :(

Ok...one spot left. And it's np "Ironic". Thanks anyways, that was sweet :)
~Midnight Sun

I will take the last one and have it in by tomorrow! i belive it's called Behind these eyes. thanks!!! may the best poet win!

Behind These Eyes

Behind these eyes
That once warmed my heart
Lie all of the lies
You told me
No tears shall fall
No guilt will crawl
To your lips
Your mind will wander
Our love will squander
As you think of another
Behind these eyes
These haunting eyes
The truth always dies
Just like the love we once shared
I will never look
Back at the love you took
I will never gaze
Into your eyes that blaze
With the lies of your mind
Behind your eyes
I will never fall again

Since everyones is in can you please go ahead and judge?

Yep! I will as soon as I have enough time. Thanks to everyone who entered! :)
~Midnight Sun

Oh um...Silent Rebuke hasn't finished hers yet. But I will PM her and remind her so as soon as she gets hers in then I'll judge. Thanks for the patience! :)
~Midnight Sun

Oh, my bad. Tell her to take her time....no rush! :)

A Dangerous Mind

One word flashing before my eyes
My mind's screaming for comfort,
And safety from her hurtful lies
I have reached my last resort

I'm looking for some distraction
Anything to stop this pain
Questioning my every action
Starting to wonder if i'm sane

So desperate i dont trust myself
Looking to complete strangers
Hoping someone will offer help
Striving to avoid more dangers

Dangers contained within my mind
Thoughts running fully wild
Almost scared of what i'll find
In innocence defiled

Simply to steal the briefest kiss
To see how far I could go,
I told myself that would be bliss
And so became my own foe

Mind and heart formed an alliance
Convincing me to follow
Wander from my clean moral stance,
Ease this pain until tomorrow.

Sorry this is so late, thought i had posted it already.

Ok I'll be judging soon! :)
~Midnight Sun

AND THE WINNERS ARE!!!!!

1st: Bryan with "Dark Angel" (The visuals in this were just fantasic...I could see everything described, thanks for the entry)
2nd: Kyles Woman with "A Silent River" (The phrasiology and wording used here was very vivid, and the whole poem had an amazingly talented writer...wonderful job!)
Tied for 3rd!
Hellon with "My Hollow Palace" (This poem was so agonizing! It truly drew out emotion...thank you!)
and SilentRebuke with "A Dangerous Mind" (Your poems always have true meaning, and make me really think. Exellent poem! :)

CONGRATS EVERYONE! And thank you to all who entered...great job to all of you!

If you have certain poems you want me to comment on then I will, but if you don't have them up in a couple of days then I'll just comment on whatever cathes my eye. Congrats again! :) :) :)

I'm honored to tie for third! Hellon summed up my thoughts exactly- with so much talent i feel truly privelaged to even be considered. Thanks for the oppostunity to compete!

I finally commented on everyone's! And congrats again to all! :) Thanks for all the entries! :)
~Midnight Sun