Clam down daddy take a breath. [help, for credit & poem rate

  • Mass Murder
    17 years ago

    So bascially, I need help with this poem, I have no clue where to begin. Heres the format:

    rhyme.
    no rhyme.
    rhyme.
    calm down daddy take a breath.

    I really wanted to write it about this horrible truck wreck he got into, and was fired. & now were close to loosing our house, but I have no clue where to begin! I will give credit, a poem rate and comment to anyone who just helps me start out of give me and idea, advice, something!

  • Mommy And Me
    17 years ago

    Well. what i do when i can't think of anything and i know what i want to write about it.

    i get out my favorite glass and pour hot chocolate in it. with alittle more chocolate then usual.

    i sit down in front of the computer and i close my msn so people can't inturupt me. i put on country music in the back ground and think about what i want to write about.

    close your eyes and think back to the accident and how it all started. and then let it flow from there.

  • Tracy D Rollings
    17 years ago

    What do you really need , I mean what is it that you are looking for help on , I was in the same situation and I know how he must feel , I lost everything and nowI can't ever work again. SO tell me what you need and I'll try to help you.

  • HopefulxRomantic
    17 years ago

    I can't suggest content, unfortunately. I would have to have been there to do justice to it. But I can suggest another pattern to help you write.

    If the first line uses calm language, you're conjuring the image of a settling, everything's-ok atmosphere.
    The second line, which doesn't rhyme, can use a faster pace with harsher-sounding words, to symbolise the spiral out of control.
    The third, calm language and smooth flowing words, to symbolise things calming down and helping things through.
    Also I would suggest splitting the last line up with a comma, just to slow down the pace a little.

    HxR