A Star Contest.

CLOSED. RESULTS POSTED AT THE BOTTOM.

Okay, this contest is going to be slightly unusual and different. Please make sure to CAREFULLY read the rules. If you don't follow them properly, it will effect the judging.

I'm looking for an acrostic poem (sort of). I want the word STAR to be spelled out, except I want it to be like this -

S
S
S
S

T
T
T
T

A
A
A
A

R
R
R
R

So each poem should be 16 lines, and each line has to start with the correct letter. Obviously the subject has to be about stars. Whether you are talking about stars at night, or a star being somebody you look up to, or any take you have on this subject - go for it. Just impress me.

- Deadline: 15 July.
- Can be rhyming or non-rhyming, I don't mind.
- Cutting/suicide poems ARE allowed, but I don't favour them and they MAY effect judging.
- The title has NOT to be 'Star'. It can have the word in it, but I want you to make up the title.
- Please reserve.
- Have fun and impress me. :D
- Any questions/queries, PM me.

[CONTESTANTS]

- Britt -- [DONE]
- Carrie -- [DONE]
- Lush.Fcuk-* -- [DONE]
- Hey Italy -- [DONE]
- Mooie Ogen -- [DONE]
- disturbed one -- [DONE]
- Racheal -- [DONE]
- Sandy -- [DONE]
- poetess -- [DONE]
- XxX Synthetic Tears Run DryXxX -- [DONE]

This could be interesting, i think I will give it a shot!

I WANT TO!
Lol, reserve me, Hun. :]

"Capturing the Fickle Stars in Your Eyes"

Start another riot and front the
Scene like every pre-madonna who wants to be a
Star, rising above the clouds, a black
Sky tragedy of the most superficial kind

The fire in your hands compels advances
Toward a vague and dangerous path ahead, for one so
Terrified of every future handed to me, I find
The promise of being killed for my crimes so exhilerating

As in the days before, the stars aren't so far
Away, I can reach up and grab one from the
Acrylic sky and bring it down for you, and my
Arsenal of cosmic weapons to fight my enemies and the

Reality that not everything can go my way, my
Reputation never mattered, but you know that I am
Right this time, chasing stars across the country
Road to recapture what I thought I lost tonight

Ahh, it cant be star? im almost done it as if it were star...crap...can i reserve please

K i changed it to Stars I hope thats okay.

I think its pretty self explanatory what its about, if you dont get it, message me and i'll be happy to inform you

Stars (Acrostic)

Shining like the moon,
Surrounded by nothingness,
Silently waiting for tomorrows,
Silhouetted lies to unveil,

Threatened by the worlds uncertainty,
They retreat into their dark corner,
Telling each other the day will brighten soon;
Their troubles will be gone,

Another day goes by,
Another star shoots past,
Annihilating their chance of hope,
Absent mindedly fading away,

Reminiscing of better times,
Revealing their inner weakness,
Reminding me of you, I,
Realize why I even care,

Something about them,
Sparked in my mind,
Simple thoughts run through my head,
Someday you will be my shooting star

I want to reserve. Wo.Ot!

Ravyn

Ill try

Can you please take me off of the list of contestants? I'm sorry for the inconvenience, but I'm emotionally and literature-ally drained. Once again, I am sorry for the inconvenience...

Ravyn

A Simple Alteration

She looks out to the golden
Stars, wishing and praying
Someday to walk with the
Stars whose names are famous.

"Tell me, do I have what it
Takes?" She asks, holding her
Tortured and tangled heart;
Tears forming in her bright eyes.

Altering to the life she wants, she
Asks the sky if she will be able to
Amaze; if she is able to take breath
Away from one simple rehearsed line.

Reality is a dream she's yet to
Reach, holding on tight she
Repeats her prayer, hoping to be
Represented amongst the stars of Hollywood.

-Jenna Elphick
June 17, 2007

Is it okay if i leave mine the way it is? when you said it CANT be star i thought you meant you have to change the word that you are writing for...not the title...

I don't know if i wuld be able to do that

Disturbed one - Yeah, you can leave it the way it is.

Hailey - Well, it's worth a try. =P

Right, guys. I'm going away for a week, so any more poems that are reserved/posted wont be updated in the first post, but I'll get to that as soon as I get back. Just so you don't think I've forgotten about this or anything.

Anybody else?

Please? I'd really love some more takers on this. :]

SecludedSerendipity, you should PM the people who havent finished yet and let them know this is ending if you havent already cuz i wanna see the results! =D

Nvm

Reborn

Striving everyday,
Struggling to be free,
Sometimes I don't know,
Sometimes I can't see.

Tasting once, sweet liberty,
Tempted by her smile,
Torn apart by what I found,
Timid for a while.

Awakened now by dear time,
Aching to explore,
All I had to leave behind,
All I did adore.

Ripped away but not forgotten,
Reaching up above,
Riding to the stars and back,
Ready now to love.

