Title Contest - Any Style, Any Genre [ round 2 ]

****CLOSED - RESULTS AT BOTTOM****

Calling poets :
01. NyellMoonlight
02. BittersweetDecay
03. PoeticGenius
04. Gem
05. Sweet Fragility
06. Twisted Heart

I'm going to post more than 6 titles. One title will be my own with lyrics from an actual band.
Choose one of the following titles and make sure that:
1. The poem rhymes.
2. The lyrics are included in the poem without any changes.
3. Be creative and have fun.
NOTE: You are allowed to split up the lyrics as long as you don't include any of your own words in between the actual lyrics.

Titles:
01. Cruelty Brought Thee Orchids
Lyrics: "The narcissistic unrest frozen on the mirror's face / With this disdain, inside these veins"

02. Where Dead Angels Lie [Sweet Fragility - DONE]
Lyrics: "Yet with each crystal of frost that is falling, another story is told"

03. Feathers Fell [Twisted Heart - DONE]
Lyrics: "Angels cried... as the rain poured, feathers fell... they'll fall no more..."

04. Black Horizons
Lyrics: "Thy eyes were like weakening candles leaving the flames to die"

05. Night's Blood [BittersweetDecay - DONE]
Lyrics: "For a black heart will only find beauty in darkness, where the shadows of death may lie"

06. Death Blooms
Lyrics: "Sown to my dreams, death blossoms where clouds lie over me"

07. Trapped in the Wake of a Dream [Poetic Genius - DONE]
Lyrics: "My sanctuary calling my name, so I run through to the light, weeping through a cloud."

08. Deteriorate
Lyrics: "I need a heart that carries on through the pain, when the walls start collapsing again."

09. Lost in Obscurity [Gem - RESERVE]
Lyrics: "If I'm quiet, I'll slide up behind you / And if you hear me I'll enjoy trying to find you"

10. Vow of Silence [NyellMoonlight - DONE]
Lyrics: "Through the years it has become darker in that secret place"

Good luck to everyone!
If you have any questions feel free to ask me, and I will get back to you as soon as I can.

Hello again ^^. I would like to reserve Night's blood please. Thank you and great contest :D

I would like to reserve Deteriorate, please.

I think I'll take Feather's Fell. Really had a hard time choosing between it and Lost in Obscurity.

Great titles... by the way.

Where dead angels lie please

Feathers Fell
By: Twisted heart

The night has captured her restless heart
Broke free and full of pain
Against the crash of shattered parts
Dead dreams are what remain.
A fool, in love, she choose her fate
Refusing words of lies
Wisdom came, but way too late
Alone she sits and cries.

Tattered wings in soot of feather down
Singed edges from the spark
Her halo crooked on her crown
Black glass... her fading heart.
Twist pangs of hunger slowly call
Against the silken soul
Dark down of feathers silent fall
Inside the night so cold

No rescue from the death of dreams
As breath inside her breaks
The feather's fall from Angel wings
As her heart falls from grace.
Tend needless pain inside the roar
Mere mortal in her fear
A broken shell forever more
As Angels wipe her tears

Dark skies now open to the rain
In hopes to cleanse her mortal pain
Angels cried... as the rain poured
Feathers fell... They'll fall no more.

Challenge Title and lyrics.
Feathers Fell
Lyrics: "Angels cried... as the rain poured, feathers fell... they'll fall no more..."

10. Vow of Silence for me :)

*Vow of silence*
By NyellMoonlight

Mistakes were made within another empty space,
through the years it has become darker in that secret place
rolling thunders painting over obscurity with disgrace,
vow of silence haunts the mind, leaving tears to stain the face.

Injustice whispers mixed with nothingness that I've become,
predictive starless smiles while the heartbeat slowly drum,
misunderstanding causing riots, till I'm completely numb,
vow of silence haunts the mind, in front of it I succumb.

Poetic Genius, one of the rules was to NOT split up the lyrics by adding words in between them.

You may split them up like:

"My sanctuary calling my name,
So I run through to the light,
Weeping through a cloud."

---but you may NOT split them up like:

"My sanctuary calling my name,
<own words>
So I run through to the light,
<own words>
Weeping through a cloud."

Can i change it to "Lost in Obscurity", i'm finding it hard to do the other one

Yes, Gem, you may switch. I'll reserve it.

And Poetic Genius, thank you for modifying your entry (it still makes sense to me).

I have received several PMs in which poets tell me that they will not be able to submit their entries on time because of HighSchool. Therefore, I am changing the deadline to Sunday - 30th Of September 2007.
I hope that extension will be good enough for you because I really want everyone to submit their poem for this round.

So BittersweetDecay, Gem and SweetFragility, please have your entries ready by this Sunday.
Thank you.

