RENT. [forget regret]

CLOSED. RESULTS AT BOTTOM.

Who here loves the musical, RENT? I do, I do, I do! xD So how about a contest, eh?

There's no rules. None whatsoever, just as long as you get your poem in by the deadline.

:: 10 October ::

Now for some titles --

o7. Goodbye Love

Have fun.

o1. Forget Regret
--NyellMoonlight [DONE.]
--Britt
--HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG [DONE.]
--Twisted Heart [DONE.]
--Pete [DONE.]

o2. Today for You, Tomorrow for Me
--HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG [DONE.]

o3. Will I Lose My Dignity[?]
--HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG [DONE.]

o4. Another Day
--Twisted Heart [DONE.]
--Hey Italy [DONE.]

o5. La Vie Boheme
--20sMiLe07 [DONE.]

o6. What You Own
--Beautiful Chaos [DONE.]
--20sMiLe07
--Hey Italy [DONE.]

o8. Take Me or Leave Me
--Tricky Daze
--Beautiful Chaos [DONE.]
--HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG [DONE.]

o9. I Should Tell You
--ReproducedByIntelligence [DONE.]

10. Seasons of Love
--HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG [DONE.]
--Bryan

(Btw, there's no limit to how many people per title. ;])

Wow good titles hun
I'll try Take Me Or Leave Me
Thanks alot! :]

I love that musical! :) lol, great idea!

I'll write "Forget regret"

What You Own & Take Me Or Leave Me please

No limit to poems per person either, right? Hahaha..

Whooeee, I see a bunch I want to take on,
I will try them for now, and may unreserve
one or two lol.

Forget Regret
Today For You, Tomorrow For Me
Will I Lose My Dignity?
Take Me or Leave Me
Seasons of Love, Have Fun.

XD
LOVE these titles,
I`ll get them in Hunn !

There's no limit to poems per person either. You can take as many as you like. :]

Id like to reserve Seasons Of Love

What You Own

Every word that leaves your lips
All thoughts within your mind
Every action that you take
Is how you are defined

We won't be here forever
So right now is what matters
Everything you leave behind
Either builds or shatters

You know who you are
What fills you up with pride
Just what you can live with
And what won't be denied

Life is full of needs and wants
But vanity is our foe
Thinking we have all this time
It's gone before we know

Cherish every second
Do good at every turn
So when you close your eyes in death
Your people soar, not burn

Take Me Or Leave Me

What you see is what you get
I stand here in my glory
The cover doesn't really speak
Of what's inside my story

My beauty's but a thin disguise
For the soul which lives inside
And you will never see the truth
If you've never really tried

I've cried tears and had some laughs
Felt like I'm alone
Dreamed of something more in life
Searched out the unknown

I paint, I write, I've hurt myself
I've lashed out, out of spite
I've done some good and then some bad
I've tried to make it right

I'm full of flaws, just like the world
But beauty still lives on,
Beneath the surface, to the core
It's never really gone

You may not like what you see
But this is who I am
I won't pretend to be another
I cannot live a sham

Leave me now if you must
I won't beg you to stay
Someone else will see my spark
And fire shall give way

Would like "Forget Regret", and "Another Day"

Thanks

Forget Regret
By: Twisted Heart

Sometimes it seems so hard to hold
Within your mind your heart and soul
A thought that died without a debt
Inside the time of life's regret.

You tend your life with love and care
Your heart and soul you try to share
But deep within your mind you see
A lose that spans eternity.

No faith in things you cannot find
No hope to hold it's left behind
Within the heart that strings along
Without laughter without song.

Dark nights find your heart in tears
Stars wrestle with the break of fear
Against the eyes that show the soul
Among the thoughts the mind has stole.

Now time has wasted as you tarried
Along the path of love you carried
Dark thoughts and fears inside your breath
Tuned fine by life and your regret

Another Day
By: Twisted Heart

Another day has passed, my love
Since you have bid me 'well
You see the night is falling fast
Against my heart, an empty shell

I look each day for your return
Upon the stars I see
I make a wish for you, my love
To be here next to me.

