Another Contest By Terra <3

Closed

I will be judging them now. Results should be posted with in a few hours

Can the part about how you felt about writing a poem be old? I have something I'd love to use, if so.

And if it can be, I'll defintely reserve a title.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

Is it about how you felt about writing your FIRST poem? lol if so then yes.

and you are able to do both parts if you wish. :) i fogrot to mention that part as well. so reserve a title if you wish as well :)

I Married _______________ (can not be a name),
please in section 2.

Thanks

Josie

Black Scars and Blue Eyes, Dear. :}

Teddy knows my secrets, please and thanks

Only one title for now.

Teddy Knows my secrets

((My grandfather had been in the hospital for 7 weeks, and every night I held the teddy bear he gave me when i was little. On June 22nd 2007 he passed away, so this is dedicated to him))

She whispered secrets in his ear
ones she knew that he would keep
her grandpa promised to keep her safe
now she cries herself to sleep

Grandpa gave her, her first teddy bear
when she was 1 day old
he promised that it would protect her
it's secrets go untold

Teddy knew her secrets
through his ears to grandpas heart
it was like she told him everything
no matter how far apart

As he was in the hospital
teddy gave kisses to his cheek
followed by laughs and giggles
with not even a word to speak

A teddy to protect him
she put it next to his bed
hoping again, to keep him safe
one more kiss to his forehead

He said to her "please take it home,
I don't want for them to lose it"
so she took it then and held it close
in her arms he was a perfect fit

She held it close, every night
praying for him to get better
every night, she continued to write
another line of her letter

But I guess she asked too much from god
for he didn't answer her prayers
he took her grandpa away from her
and left her with only tears

She whispered one more secret
"I love you grandpa" is all she said
4 last words and 1 more tear drop
1 last kiss upon his head

She whispered secrets in Teddy's ears
ones she knew that he would keep
her grandpa promised to protect her
now she cries herself to sleep

I Married the Devil Himself

Sitting in front of the mirror
Covering up my face.
I don't want people to see
The way I've been disgraced.

Every night since we got married,
I've been raped and beaten.
And the times when he's not home,
I know he's out cheating.

He hits me, taunts me,
Calls me all sorts of names.
And now, covered in bruises,
To go out, I’m too ashamed.

I keep hearing my mother's voice
Telling me he wasn't right.
But how could he not be
When it was 'Love-at-first-sight'?

At first I thought he loved me
Like no one else could.
Now he only notices me
Depending on his mood.

Cowering in the corner,
I can't help but cry.
Seeing him storming towards me,
I just wish I could die.

I married the Devil himself,
Of that I am sure.
Another day in this Hell
Is more than I can endure.

So now, sitting here
I have two choices:
Either I can stay his slave,
Or listen to the voices.

They are telling me
To put a gun to his head;
To end my suffering
And ensuring he's dead.

But will anybody else
Ever love me?
Or is this pain and torture
To forever be my destiny?

Josie

Copyright©JosieWentzel02July07

Can i please have to dance upon the evening sky
this definitely isnt my favorite but oh well its done
i changed evening to midnight is that okay?

To dance upon the midnight sky

I promise you,
With everything I do,
Im not playing your fool,

The night I shouldve been forsaken,
You found me and her naked,
I think you were the one mistaken,

Calm down baby come outside,
We can start over just follow stride,
As we dance upon the midnight sky

Yes that is okay :)

Some rule changes.

I seen her the other day down on Easy Street,
Draped in good intentions; walking with poise,
Flashing a milky smile and a heart of concrete -
She's got veins running with shimmering gold.

She followed the dotted path along the road,
As she played off her pain in Hollywood style;
But on her fragile arms; it silently showed -
The stories that she hid in her smiling eyes.

And he's got her on a short leash as he follows her,
Yelling and screaming at the top of his lungs,
And she falls to her face, the nameless faces a blur;
As she rolls down her sleeves and covers her eyes.

So ashamed of the life that she continues to lead,
She walks away with tears streaming down her face,
And her black scars and blue eyes do mislead -
The life that she puts on to hide away her broken home.

-Jenna Elphick
July 8, 2007

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Just to go along with the saying "Don't judge a book by its cover". The happiest person you know may be going through this; keep a very watchful eye.

Upon this Empty Screen please.

Thanks

Josie

Yep. it is close enough :) haha.

Any idea when it will be judged, i know it says whenever you feel like it but

i dont want it to get pushed back and wont be able to find it

Okay i will be judging tomorow night or tomorow afternoon :)

Judging today? Damn. Okay then I'm gonna have to unreserve for Upon This Empty Screen <sulk>

Josie

I'll do Hidden Lies!

~Hidden Lies~

Nostrils tingle, beginning to breathe.
Air is expelled, aiming to deceive.
Externally stable, as he inherently seethes.
Emotions tabled, he receives no reprieve.

Loquacious lips, tongue tied in a knot,
overbearing, yet inside overwrought,
a feeble facade, that could go for not,
for the truth could be found, if it were sought.

Words enkindle, his throat is inflamed;
an empty frame, with the interior maimed.
Demeaning disclosures, feeling defamed,
yet with one honest mutter, he is acclaimed.

Abounding lungs, an inflated chest,
inordinately full of emotions suppressed.
With an innate ability to cope with unrest,
he awaits his implosion, forever depressed.

~Will Hunting~

Okay i had the worse day ever, so i am moving the judging date to tomorow.

sorry for the incovienence, i will be an unfair judger if i judge today and i don't want to cheet anyone

Okay this contest will be closed in 1 hour (after i am done cleaning the bathrom and living room/doing laundry)

if you want to do more poems you can. if you don't want to you don't have to. no limit on how many you can do.

Card Board Cut Out
I liked the way you formatted this poem. It has good rhythm and I a hard basis to go off of. Good work dear.

Teddy Knows My Secrets
Wow. Now this is something I can relate to all to well. This was a beautifully written poem. you putting the first stanza as the last stanza held it together perfectly. Good work

I Married The Devil Himself
mmm… I liked this poem. in the center I started to get off track and wasn’t feeling the poem. but the beginning and ending are excellent.

To Dance upon the Midnight Sky
The idea of the poem is a great idea. But I think your word choice at places was a little dull… it seemed like you had wrong words in there… but I still liked the poem

Let Us Dance upon the Evening Sky
Awe this is the cutest poem ever. I loved it to death. OMG you just made my day :)

Green Grass With Broken Glass
You have some wrong words. Lol :P I couldn’t totally get into this poem.

Hidden Lies
Awe this is so completely utterly sad. :( I want to cry right now. Good work FREAK! Haha jk ;) I liked this poem. it was a nice write.

Upon This Empty Screen
mm.. another poem I like. Haha this was another nice write. I liked how you put it together and used same verses in order to put the reader into the story. Lol good work

Black Scars and Blue Eyes
Wow. Nicely put. The wording you used here was superb. I was amazed by this. I felt like I was right there. awesome work.

For The most part I loved these poems. BUTT!! I was only having one winner for this contest **sighs… I narrowed it down to two.. and that’s the best I can do so the winners are

**Upon the Empty Screen, and Black Scars and Blue Eyes**