Night's Blood

My eyes are empty- reflection of my soul
Beyond my heart - ghosts are restless
My steps feel feathery - marks of charcoal
Inside my being - demons are my witnesses

Alone in the deep forest I now wander,
My spirit feels heavy as a rusty anchor
What am I to do? I ask the delusive night
What have I done? I shouldn't,I had no right.

This tattered cloak that hides my silhouette
Is meant to cover my long lost regrets
For the murder I coldly committed
But afterall, his feelings were full of hatred.

I feel these branches being broken behind me
My body is trembling - what could it be?
I turn around and feel his tainted breath
On the back of my head - warm blast of death.

"Don't be scared my beloved fiend" he whispers
I cry as I see the most fierce of slayers
This werewolf with fur entangled with blood
My whole being is numb,my mind is stunned.

My tears dry - his smile makes my blood run cold
In front of my eyes his silver fangs are unfold
"Your sins flood through your blood" he says
As his hellish hands grab me, and we sway...

I give in to this monster and cry to the moon
"Sweetheart, I shall follow you soon"
The beast lacerates my flesh in an instant
I shouldn't - But you betrayed me - I shouldn't.

I shouldn't have killed you my darling
This is your revenge,blood dripping,he's drinking.
I repent your eyes,your lips, the lust you felt for her
My claws were your end, his fangs are my thorn.

For a black heart will only find beauty in darkness,
where the shadows of death may lie
Now I wander in Hell searching for you restless
I regret you lied, now I drink my cries...

Since there's only six poets here, can i change my title? Quite late, I know, but i think I have a better chance of writing something else.

Instead of "Deteriorate" can i do "Where dead angels lie"? I'll start on it now if it's okay.

Where Dead Angels Lie

Pictures and a scatter of memories - are a little girl's last swansong
Snow falls gently onto cold ground, in the last place she belongs.

Gravestone adorned with flowers, a snow trampled path that surrounds --
A place where she is forever lost and never will be found.

Each day more innocent lives are taken, more drama to behold
A thoughtless act can end the chance for a life to unfold.

We desire Utopia, where death only strikes those who are old
Yet with each crystal of frost that is falling, another story is told.

Each crystal represents another life that is torn away
Sadly proving to the world that nothing gold can stay.

Copyright (c) Sweet Fragility
9/30/07

* "Nothing gold can stay." is a line taken from a poem by Robert Frost. I think it means that you're gold when life in new and you don't have to deal with the difficult things, like death. You're innocent, basically. Anyway, that's just my interpretation.

Ok Sweet Fragility.
I'm glad you managed to write an entry in the end.
I'm sorry, but we will have to wait for Gem to submit hers too before I can judge this. I've sent her a PM regarding her entry and I hope she will submit it soon.
Thank you for your patience.

Finally the results are out.
I was planning on waiting for Gem to submit her poem too, but I think I have made you wait enough.
I'm really sorry Gem. If you would have answered one of my PMs I would have waited a bit longer.

And the winners are:

First Place [10 comments + a place in my favourites]
BittersweetDecay - Night's Blood
[Very unique and captivating storyline. The twist of the poem and the vivid imagery have really captured my attention.]

Second Place [7 comments]
Twisted Heart - Feathers Fell
[Wonderful storyline and beautiful imagery.]

Third Place [5 comments]
Poetic Genius - Trapped in the Wake of a Dream
[Even though you said your poem no longer made sense after you edited it, I still think it was a very good poem.]

Honorable Mention [2 comments]
Sweet Fragility - Where Dead Angels Lie
NyellMoonlight - Vow of Silence

At first I didn't want to add any HMs but I really thought Sweet Fragility and NyellMoonlight's poems were great as well. The only reason for which they only got HM is that I happened to be more attracted by the other ones.
If I like a poem that is entered in my contests, you can be sure that it will not go unrewarded.

**IMPORTANT:
Please PM me with the title of the poems you would like me to comment on or post the titles in this topic. A PM is preffered.
**VERY IMPORTANT:
I WILL NOT comment if you do not tell me what poems you would like me to comment on.

Congratulations to everyone and thank you for entering my contest! I hope you will participate in my next ones as well.

**Please read**
A side note - remember that regardless of the final results of any contest you will always end up winning. If you didn't win the actual contest, you are still a winner because of simply having enough courage and determination to take up a challange, and did your best to achieve your goal. Also remember that you are not competing against others but against yourself. Your main goal should be trying to write something that is better than your latest best piece.
Thank you.

Thank you very much! I'm so glad the poem I made took the 1st place..I hope you'll make more contesst,because the ideas you have are awesome.

"I'm really sorry Gem. If you would have answered one of my PMs I would have waited a bit longer."

Please don't get snotty with me. It's very hard to reply to PM's when you don't have the internet to read them in the first place.
I'm sorry i missed the contest but i'm even sorrier for your attitude. It's not very nice. Have a nice life.