But distance seems to carry us
In time and space it seems
The only place I find you here
My love, is in my dreams.

Come crimson tears I cry for you
As darkness over takes
The sun has lost the fight, my love
Inside my soul the break.

Red tears inside my heart, my love
Among the thoughts I see
I deeper hurt that clings so fast
To broken parts of me.

Another day, my love, is gone
Now darkness takes my breath
It holds me in this lifeless tomb
And comforts me in death.

*Forget regret* by NyellMoonlight

Shield me with all twisted moments,
lets drink blood from the silver chalices
as all stoned gargoyles ridicule our silhouettes
over castles of the motionless ancient worlds.

Forget regret, as the sun sets beyond purple horizon;
my soul's a temple, filled with your emerald aura.
Porcelain chambers echo distant screams
as we run into unknown, guided by descants.

Hush, my darling, let the silence sing;
Feel the pulse of this substance like your own,
embrace little imperfections of darkness,
let them be your shadow, your other skin.

Forget regret, captured by antique visions,
your demonic presence mantles my naked being.
Earthquake announces cleavage of reality
as we stand united, gracefully melting in the rain.

One down lol..

Seasons of Love [Acrostic]

She lays still, hand over hand above her
Ebony heart, counting the beats as she
Admires his beautiful eyes -- bright sky blue --
Shining as the sun sinks into the horizon.
Over the hill and to the right is an old
Naked stop sign, weathered down to read:
"S P" -- the place where he placed a hand

Over her heart and asked her to take the
Fall over the edge of the earth with him.

Love comes in seasons, or so she was led
On to believe -- because once again, obscure
Vacuity got the best of her. With his lies
Edging her to the end, she catches her breath..and falls.

-Jenna Elphick
September 10, 2007

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Acrostic Poetry is where the first letter of each line spells a word, usually using the same words as in the title.

Today for You, Tomorrow for Me

Laying in the frost covered grass last night,
I counted out as many golden stars as I could,
Remembering all the things I never did right,
Swearing up and down I`d get you back for good.

Holding my haggard thoughts up to the onyx sky,
I tried to come up with the prettiest lines of poetry,
But the imagery exploded into a teardrop in my eye,
Left over from the day I let words get the best of me.

I forgot to cry way back then, swore that I was strong;
Counted the breaths I took without you here with me,
But sometimes, even the best things can be wrong;
And it kills me thinking maybe we`re meant to be.

I named reasons I hated you to match the stars,
But I could only come up with a count of three,
So I wrote out a sad song to go with it on my guitar,
And Baby, today is for you, but tomorrow is for me.

-Jenna Elphick
September 27, 2007

Forget Regret

Lines originally sung by Alexisonfire
Song: Side Walk When She Walks
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Dressed to kill, you look so right
I am drunk with lust tonight
Your wounds are opening wide
And they might be just my size

Blue eyes beam bright in this light,
And from the right angle, you`re perfect,
But I know your kind, you`re all the same --
Heartbreakers in the purest form.
The stars explode with imagery of us,
But I think I should call it a night,
We`re getting closer and I can`t take this,
One more heartbreak will tear me down,
But I feel like I`m falling, holding on tight --
Dressed to kill, you look so right.

This picture of me and you,
Is stuck inside of my pounding head,
It may be reassuring from time to time,
But the color`s fading, my eyes are dulling.
Naivety has gotten the best of me before,
And the alcohol doesn`t put up a fight --
My guard is down and you do your best,
To get inside of my head, take me away;
So you practice lines, getting them right --
I am drunk with lust tonight.