Thank you everybody for the entries. Sorry for my lack of updates in here, I've been away for 2 weeks and haven't managed to get on. I'll PM Bryan right now, and give him 2 days to get his poem in, then this will be judged.

Any new poems can be entered in the next 2 days.

Bryan has unreserved, so this contest is now CLOSED. I'll try get the judging done on Sunday.

[COMMENTS]

Britt - A Soft Twinkle in Your Eye

This was a beautiful poem. I like how in three stanzas you had something related to stars: "Starry nights", "...stars dancing in my head", "Reaching into the bright sky". I don't know if the latter is actually talking about stars, but since you mention the "bright sky", it makes me think that it's the stars which make it bright. Anyhow, this poem was simply wonderful to read. I really enjoyed it.

Hey Italy - Capturing the Fickle Stars in Your Eyes

This was a very interesting read for me. You took on the whole idea of "stars" in a completely different way, and I like the new light that you shone it in. I also loved the title. It was unique and different, yet fitted in nicely with the contest. Excellent job.

disturbed one - Stars (Acrostic)

I liked your poem, although I felt I couldn't really judge it properly because it was different than everyone else's (with the different number of stanzas). It was a good poem, I much enjoyed reading it. You also fully took in the theme of a "star". I just wish that it wasn't longer than the rest. Great job though, it's a good write.

Racheal - Wishing for the Past

This also was very interesting. However, I was confused by a few things:
'Something in the distance
Startling would approach.'
^ I don't understand the use of 'startling' here. I understand that something in the distance is approaching, but the word 'startling' just seems wrong to me. Also:
'Twinkling from a fare'.
^ I presume for 'a fare' you mean 'afar'?
Overall this was a very nice poem. I enjoyed reading.

poetess - Replenishing

Oh wow, this poem amazed me. You made it rhyme, which, for starters, I was impressed with. Since it was a somewhat strict contest, I like how you took the challenge further and made it a rhyming poem. Everything you wrote was just amazing. Excellent work.

Lush.Fcuk-* - A Simple Alteration

I liked this a lot. I'm not sure why, but when I posted this contest, I had the impression that the majority of people would go for literal stars [in the sky]. I'm pleased, however, to see that some people have gone for celebrities who are "stars" to them. The only thing I didn't like about your poem is that you used 'stars' twice in the first stanza. Apart from that, I liked it a lot, especially the last stanza.

XxX Synthetic Tears Run Dry XxX - A Little Girl's Dream

I like how your poem ended on a positive note. It leaves the reader feeling good, knowing that good stories are out there, and that dreams come true. There were just a few things about your poem I wasn't too fond of:
'Silence tears dry through the night,'
^ I presume you meant 'silent' instead of 'silence', since that doesn't make sense.
I also didn't like how you used 'tears' twice in the first stanza, more-so since you used them in two lines next to each other! Other than that though, I really enjoyed your poem. It was a much enjoyable read.

Carrie - Reborn

Oh yay, another rhyming poem! (Can you tell I'm a fan of those?) I found your poem to be rather simple, yet well-written, too. I adored your last line, "Ready now to love." It's very positive; beautiful. Nicely done, I really enjoyed the read.

Sandy - Representing is Never the Answer

Hm. I'm not so sure I understand this poem. Is it meant to mean that people look up to the gang members as their "stars"? Sorry, but I'm really confused. Other than the actual subject, I like the poem, I guess. I mean, it's good, but I think if I understood it properly I would enjoy it a lot more. Also, this line:
'Remember the people who joins and died?'
^ Do you not mean 'joined' instead of 'joins'?
Overall, it's a good poem.

Mooie Ogen - It'll Never Be Over

I love the rhyming here, too. It's amazing. You have wonderful imagery used here, which really helped me to connect with your poem and vividly see it in my head. I'm not all too sure why, but your poem seemed to stand out more from the others. It stuck, and it stood out. Good job, I really enjoyed it.

[WINNERS]

First Place - Mooie Ogen x "It'll Never Be Over" {8 r/r/c's}
Second Place - poetess x "Replenishing" {6 r/r/c's}
Third Place - Hey Italy x "Capturing the Fickle Stars in Your Eyes" {4 r/r/c's}

This contest was [very] hard to judge. So congratulations to the winners and all the other contestants, because your poems were wonderful. =)

Winners, please leave your titles. Thanks.

Haha sorry for the difference...thats what i thought you meant by it being different then "star"

No problemo.

Congrats to everyone else =)

I'll get to the poems either later tonight, or tomorrow. :)

Oh, thank you! Nice review too! Wow...um, sorry I just got net access back due to a storm.

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Poetess, your poems have been commented and rated. :)

Mooie Ogen and Hey Italy, I'll try my best to get to yours tomorrow, as I have to go for now. Sorry for the wait.

All comments and votes have been given out now. :}