End Date: November 4th 2007 (By Terra)

Okay i wrote this earlier today. makes no sense at all, and is very unflowy. haha. but here is what i want you to do.

decifer a meaning that you see behind it and re-write it.

you need to keep the dirt road and the oak tree.
you need a form of butterfly.. it can be anything you want as long as it fits to how the butterfly fit into this poem.

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Dead as Dust

Walking along a path she watches her feet move
Step by step along the dirt road
The flowers are all wilted, there is nothing left
But a lone oak tree in the middle of the path

She begins to walk towards it
As the sun begins to lower
But then she sees it all to clear
The specks of dust among the tree

Afraid to take a step she falls towards the ground
Her eyes then open wide as her hands hit the dust
Where right between her hands, there is a butterfly
Grey and dead it lays there, no life left to give

A tear slips from her cheek, sailing to the dead beauty
Where upon its wing it does hit, shattering it to pieces.
She yells out to the heavens, cursing all the gods
How could they let something so beautiful, just fall away and die

She slowly begins to rise
As looks beyond the giant oak
Seeing something horrid
She begins to walk towards it

Along the path they are scattered with in
Every step there are a few more
Her heart aches in pain as she looks at them all
Sleeping dead beauties with no life to give

A lone oak tree sits in the middle of the path
As around it the butterflies are dead as dust
No more beauty is held within her soul
As she falls towards the dust.

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5 people maximum.

A= 10 comments more then B
B= 6 comments more then C
C= 4 comments more then D
D= 2 comments more then E
E= Depends on how good it is. (between 1 and 5 comments)

any questions just ask.

-Terra

I'll give it a try. Is there a deadline?
And can it be in a different format, ie. different rhyming scheme or what not?

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

Any format you want dear. umm... november 4th is the end date :-) lol :P

Imma give it a go. (:
I have an idea of it and all, but it'll be a few days before I get it in.

Okay. sounds good. well you two.. and any others. i will be willing to add a week to the end date if needed. but no longer then november 11th.

Awe dear you see the thing about poetry is a thousand people can read the same thing and come up with a thousand messages. :-) lol :P i'm sure it will be grand when i read it :-)

I'm not retarded, I swear. >.<

I'll get mine done sitting here if I can . . . but if not, hopefully in a few days. ^^

xTheEcstaysofSuicidex

Its okay dear ! :-)

Lives Unlived.

Silent screams about the dust rising from the old dirt road,
with an oak tree to her right and a field of daisies to her left.
She cries out to the unknown praying for an answer -
save the lives unlived, fulfill the dreams left deserted.
How wonderful it would be just to see them all so happy.

With thoughts of joy and thoughts of love she turns to her left,
but there's not but a butterfly floating about the rest.
With millions of colors and beauty galore,
she thinks of one life; unlived forevermore.
How saddening it is to watch the beauty fall.

Dreams of moutains topped with snow and fog,
rising above them all, with smiles upon each face.
No one knows the cost of what's left nor the cost of a heart,
for each one is too selfishly falling rapidly apart.
With rainbows of color galore.

Butterflies they die off, one by one so slowly.
No beauty is left for joy or happiness.
It's but a life unlived paved with dirt,
surrounded by trees with moss about.
But, how wonderful it would be for all to happy.

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Surely not my best.
Lol. :|

Its fine dear :-) mine surely wasn't me best either. haha!

Okay this contest is closed... sense it is only two poems i am going to analyze them closely to decide whos i would like to have for first place.. i will have them judged in about a week and i will private message you both the results so you so you guys will not need to continually look for this post :-)

-Terra