A past of mistakes shines through your eyes,
But I`m arguing with myself over the irony,
`Cuz you just don`t seem to be the type,
To let anyone close enough to hurt you.
One night stands is what you go for,
So that your love life is easier to hide,
You`re so sick of all the stupid questions,
About your life and the people in it,
So you protect yourself, don`t let anyone inside;
Your wounds are opening wide --

I can see your heart still beating,
Trying to repair itself of the damage,
But through the pain, I can see:
A man that`s not afraid to hurt someone else.
So isn`t it ambiguous, the thought of this?
Or is it funny that I can see through your disguise?
In the back of your mind, you`re falling for me, too;
So forget regret, let it go with me up to the sunrise;
Cover me in pretty lines that leave room for compromise,
And they might be just my size.

-Jenna Elphick
September 27, 2007

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Glosa-Verse: A Spanish form invented by court poets in the 14th and 15th centuries. An opening quatrain, called a 'cabeza' is chosen from another poet, or song. The glosa elaborates or 'glosses' on the quatrain with four ten line stanzas, their concluding lines taken consecutively from the quatrain and their sixth and ninth lines rhyming with the borrowed tenth.

The due date for this contest has been extended to the 10th of October.

I'm sorry, but at least it gives some of you more time. I'm going through a lot of stuff right now, and I don't have the time to judge, or even get on this site very much at the moment. Sorry.

Mkay, then. (:
I'll reserve " I should tell you."

I love Rent. :D

Anybody up for taking the last 2 titles?

*puppy dog eyes and pouts lips* Pretty please? =]

Can i do what you own?

Urm ok I'll do 'La Vie Boheme' aswell which will be a huuuuuuuuuuuge challenge to me is it pronounced how it is spelt btw?

Thank you! =]

Good luck, as I know that title is quite a tricky one. Yep, it's pronounced as it's spelt: "La Vee Bohem".

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One more title. Anybody up for it? :D

Secluded Serendipity,
I know there are a lot already in this title .. if I'm not allowed to submit this; please just PM me and i'll remove it...

Forget Regret [Double Acrostic] (abcabc)

Fighting your fear back, concealing a tear,
Ought to forget her, now that she's gone.
Regrettably strong was the bond all along.
Glaring mistakes so revealingly clear!
Enough of regret; now your duo is one.
To forget your regret is all that you want!

*An acrostic poem has a word, phrase or name spelled out vertically down one of the edges; usually the left edge. A double acrostic has one word down the left edge and another word down the right edge.*

Maybe some more later

"What You Own"

Obsessed with our possessions
And this illusion that we own them
What you own ends up owning you
Defining everything we do

Bumming off of strangers
For the most basic things I lack
Begging becomes borrowing
If you can give it back

Public transit sanctuaries
No one cares where you go
No one meddles in your affairs
But we'll defend our own

Calling potential employers
From a public phone
Avoiding that awkward conversation
With fleeting desires to call home

What you own ends up owning you
But what you reject defines you too
Not just those things that you can live with now
But those things you cannot live without

Will I Lose My Dignity?

You held my hand as you pushed me over the edge,
Laughing in the misery of my demise, but as I climbed,
I looked into your eyes and saw a glimpse of fear in you,
A man that is still a boy, a child without a blanket.
The mere thought of us sent chills up and down my spine,
Thinking of our hearts beating as one, bodies colliding --
But the lust in my head argued with the love in my heart,
Screaming cynical retorts into my pounding head.
And where the stars crashed into the ground, we layed;
Holding each other deep into the night, breath trembling;
In all actuality, a heartbreak was the easiest solution,
So you held me high on your ceramic smiles,
Building up for something that was never really there,
And the crash back down to reality may have been a mistake,
But it put some common sense back into my head.
The alcohol churns my stomach, as I wring out my heart;
Memories of you and I crash and break into the ground,
Going down to Hell with your guilty conscience.
And these lonely nights give me the time I always needed,
To sit under the clock and think of where I went wrong,
But your voice is climbing into my head,
Indoctrinating what little progress I may have made.
These four walls collapse further around me,
As the clock ticks away the time that I waste,
And your head swirls through my clouded agony,
Begging me to think it through, give it a second shot;
It`s funny, usually I could think up some pretty line,
That explained exactly the conditions I took you back on,
But the extent to which you have got inside of my head,
Allows me to ask just one pitiful rhetorical question.
Slurring through intoxicated breath, I look to the past,
And as I stumble further away from the truth,
I hold a suicidal fairy tale by the seams,
Whispering in it`s bittersweet pages:
Will I lose my dignity?

-Jenna Elphick
October 1, 2007

'La Vie Boheme' 'The Bohemian Life'

Laying on the grass; head facing the sky,
His arm wraps me tightly, as clouds pass us by.

The whistles of the wind, wrap a blanket of love.
This is the angel, who was sent from above.

Obscure wonders, a life full of beauty.
The images of nature, sounds of bluest seas.

Birds they are humming, their merry morning tune
Wildlife shows purity, flowers start to bloom.

I Lean over him, the purest of nature I've seen,
Speaking in my head, 'La Vie Boheme'.

I have also wrote the other poem ' what you own' but i think its total crap so i shall try again before i post :D xxx alex xxx

Pete--
It's no problem. ^_^ Thank you for entering.

Thanks to the others for submitting your poems.

I should tell you. [[Monchielle]]

I am deeply sorry
to put this curse on you.
The truth inside of me,
has hidden from the world,
satisfaction baring.

I am deeply sorry
to desire such needs,
that from the heart of you,
lies everything I dream,
of your soul through and through.

I am deeply sorry
to say I should tell you
the truth behind the lies,
hidden from all the world -
I can see in your eyes:

I am deeply sorry
for, it's not what you think
it's but a miracle,
hiding the dust from you.
Lies I've told; satirical.

- - - - -

Gah. It's my first monchielle. Which is why it's so bad.

This ends tomorrow. This week has been, and will continue to be, extremely busy. However, I will really try my hardest to get the results up soon.

Getting this in
Oh, btw, these themes are not taken from the film or play, but they do fit rather well, donchathink?

"Another Day"

The greatest lie my parents told me
"Tomorrow is another day", if only
I could still look at the world that way
Having all the promise of another day

But I don't know how much time I have
Though I'm assured it won't be long
Between the shaking heads and nervous glances
The doctors never have to say what's wrong

Another day, don't make me laugh
I'd be grateful for another minute
But now I'm just living each like it's my last
Until I'm finally finished

Another day to sit and waste
Doing the same routine
Or live in the now and be damn proud
To be given such a blessing

Take Me or Leave Me

I can see from the look in your eyes,
That I`m not at all what you want,
So your smile just boasts your lies,
Of what you`re deathly afraid to flaunt.

Telling your friends that I`m oh so pretty,
And that I`m way better than all the rest,
It`s funny, `cuz you can`t even take me,
If I`m not perfectly done up and dressed.

My clothes aren`t suiting your taste,
And my make`up isn`t just right,
I don`t have a small enough of a waist,
So we can`t leave the house tonight.

We`ll sit at home in this petty silence,
Trying to find something we can do,
My vulnerability isn`t hard to convince,
That we can be risky, try something new.

So we play a game straight from the heart,
Where we take the time to really talk,
And I tell you it straight, right from the start,
I can see it in your eyes that you`re in shock.

You thought you treated me just right,
That you weren`t capable of doing wrong,
And I have to say that up until tonight,
Your pride was standing tall and strong.

But for once, I`d like you to hold my hand,
And introduce to me to every friend you see,
Then maybe you will start to understand,
You either got to take me or leave me.

-Jenna Elphick
October 9, 2007

[[Not my best, I know.]]

[[RESULTS.]]

First of all, I just have to say that the poetry entered in this contest was absolutely fantastic. It was so hard to pick just three winners, so I've added one honourable mention in, too.

1st: "Forget Regret" {HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG} [8]
2nd: "Forget Regret" {Twisted Heart} [6]
3rd: "What You Own" {Beautiful Chaos} [4]
HM: "Today for You, Tomorrow for Me" {HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG} [2]

Congrats everybody, and thanks for entering!

Please PM me the poems you would like me to comment on.

I've only received one PM so far... just bumping this so the other winners can see that they've placed. :)